Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and grammar errors (e.g., tense and articles).

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, there were several playgrounds and small amusement parks near my home, so I visited them often and enjoyed playing on the swings and carousels.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence and one or two specific reasons with linking words. Correct grammar (infinitive forms, subject-verb agreement) and avoid awkward phrases like “workaholic culture.”

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy visiting parks, but for different reasons now. For instance, I go there to exercise and to relax after long workdays, which helps me stay fit and maintain a better work–life balance.

Sugestão: Answer directly and give a specific reason with clearer phrasing. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about what you mean by “recreational activities” and “better surrounding.”

Exemplo: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they can offer recreational facilities for families. For example, parks like Nehru Place have play areas, walking paths and open lawns, which create a pleasant environment for people to relax and socialize.

Sugestão: Start with a direct topic sentence and give concrete details (name, distance, activities). Fix grammar (future phrasing and prepositions) and keep it concise with linking words.

Exemplo: Yes, I plan to visit a few parks in the future, especially Children Park, which is about 27 kilometres from my home. It reportedly has many play areas and attractions, so I want to explore those facilities when I have time.

× Yes, I like the lot.

✓ Yes, I liked it a lot.

The student is talking about childhood (past), so present tense 'like' is incorrect; use past 'liked'. Also 'the lot' is incorrect collocation; 'a lot' is the correct adverbial phrase. Use: 'liked' + 'it a lot'.

× I used to go to the park when I was a child and I enjoyed a lot and lots of playgrounds and amusement parks are near to my house that time and I enjoyed it.

✓ I used to go to the park when I was a child, and I enjoyed it a lot; many playgrounds and amusement parks were near my house at that time.

Multiple errors: tense consistency and word order. 'Used to' requires past context, so follow with past 'enjoyed'. 'Enjoyed a lot' is awkward; use 'enjoyed it a lot'. 'Are near to my house that time' mixes present 'are' with past 'that time'; change to past 'were near my house at that time'. Remove unnecessary 'to' after 'near' and replace 'lots of' with 'many' for formality.

× Yes, I still like to going to parks now and now the motive to go parks are different because now I want to be fit and to be enthusiastic in my workaholic culture and balance my lifestyle.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks now, and my reasons for going to parks are different because now I want to be fit, stay energetic despite my workaholic lifestyle, and balance my life.

After 'like' use the gerund 'going' not 'to going'. 'The motive to go parks are' has several issues: use plural 'reasons' and 'for going to parks' with preposition 'to' after 'going'. Subject-verb agreement: 'reasons ... are' is correct here. 'Be enthusiastic in my workaholic culture' is unnatural; 'stay energetic despite my workaholic lifestyle' is clearer.

× So reason is different now.

✓ So my reasons are different now.

Missing determiner and subject-verb agreement: use 'my reasons are' not 'reason is'. Context needs plural 'reasons' matching previous sentence.

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because I had somewhere that there is so many recreational activities also introduced in some parks like Nehru Place and N Place and I would like to go there and visit sometimes to have a better surrounding.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because I have heard that many recreational activities were introduced in some parks like Nehru Place and N Place, and I would like to visit them sometimes to enjoy a better environment.

Tense and modality: 'I had somewhere that' is incorrect; likely meant 'I have heard that'. Use 'many' not 'so many' for neutral correction. 'Introduced in some parks' fits past passive 'were introduced'. 'Go there and visit sometimes' is redundant; use 'visit them sometimes'. 'Surrounding' should be 'environment'.

× Yes, there are some parks I would like to go there in future, like Children Park, which is 27 kilometers away from my house and there is plenty of play activities out there and I want to explore them.

✓ Yes, there are some parks I would like to go to in the future, like Children Park, which is 27 kilometres away from my house; there are plenty of play activities there, and I want to explore them.

'Go there in future' is unidiomatic: use 'go to in the future'. Remove redundant 'there' after 'go'. 'There is plenty of play activities' mixes singular 'is' with plural 'activities'—use 'there are plenty of play activities' or better 'plenty of play activities there'. Use consistent 'there' placement and punctuation; 'kilometres' spelling may vary but keep consistent.