Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make verb tenses consistent, avoid filler words, and give a clear topic sentence followed by two brief supporting details. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to connect ideas and be specific (mention an activity or a memory). Keep it under five sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child because I often went there with my parents to have picnics and play games. For example, we would spread a blanket under a big tree and fly a kite while watching other families nearby. Those visits made me feel happy and peaceful because I loved being outdoors.

Sugestão: Keep tense consistent (use present for current habits), start with a clear topic sentence, and vary vocabulary to avoid repetition. Add a linking word to explain why the parks help you relax, and be slightly more specific about frequency or routine.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, especially after work, because they help me unwind. For instance, I usually sit on a bench with a cup of coffee and watch people walking and the sunset; this routine calms me and gives me fresh energy for the evening.

Sugestão: Avoid repeating phrases (e.g., "I'd love"). Start with a direct answer, then provide two concise reasons using linking words (for example, because, so). Be specific about what features you want in new parks (benches, shaded areas, walking paths) and why they matter.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide quiet spaces to relax. In particular, I prefer parks with benches under trees and walking paths, so I can sit with a coffee and enjoy the view or take a short walk after work.

Sugestão: Answer directly and avoid contradicting phrases (saying "no" then "however" is okay but keep it concise). Use comparative language correctly (less crowded) and add a brief reason with linking words. Limit to two or three sentences and vary vocabulary slightly.

Exemplo: I don't have a particular park in mind, but I would like to visit a less crowded, scenic park in the future. Such a place would be ideal for sitting with a coffee and relaxing after work because it would be peaceful and refreshing.

× I like going to parks when I was a child.

✓ I liked going to parks when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present tense 'like' with the past time phrase 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'liked' to match the time frame. Suggestion: maintain consistent tense by using past tense for past time references.

× This.

✓ (Remove 'This' or replace with 'Especially'.)

The fragment 'This.' is incomplete and unclear. It may be an attempted connector. Either remove it or use a complete connector such as 'Especially' to join the next sentence. Sentences must have clear meaning and proper structure.

× Especially when I am with my parents, we usually go there to watch the scenery.

✓ Especially when I was with my parents, we usually went there to enjoy the scenery.

The clause 'when I am with my parents' uses present tense while the context is past ('as a child'). Change to past 'was' and make the main verb past 'went'. 'Enjoy the scenery' is more natural than 'watch the scenery'. Keep tense consistent.

× I'd love to look at the trees, the people that are roaming around.

✓ I loved looking at the trees and the people who were roaming around.

In a past context, use past tense 'loved' and past progressive 'were roaming'. Use 'who' for people rather than 'that'. Also 'looking at' is more natural than 'to look at' when listing activities remembered.

× It made me feel happy and at peace whenever we're there.

✓ It made me feel happy and at peace whenever we were there.

The sentence mixes past 'made' with present 'we're'. Change 'we're' to past 'we were' to maintain tense agreement between clauses.

× Yes. As I grew older, I loved going to parks, especially after work.

✓ Yes. As I grew older, I liked going to parks, especially after work.

'As I grew older' refers to a general change over time; using 'liked' (simple past) or present 'I like' could both work depending on meaning. Here 'loved' is strong and implies a single past; 'liked' is more neutral. Keep tense consistent with following examples. Suggestion: use 'I liked' for past habits or 'I like' for current habit.

× For example, I would go there to drink a cup of coffee, watch the people around and appreciate the scenery.

✓ For example, I would go there to drink a cup of coffee, watch the people around, and appreciate the scenery.

The sentence is mostly correct but needs a comma before 'and' for clarity in a list (Oxford comma optional). The verbs 'drink', 'watch', 'appreciate' are correct in infinitive after 'to' when expressing purpose with 'would go'. Suggest adding the comma for clarity.

× It made me feel calm and energized after work.

✓ It made me feel calm and energized after work.

This sentence is correct grammatically. No change needed. Explanation: Past tense 'made' correctly matches the narrative; 'feel' is base form after 'made' and adjectives 'calm' and 'energized' correctly describe the state.

× Yes, I'd love to see more parks in the city.

✓ Yes, I'd love to see more parks in the city.

This sentence is grammatically correct. 'I'd love to' expresses desire appropriately. No change required.

× I'd love to go there specially when there is a bench near the trees so that I could appreciate the view.

✓ I'd love to go there especially when there is a bench near the trees so that I can appreciate the view.

Use 'especially' (not 'specially') to mean 'particularly'. Also match present/future modal sense: 'could' implies past; use 'can' after 'there is' to express general ability to appreciate the view in that situation.

× I also would want to go there and sip a cup of coffee and relax after work because I feel energized after.

✓ I would also want to go there to sip a cup of coffee and relax after work because I feel energized afterwards.

Reorder 'would also' for naturalness. Use 'to sip' for purpose and 'afterwards' (or 'after') instead of 'after' at sentence end. 'Feel energized afterwards' clarifies the timing. Keep modality consistent.

× No, there isn't a specific park that I would love to see.

✓ No, there isn't a specific park that I would like to see.

Using 'would love to' with 'isn't' is slightly awkward but not strictly wrong; 'would like to' matches the conditional nuance better. The main grammar point is acceptable; suggestion improves naturalness.

× However, I'd love to go to a park where there is lesser crowd and a scenic view.

✓ However, I'd love to go to a park where there is less crowd and a scenic view.

Use 'less' (not 'lesser') with uncountable nouns like 'crowd' or better 'fewer' with countable 'people'. More natural: 'where there are fewer people and a scenic view.' Suggestion: 'fewer people' is preferred.

× I'd love to go there in order for me to have coffee and feel a bit more relaxed after work.

✓ I'd love to go there in order to have coffee and feel a bit more relaxed after work.

Use 'in order to' (not 'in order for me to') when the subject is the same in both clauses. The infinitive 'to have' expresses purpose. Removing 'for me' avoids redundancy.