Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more grammatically correct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh), correct verb forms and express specific memories or activities to support your answer. Use one or two linking words to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went with my grandfather, my sister and my friends, and we would play games like hide-and-seek and feed the ducks, which made those visits really fun.

Sugestão: Give a brief direct answer then add a short reason with varied vocabulary. Avoid repeating the same phrase (“I love”) and consider a contrast linking word to show comparison.

Exemplo: Not really. I prefer cinemas and restaurants nowadays because I enjoy watching films on the big screen and trying different foods, whereas parks feel less exciting to me.

Sugestão: Answer directly and support with specific reasons or benefits. Use linking words (because, so, therefore) smoothly and avoid vague phrases like “somewhere else.” Mention specific advantages to strengthen the response.

Exemplo: Yes, I would. Because few people currently visit existing parks, building more green spaces would give families peaceful places to exercise, relax and socialize, which could improve the community’s health and atmosphere.

Sugestão: Be concise and avoid exaggeration and fillers. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons for each park you mention. Use linking words (also, especially) naturally and keep to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes. I would like to return to Central Park because I enjoyed its wide lawns and lakes, and I also want to visit Snowden National Park for its hiking trails and scenic views, especially with my family.

× Yes, I really loved to go to the parks as a child, uh 'cause there was so funny with my friends and I went there often with my grandfather and my sister.

✓ Yes, I really loved going to parks as a child because it was so fun with my friends, and I went there often with my grandfather and my sister.

Multiple errors: 1) 'loved to go' is acceptable but 'loved going' is more natural (Verb + -ing form, ID 8). 2) 'the parks' is unnecessary article; use plural without article when speaking generally (Article errors, ID 22). 3) 'there was so funny' is incorrect adjective/adverb use and sentence structure; should be 'it was so fun' (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs, ID 13; Sentence structure errors, ID 26). Suggested improvement: prefer 'loved going to parks' and use 'it was so fun' to describe the experience; connect clauses with commas and conjunctions for clarity.

× No, I prefer going to cinemas and restaurants because I love eating and I love watching movies.

✓ No, I prefer going to cinemas and restaurants because I love eating and watching movies.

Redundant repetition of 'I love' makes sentence wordy (Sentence structure errors, ID 26). Combine coordinated verbs 'eating and watching' after one 'love'. Also 'cinemas' and 'restaurants' are fine plural (Singular and plural issue, ID 1 not applicable). Suggested improvement: omit repeated subjects or verbs when possible to make speech more natural.

× Yes, I would love to because our society doesn't really go there.

✓ Yes, I would love to, because people in our community don't really go to parks.

Problems: vague noun 'our society' and missing object after 'go' (Incorrect use of pronouns, ID 12; There be/verb object issue/ sentence structure, ID 26). Also 'go there' is unclear; specify 'go to parks'. Suggested improvement: use 'people in our community' and include the destination 'to parks' for clarity.

× They prefer sitting at home or going somewhere else.

✓ They prefer staying at home or going somewhere else.

Word choice: 'sitting at home' is grammatically acceptable but 'staying at home' is more natural (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs/word choice, ID 13). No tense or agreement errors. Suggested improvement: use 'staying' for habitual preference contexts.

× So I think it would be great to add more peaceful places in our town.

✓ So I think it would be great to add more peaceful places to our town.

Preposition use: 'in our town' is acceptable, but after 'add' the more natural preposition is 'to' (Incorrect use of prepositions, ID 11). Suggested improvement: use 'add ... to our town' when saying add something to a place.

× In the future, I would like to visit the Central Park again because I loved it so much the first time that I would, uh, spend my whole life visiting this park.

✓ In the future, I would like to visit Central Park again because I loved it so much the first time that I would spend my whole life visiting it.

Articles and proper noun: 'the Central Park' is incorrect for a named park commonly called 'Central Park' (Incorrect use of the definite article, ID 17). Pronoun reference and redundancy: use 'it' instead of repeating 'this park' (Incorrect use of pronouns, ID 12). Also remove filler 'uh' and place commas properly (Sentence structure errors, ID 26). Suggested improvement: use correct proper name without 'the' and use pronoun 'it' for conciseness.

× Also, there is the Snowden National Park that I would love to visit in the future, uh, especially with my kids or my husband.

✓ Also, there is Snowden National Park that I would love to visit in the future, especially with my children or my husband.

Article use: 'there is the Snowden National Park' - when naming a park, omit 'the' or use 'the' consistently depending on name; 'Snowden National Park' likely does not need 'the' (Incorrect use of the definite article, ID 17). Word choice: 'kids' is informal; in formal speech 'children' is better (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs/word choice, ID 13). Remove filler 'uh' and adjust commas (Sentence structure errors, ID 26). Suggested improvement: say 'Snowden National Park' and 'my children' for clearer, more appropriate register.