Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is natural and relevant with good feelings and memories, but it's slightly redundant (repeating 'loved') and a little long. Aim for a clear topic sentence, one or two supporting details, and use varied vocabulary. Replace repeated words, remove filler phrases, and keep to 2–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. Walking there with my parents made me feel relaxed, and I often played games with friends, which created many happy memories.

Sugestão: Good direct response and reason given; you use a specific habit (walking after meals) which strengthens the answer. Improve by tightening phrasing, avoiding vague phrases like 'as much as possible', and using a linking phrase to connect idea and reason.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy visiting parks. For example, I usually walk there for about 30 minutes after meals because it helps digestion and clears my mind.

Sugestão: Clear opinion and reason provided, but some repetition and minor grammar issues ('greens space' and double 'so'). Use one concise reason, correct word choice, and add a brief suggestion or benefit to make it more specific.

Exemplo: Yes. My city is very congested and lacks green space, so adding more parks would improve air quality and give residents places to relax.

Sugestão: You named a specific park, which is good, but the answer contains hesitations, repetition and awkward phrasing ('it's it'll', 'And yeah'). Make a concise topic sentence, give one or two specific reasons why you want to go, and avoid fillers.

Exemplo: I'd love to visit Central Park in New York City because it's a huge urban oasis with famous sights like the Great Lawn and picturesque walking paths; visiting there would feel unique amid the city's energy.

× I did love going to parks as a child because I loved being in nature and just walking around with my parents.

✓ I loved going to parks as a child because I loved being in nature and walking around with my parents.

Using 'did love' with simple past is unnecessary and sounds emphatic; simple past 'loved' is appropriate. Also 'just walking around' can be simplified to 'walking around' for natural flow. Suggestion: use simple past for habitual past actions without extra emphasis.

× It just made me feel really relaxed and sometimes I often hung out with my friends at parks, which is still a very precious memory for me.

✓ It made me feel really relaxed, and I often hung out with my friends at parks, which is still a very precious memory for me.

The sentence contains redundant adverbs 'sometimes' and 'often' together; choose one. Also 'just' is unnecessary. Place the adverb 'often' before the verb 'hung out'. Suggestion: remove redundancy and position adverbs before main verbs.

× I definitely love going to parks nowadays, especially after I eat food.

✓ I definitely love going to parks nowadays, especially after I eat.

'Eat food' is redundant in English; 'eat' alone suffices. Tense 'nowadays' with present simple 'love' is correct. Suggestion: remove unnecessary noun to make phrasing natural.

× I heard walking for about 30 minutes after meals is very healthy for you, so I try my best to go outside and take a walk at the park as much as possible.

✓ I heard that walking for about 30 minutes after meals is very healthy, so I try my best to go outside and walk in the park as much as possible.

Add 'that' after 'heard' for clarity. 'Take a walk at the park' is less natural than 'walk in the park'. Also remove second-person 'for you' to keep it general. Suggestion: use 'heard that' and prefer 'walk in the park'.

× Yes, because I think the city I'm living in is congested with all the traffic and it's very urbanized, so there is not much greens space out there.

✓ Yes, because I think the city I'm living in is congested with traffic and very urbanized, so there is not much green space there.

'All the traffic' is acceptable but 'congested with traffic' is more natural. 'Greens space' is incorrect; correct collocation is 'green space' (uncountable). Use 'there' instead of 'out there' for brevity. Suggestion: use correct collocations and uncountable form 'green space'.

× So I think it'll be nice to have more parks in our town.

✓ So I think it would be nice to have more parks in our town.

In this context, expressing a preference or hypothetical desire, the conditional 'would' is more appropriate than the contraction 'it'll' (it will), which asserts a future certainty. Suggestion: use 'would' for polite or hypothetical statements.

× I would love to visit the Central Park in New York City.

✓ I would love to visit Central Park in New York City.

Use 'Central Park' without the definite article 'the' when naming this specific park. 'Would love to' correctly expresses desire. Suggestion: omit 'the' before proper names of parks.

× So that park is right in the center of the city.

✓ The park is right in the center of the city.

Beginning the sentence with 'So that park' is conversationally acceptable but redundant. Use 'The park' for clarity and conciseness. Suggestion: start with 'The park' to make the statement direct.

× And I think it's it'll be such an amazing and surreal experience to visit there because New York City is one of the coolest cities, I think.

✓ I think it would be such an amazing and surreal experience to visit because New York City is one of the coolest cities.

The phrase 'it's it'll' is ungrammatical (two contractions). Remove redundancy 'there' after 'visit' — 'visit New York' or 'visit it' is better. Use 'would' for hypothetical. Avoid repeating 'I think' twice. Suggestion: use single correct modal and avoid unnecessary repetitions.