Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid irrelevant statements (e.g., about having no friends) and reduce hesitations and repetitions. Use linking words for clarity (for example, "because" or "so").

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I was quite introverted, so I often played alone; for example, I spent hours on the seesaw because it was my favorite and made me feel happy and relaxed.

Sugestão: Give a clear yes/no or qualified response first, then explain briefly with specific reason and a linking word such as "because" or "although." Avoid repetitions and finish the sentence. Mention current activities that replace park time concisely.

Exemplo: I still like parks, but I don't visit them as often now because I'm busy and I usually play basketball instead, which I prefer for exercise and socializing.

Sugestão: Answer directly and give one clear reason with specific detail. Avoid vague phrases and filler words. Replace vague statement "my CD is really small" with precise language like "my city is small" and say why more parks would help (e.g., recreation, green space).

Exemplo: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because it is quite small and currently lacks green spaces; more parks would provide places for exercise and relaxation for residents.

Sugestão: Give a clear answer and name a specific park or type of park you want to visit, then give one concrete reason using a linking word (e.g., "because" or "so"). Avoid trailing off and finish your thought. Keep it to one or two sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit the new riverside park near the city center because it looks peaceful and has walking paths where I can relax after a busy week.

× Yeah, I mean like, hi, I don't have friends actually.

✓ Yeah, I mean, I don't have many friends actually.

The original 'I don't have friends actually' is grammatically acceptable but sounds unnatural; using 'many friends' is more appropriate for countable plural noun and clarifies quantity. Replace 'hi' (irrelevant filler) with a pause or remove it. Suggestions: remove irrelevant filler words and use 'many friends' when talking about countable plural nouns.

× Like I'm very introvert, so I just go to a park and play.

✓ Like I'm very introverted, so I just go to a park and play.

'Introvert' is a noun; the adjectival form 'introverted' or phrase 'an introvert' should be used. Use 'very introverted' to describe personality. Suggestion: use correct adjective forms when describing states or traits.

× I just go to a park and play.

✓ I just go to the park and play.

When referring to a particular park that the speaker regularly visits, use the definite article 'the'. Use 'a park' only for any park in general. Suggestion: choose 'the' for a specific known place.

× I I really like the seesaw It it was my favorite one in the park and I play a lot with it.

✓ I really liked the seesaw. It was my favorite thing in the park, and I played with it a lot.

Tense and agreement issues: the sentence mixes present and past. Since the question asked about childhood, past tense is appropriate: 'liked' and 'played'. Also 'seesaw' is a single item, better phrased 'favorite thing' or 'favorite piece of equipment'. Suggestion: Keep consistent past tense when speaking about past habits or memories.

× I think it's still still in my mind, but I I don't really into it because I have more things to do now, especially I I play basketball and it was my favorite sport until now and.

✓ I think it's still in my mind, but I'm not really into it now because I have more things to do. I play basketball now and it has been my favorite sport until now.

Multiple issues: 'don't really into' misses verb 'am' and requires 'into' adjective construction 'not really into it'; tense consistency: use present continuous or present simple for current states. 'Was my favorite sport until now' should be 'has been my favorite sport until now' to indicate continuation to present. Suggestion: use 'am not really into it' and 'has been my favorite' for ongoing preference.

× Uh, yeah, because my CD is really small and it it doesn't have many parks or umm, I don't know.

✓ Uh, yeah, because my city is really small and it doesn't have many parks, or I'm not sure.

'CD' is likely a mispronunciation of 'city'; correct the noun. Remove repeated filler words. 'I don't know' is acceptable but 'I'm not sure' is more natural here. Suggestion: pronounce 'city' clearly and avoid fillers.

× Probably, I think I don't have a chance to go to any park recently because I'm really busy.

✓ Probably. I don't have a chance to go to any park recently because I've been really busy.

The adverb 'recently' pairs with present perfect tense to indicate recent experience: 'I've been really busy' or 'I haven't had a chance'. Use present perfect for actions affecting the present. Suggestion: use 'I haven't had a chance to go to any park recently' or 'I've been really busy' for recent situations.

× But yeah, I, I probably do. And I think that when I go to park I can really relax because.

✓ But yeah, I probably will. I think that when I go to the park, I can really relax.

Fragment and missing article: 'go to park' needs 'the'. 'I probably do' is vague; 'I probably will' fits future intent. The original ends with 'because' leaving the reason incomplete; remove 'because' or finish the clause. Suggestion: complete the reason or remove the trailing 'because', use 'the park', and 'I probably will' for future intention.