Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly explain with one or two specific supporting details. Avoid fillers like “to be honest with you” which reduce fluency. Also correct small grammar issues (e.g., say “go to parks” or “go to the park”) and choose more precise verbs.

Exemplo: Not really. I didn’t enjoy going to the park as a child because my father made me sit and draw trees, which felt like a chore. As a result, I associated parks with work rather than fun.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence and correct small grammar and phrasing errors (e.g., “I like going there” and “the hectic pace of modern life”). Use a linking phrase to add one specific detail about what you do there to support your answer.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. There is a park near my house where I go to relax and escape the hectic pace of modern life; for example, I often sit on a bench and read or take a slow walk, which helps me feel calm and refreshed.

Sugestão: This answer is clear and well structured. To improve further, use a linking word to connect ideas (e.g., “because” is good) and give one specific example of park facilities or a short result to strengthen your point. Keep sentences varied and concise.

Exemplo: Yes, I would. I think the government should invest more in parks because they encourage exercise and social interaction; for instance, playgrounds and walking paths can help families stay active and reduce stress.

Sugestão: Be specific and avoid vague or repetitive phrases. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the park and why you want to visit. Remove awkward expressions (“one of my favorite hobbies,” “become splendid in the air”) and correct grammar. Mention a concrete activity you want to try and explain briefly why.

Exemplo: Yes. I’d like to visit Najul Ballore Park with my husband because it offers many adventurous activities. For example, I want to try bungee jumping there since I enjoy challenging experiences and the thrill of being high above the ground.

× To be honest with you, I was not fond of going to the parks because my father used to force me to draw pictures and paintings of trees in my notebook and I found it quite boring.

✓ To be honest with you, I was not fond of going to parks because my father used to force me to draw pictures and paintings of trees in my notebook, and I found it quite boring.

Use of the definite article 'the' before 'parks' is unnecessary when speaking generally about parks; use the plural noun without an article. Also add a comma before 'and' to separate clauses for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'going to parks' when referring to parks in general and include punctuation to separate coordinated clauses.

× Absolutely, I'm keen on going and visiting the parks and there is a park near my house.

✓ Absolutely, I'm keen on going to and visiting parks, and there is a park near my house.

The phrase 'keen on going and visiting the parks' is awkward: 'keen on' should be followed by a gerund phrase; use 'going to and visiting parks' for parallel structure. Also remove 'the' before the general noun 'parks'. Keep 'there is a park near my house' as a specific reference. Suggestion: Use parallel gerunds after 'keen on' and drop the definite article when speaking generally.

× I like go there to escape from hectic pace of modern life and actually it gives me sense of relaxation and satisfaction.

✓ I like going there to escape from the hectic pace of modern life, and actually it gives me a sense of relaxation and satisfaction.

After 'like' use the -ing form 'going' (verb + -ing). Also 'hectic pace' needs the definite article 'the' and 'a sense' requires the indefinite article 'a'. Add a comma before 'and' to join clauses. Suggestion: Use 'like going', include appropriate articles: 'the hectic pace' and 'a sense'.

× Yes, actually I think governments should invest more in developing parks because people go there and exercise and do physical activities.

✓ Yes, actually I think governments should invest more in developing parks because people go there to exercise and do physical activities.

Parallel structure and infinitive use: after 'go there' use 'to' + verb when expressing purpose: 'go there to exercise'. Omitting 'to' makes the clause ungrammatical. Suggestion: Use 'go there to exercise' to express purpose.

× It helps them to improve their mental and physical well-being and it's like a break from their daily routine.

✓ It helps them improve their mental and physical well-being, and it's like a break from their daily routine.

Omit the unnecessary 'to' after 'helps' when followed by another verb in bare infinitive form: both 'helps them improve' and 'helps them to improve' are acceptable, but more natural is 'helps them improve'. Added comma for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'helps them improve' for conciseness.

× Yes, I like to go to Najul Ballore Park with my husband.

✓ Yes, I would like to go to Najul Ballore Park with my husband.

'Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?' asks about a future desire; use 'would like' to express a planned or desired future action rather than simple present 'like to go', which suggests a general preference. Suggestion: Use 'would like to go' to express future intentions or desires.

× It's one of my favorite hobbies.

✓ Visiting parks is one of my favorite activities.

Calling a specific park visit 'one of my favorite hobbies' is awkward and unclear: 'hobby' usually refers to an activity pursued regularly. Recast the sentence to identify the activity: 'Visiting parks is one of my favorite activities.' Suggestion: Rephrase to match meaning and natural collocation: 'Visiting parks' and 'activities'.

× Umm, it would offer wide range of entertaining activities.

✓ Umm, it would offer a wide range of entertaining activities.

The phrase 'wide range' requires the indefinite article 'a'. Without 'a' the phrase is ungrammatical. Suggestion: Use 'a wide range of'.

× And I like to try bungee jumping because I like to become splendid in the air and fly through the air.

✓ And I would like to try bungee jumping because I want to feel exhilarated in the air and fly through it.

Responding about future desire, 'would like to try' is more appropriate than 'like to try'. 'Become splendid in the air' is unidiomatic; use 'feel exhilarated' or 'feel splendid'. Repetition 'fly through the air' is awkward; 'fly through it' or simply 'fly' is tighter. Also prefer 'want to' for clear intention. Suggestion: Use 'would like to try' for future desire, choose idiomatic verbs like 'feel exhilarated', and avoid repetition.'