Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and avoid fillers and repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details (activities, memories) using a linking word. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they gave me a sense of freedom. For example, I often played football with my friends there and climbed trees to relax after a long school day. As a result, parks remain one of my fondest childhood memories.

Sugestão: Clarify tense and avoid incomplete sentences. Begin with a direct answer, then explain briefly when and why you go, using linking words. Correct grammar (present simple/continuous) and remove unnecessary words.

Exemplo: Yes, I still like going to parks, but my schedule is busy because I have a full‑time internship. Therefore, I usually visit the park early in the morning, around 5:00 or 5:30, when it is peaceful and quiet.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence and two concrete reasons with correct grammar and vocabulary. Use linking words (for example, because, and) and avoid vague endings.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they improve air quality and create safe spaces for children to play. Moreover, parks give residents places to exercise and relax, which benefits public health.

Sugestão: Give a clear direct answer, state the specific park or area and explain why you want to visit with correct tense and linking words. Avoid awkward phrasing like “Dwarka side” and fix grammar.

Exemplo: I would like to visit the parks in Dwarka in the future, which are about an hour's drive from my home. I want to explore them because I’ve heard they are well maintained and have interesting trails and lakes that would make for a pleasant day out.

× Yes, of course, I like to spend my time, uh, in parks as a child because it gives me a sense of freedom and uh, it was the, it was time to relax after a long, hectic school day and I, I used to play in parks a lot.

✓ Yes, of course, I liked to spend my time in parks as a child because they gave me a sense of freedom; it was a time to relax after a long, hectic school day, and I used to play in parks a lot.

The speaker mixes present tense 'I like' with reference to childhood. For past habitual actions about childhood, use past tense 'liked' and 'gave'. Also 'parks' is plural so use 'they gave' or rephrase; clarified sentence flow by removing filler and adjusting punctuation.

× Well, nowadays I have a very busy schedule because I used to go for internship which includes a full time role.

✓ Well, nowadays I have a very busy schedule because I am doing an internship that includes a full-time role.

'Used to' indicates a past habit and conflicts with 'nowadays'. For a current internship, use present continuous 'am doing' or simple present. Also use 'an internship' with article and hyphenate 'full-time'.

× So I prefer going to parks in early in the morning at somewhat around 5:00 or 5:30 and I.

✓ So I prefer going to parks early in the morning, around 5:00 or 5:30.

Sentence ended abruptly with 'and I.' which is incomplete (sentence structure error). Removed extra 'in' and 'somewhat' and completed phrase. 'Prefer going' is acceptable; cleaned up to be concise and grammatically complete.

× Of course, I like to see more parks in my city as it can help to provide a better air quality and provides the space for kids to play and unwind their.

✓ Of course, I would like to see more parks in my city because they can help provide better air quality and provide space for kids to play and unwind.

'I like to see more parks' is better as 'I would like to see more parks' (politeness/intent). 'A better air quality' is incorrect article/quantifier use; use 'better air quality' without 'a'. 'Provides the space' should match plural subject 'they' so use 'provide'. 'Unwind their' is incorrect; 'unwind' does not take a possessive pronoun here, so remove 'their'.

× Mostly I have covered all of the parks near my home but in future I would like to explore new parks in Dwarka side.

✓ I've mostly visited all the parks near my home, but in the future I would like to explore new parks on the Dwarka side.

'Have covered' is informal; use 'have visited' for parks. Added contraction 'I've' or full 'I have'. 'In future' should be 'in the future'. 'Dwarka side' needs a preposition 'on the' or 'in the' and article 'the' before 'Dwarka side'.

× It is one hour drive from my home and I wanted to go there for have a great experience.

✓ It is a one-hour drive from my home, and I want to go there to have a great experience.

'One hour drive' needs an article and hyphens: 'a one-hour drive'. 'I wanted' indicates past desire; context asks about future plans so use 'I want' or 'I would like'. 'to go there for have' is incorrect verb structure; use 'to have' after 'to go there'.