Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be concise and correct grammar; start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid vague phrases and redundant statements. Also use correct nouns (e.g. 'swings' not 'sewings') and singular/plural agreement.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, I enjoyed the swings and playground equipment, and I often played games with other children there. Because it was a lively, safe place for families to meet, visiting the park always made my day better.

Sugestão: Begin with a direct topic sentence, then contrast past and present with linking words (e.g. 'however', 'now'). Reduce hesitations and filler words, use correct verb forms and pluralization, and keep to two or three concise supporting sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, but for different reasons now. Whereas I used to visit parks mainly to play with friends, I now go there to run and enjoy the quiet. This peaceful atmosphere helps me relax after a busy day.

Sugestão: Answer directly and clearly: state your opinion, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Fix grammatical errors (subject-verb agreement, article use) and avoid filler phrases like 'you know'. Be specific about benefits (safety, play space, green areas).

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. More parks would give children safe places to play and families areas to relax, and they would also increase green space, improving air quality and people’s wellbeing.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence naming the park, then give one or two specific reasons why you want to visit. Use correct tense and concise phrasing; avoid repetition. Mention a detail or planned activity to make the answer more vivid.

Exemplo: Yes, I’d love to visit Central Park in New York. It’s famous for its large green spaces and lakes, and I want to try boating on the lake and walk the scenic paths. Visiting would be a dream because I enjoy big urban parks and outdoor activities.

× Yes, I like going to park as a child as there are a lot of sewings, machines, playgrounds.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks as a child because there were a lot of swings, machines, and playgrounds.

The sentence refers to a past habit (childhood), so use past tense 'liked' and 'were'. 'Park' should be plural or 'the park'; here 'parks' fits general meaning. 'Sewings' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'swings'. Also add missing articles and commas for clarity.

× There are a lot of children with whom I can play and families who connect to each other and spend a time with each other, which is a very positive way of spending my day in a somewhere as part brings positive effect to me.

✓ There were a lot of children to play with and families who spent time together, which made my days enjoyable and had a positive effect on me.

Use past tense to match childhood context. 'With whom I can play' is wordy; 'to play with' is natural. 'Spend a time with each other' is ungrammatical; use 'spent time together'. 'In a somewhere as part' is unclear and removed. Replace 'brings positive effect to me' with 'had a positive effect on me'. Pronouns and phrasing adjusted for clarity.

× Honestly I do like going to park, but now it's for a different reason.

✓ Honestly, I do like going to parks, but now it's for a different reason.

When speaking generally about parks use plural 'parks' or 'the park'. Present tense 'do like' is acceptable here, but add comma after 'Honestly' for natural flow.

× I go to park for running and walking, but before I used to go park for enjoying and spending my times with my friends, but now it's just me, the park, The Walking and uh, quiet moment which I quite like there.

✓ I go to the park for running and walking, but before I used to go to the park to have fun and spend time with my friends; now it's just me, the park, walking, and quiet moments, which I quite like.

Add 'the' before 'park' for a specific place. Use 'go to the park' not 'go park'. Use 'to have fun' instead of 'for enjoying'. 'Spending my times' should be 'spend time'. Capitalization error 'The Walking' fixed to 'walking'. Improve punctuation and parallel structure.

× As I live in a city which have more buildings than parks and I think I would like to see my city more my city with more parks because may parks being positive affect, you know, the for children.

✓ As I live in a city which has more buildings than parks, I would like to see my city with more parks because parks have a positive effect on children.

Subject-verb agreement: 'city which have' should be 'city which has'. Remove duplicated phrase 'more my city'. 'May parks' is incorrect; use 'parks'. 'Being positive affect' is ungrammatical; use 'have a positive effect on'. Simplify sentence structure for clarity.

× It's like a place, it's like a safe place where children can have fun and you.

✓ It's a safe place where children can have fun and be safe.

Original sentence ends abruptly with 'and you' which is incomplete. Simplify to state clearly that it's a safe place where children can have fun and be safe. Improve parallelism.

× There is this New York park I really want to visit there.

✓ There is a park in New York that I really want to visit.

'There is ... there' is redundant. Use 'a park in New York that' to convey location. Also 'New York park' is ambiguous; 'park in New York' is clearer.

× It's like a huge park and I always had a dream about to visit there.

✓ It's a huge park and I've always dreamed about visiting it.

Use present perfect 'I've always dreamed' to express a continuing desire. 'Dreamed about visiting it' uses correct gerund after 'about'. Remove extraneous 'to' before 'visit' and 'there' replaced by 'it'.

× I would make sure to make my that dream come true and I will once visit that park and enjoy the fullest.

✓ I will make sure that my dream comes true and I will visit that park one day and enjoy it to the fullest.

Fix word order: 'make sure that my dream comes true'. Use simple future 'I will visit' and natural phrase 'one day'. 'Enjoy it to the fullest' is the correct idiom.

× There are a lot of parks I want to visit but this is the park I really want to visit one day, hope I will.

✓ There are a lot of parks I want to visit, but this is the one I really hope to visit one day.

Keep present tense for current wishes: 'I want' is fine. Combine clauses for fluency: 'this is the one I really hope to visit one day.' Remove redundant 'hope I will' and correct word order.