Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Réduisez les hésitations et organisez la réponse : commencez par une phrase directe puis donnez 1–2 détails concrets. Utilisez des mots précis pour les activités (par exemple « swings », « picnics ») et évitez les répétitions. Travaillez la fluidité pour remplacer « umm » et « I don't know the name of activity » par des expressions claires.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. There were many activities to enjoy, such as playing on the swings and having picnics with my family. Those outings were fun and helped me make friends.

Sugestão: Clarifiez et structurez la réponse : donnez une phrase thème puis deux raisons précises. Éliminez les hésitations et corrigez l'expression « to change the air » par « to get some fresh air ». Mentionnez une habitude précise (e.g. frequency) et utilisez un connecteur (for example, because).

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they offer fresh air and peaceful walks. For example, I often walk there with my dog in the mornings, which helps me relax and exercise.

Sugestão: Répondez directement puis donnez des raisons claires et organisées. Remplacez les formulations confuses par des phrases simples : expliquez l'avantage environnemental et le souhait de diversité (different parks). Utilisez des connecteurs comme « because » et « so » correctement et mentionnez une conséquence ou préférence concrète.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they improve the environment and provide green spaces for people. I also prefer having different parks to visit so I can explore new areas instead of always going to the same place.

Sugestão: Structurer la réponse : commencez par une phrase claire (no specific park), puis ajoutez des préférences précises sur ce que vous recherchez (large green areas, flowers, playgrounds). Évitez les chiffres vagues comme « maybe 3 » et utilisez des adjectifs précis. Terminez par une conclusion courte.

Exemplo: I don't have a particular park in mind at the moment, but I would like to visit parks that have large green areas and many flowers. I would also enjoy parks with walking paths and a playground for my dog.

× Yes, of course, because we're in the park, we have different activity.

✓ Yes, of course, because when I was in the park, we had different activities.

The student used 'we're in the park' which mixes present tense with a past habit; change to 'when I was in the park' or 'when I went to the park' to match meaning. 'Activity' should be plural 'activities' to agree with 'different'. Also adjust pronoun to 'I' or keep 'we' consistently; here 'I' fits the speaker's personal experience.

× We can do it like I don't know the name of activity.

✓ We could do many activities, like games or sports; I don't know the name of some of them.

The original sentence misuses the article before 'activity' and has unclear structure. Use 'activities' plural and provide examples or say 'I don't know the name of some of them'. 'It' is unnecessary; rephrase for clarity.

× Yes, of course. Uh, I like to go into parks, umm, to walk, uh, to change the, the to change the air.

✓ Yes, of course. I like to go to parks to walk and to get some fresh air.

'Go into parks' is awkward; use 'go to parks'. 'To change the air' is incorrect English; use 'to get some fresh air'. Maintain present simple 'I like' for current habitual actions.

× We have fresh air in the park.

✓ There is fresh air in parks.

Use 'There is' to introduce existence of 'fresh air'. 'We have fresh air' is grammatical but less natural; 'There is fresh air in the park' or plural 'parks' fits the general statement.

× Uh, maybe I think umm, I take uh, my dog.

✓ Maybe I take my dog with me.

Verb tense and construction: use 'Maybe I take my dog' is acceptable but more natural is 'Maybe I take my dog with me' or 'I take my dog along'. Keep present simple for habitual actions.

× Yes, of course, uh, because the park is uh, good of our environment and umm, uh, to change, maybe I go to park, uh, I go several, uh, time to one same park.

✓ Yes, of course, because parks are good for the environment. I like to change which park I visit; I sometimes go to the same park several times.

'Good of our environment' is incorrect; use 'good for the environment'. 'To change' is unclear—explain changing which park you visit. 'Go to park' needs article 'the' or 'a' and 'one same park' is unnatural; use 'the same park' or 'one particular park'. Use plural 'parks' for general statements.

× So I like to change.

✓ So I like to change parks sometimes.

The original is vague; clarify what is being changed. Use present simple 'I like' for habitual preference and add object 'parks' and adverb 'sometimes' for natural expression.

× Actually I don't have a special park that I wanted to go, it's in future.

✓ Actually, I don't have a particular park I want to go to in the future.

Mixes past 'wanted' with future meaning. Use present 'want' for future intention. Place preposition 'to' after 'go'. 'Particular' or 'special' is fine; reorder for correct English.

× But most important there is a lot of maybe 3 and green space and flowers.

✓ But most importantly, there are several green spaces and flowers — maybe three or so.

Use 'most importantly' as adverbial phrase. 'There is a lot of maybe 3' is ungrammatical; use 'there are several' or 'maybe three'. 'Green space' should be plural 'green spaces' if more than one. Ensure subject-verb agreement with 'there are'.

× That's all.

✓ That's all.

This sentence is acceptable as a closing remark. No change needed.