Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, avoid filler words (uh), and limit to 3–4 sentences. Use linking words (for example, and, also) correctly and give one or two specific details about activities or facilities.

Exemplo: Yes. I loved going to parks as a child. I often visited Chinese City Park in my hometown, where there was a large playground with swings and slides. I also enjoyed craft activities held there, such as sand painting, which I did with my friends.

Sugestão: Use present simple for general likes, remove awkward phrases like "in nowadays", and be more concise. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give one specific reason and an example of what you do to relax.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. Because my life and work are very busy, I often visit a nearby park to relax and enjoy nature, for example by sitting on a bench and listening to birds.

Sugestão: The answer is confusing and contradictory. Answer directly first (Yes/No), then explain clearly. Avoid fillers and check logic: if there are not many parks, you would want more. Use linking words to make contrast clear.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there are currently very few. However, I am also interested in visiting famous parks in other places, such as those in Taipei, Japan or Singapore.

Sugestão: Be precise and reduce repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the park, then give two concise reasons (fame, location) with one supporting detail. Avoid hesitations and redundant phrases.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit Battery Park in New York. It is one of the city's most famous parks and lies beside the harbour, offering great views of the water and the Statue of Liberty, which is why I want to go.

× Oh, yes. I like to go to parks when I was a child, uh, in my childhood, I always go to the Chinese City Park, uh, in my hometown.

✓ Oh, yes. I liked going to parks when I was a child. In my childhood, I always went to the Chinese City Park in my hometown.

The sentence mixes past and present tense: 'like' and 'go' are present but referring to past time 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'liked' and 'went' for past habitual actions. Also split into clearer sentences and remove filler words for fluency.

× And at there I can play at the playground at there.

✓ And there I could play on the playground.

The phrase 'at there' is incorrect; use 'there'. For playing on playground surfaces, use preposition 'on'. Also change 'can' to 'could' to match past tense context.

× There are many facilities that I can play on it.

✓ There were many facilities I could play on.

Use past tense 'were' and 'could' to match past context. Remove redundant 'that' and 'it'. Use preposition 'on' correctly with 'play on'.

× And also there are several activities such as, uh, send sand paintings, uh, held in the park.

✓ There were also several activities held in the park, such as sand-painting workshops.

Original sentence has word order and vocabulary problems: 'send sand paintings' is incorrect. Use passive 'held in the park' placed after 'activities' and use a clear noun phrase 'sand-painting workshops'. Match past tense 'were'.

× Yes, I still like to go to the parks now because in nowadays my life and my work are really busy, so I would like to go to a park and relax to feel some of the nature in the park.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks now because nowadays my life and work are really busy, so I like to go to a park to relax and enjoy nature.

Use 'like going' for habitual preference. 'Nowadays' replaces incorrect 'in nowadays'. Use present tense consistently. 'Would like' implies future desire; here simple present 'like to go' or 'like going' fits. Use 'enjoy nature' instead of 'feel some of the nature' for natural phrasing.

× Uh, no, because uh, they are not many parks in my city, uh, but I would like to see more parks in other cities such as uh, Taipei or even the parks in different countries, for example Japan and Singapore.

✓ No. There are not many parks in my city, but I would like to see more parks in other cities such as Taipei or in other countries, for example Japan and Singapore.

Replace 'they are not many parks' with 'there are not many parks' to correct subject and existential 'there'. Remove filler 'uh'. Use 'in other countries' for clarity. Maintain future desire with 'would like' is acceptable.

× Uh, yes, I would like to visit the park in, uh, New York. The, that name of the park is called Battery Park and I want to visit that park because I think that park is the most, one of the most famous park in the world and it's close to the harbour of uh, New York City.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit a park in New York called Battery Park. I want to visit it because I think it is one of the most famous parks in the world and it is close to the harbor of New York City.

Remove fillers and correct article and noun forms: use 'a park' then specify 'called Battery Park'. 'That name of the park is called' is ungrammatical. Use 'it' as pronoun. Use plural 'parks' with 'one of the most famous' and correct 'harbour' spelling optional; 'harbor' or 'harbour' depends on variety but keep consistency. Use present tense 'is' for general facts.

× So I would like to go there in the future.

✓ So I would like to go there in the future.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable. 'Would like to' correctly expresses a future desire; no change needed.