Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Correct the grammar, articles and word choice; make a clear topic sentence and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. For example, use past tense: “Yes, I liked going to parks as a child,” and say what you did there: “because I played on swings and climbed trees.”

Exemplo: Yes, I liked going to parks as a child because I often played on the swings and climbed trees. For example, I usually went there on weekends with my friends, so we spent hours running and playing games.

Sugestão: Expand slightly with a reason using a linking word and keep it concise (no more than 5 sentences). Use present tense and choose precise vocabulary like “enjoy” or “prefer.”

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relax and get fresh air. For instance, I often walk there after work to clear my mind and exercise.

Sugestão: Clarify your position and correct grammar. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No + brief reason), then add a specific supporting detail with a linking word. If you mean you would like more parks but the government cannot build them, say that clearly.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because many neighborhoods lack green space. However, I know the local government has limited budgets, so it might be difficult to build new parks soon.

Sugestão: Answer the question directly with a topic sentence and give a specific example or plan using future tense and a linking word. Avoid unrelated remarks like “Good job!”

Exemplo: Yes, I plan to visit the new Riverside Park next month because it has a large lake and bicycle paths. For example, I want to try the cycling route there with my friend when the weather is nice.

× 'Yes, I like parts because I am play many time in parts.'

✓ 'Yes, I liked parks because I used to play in parks many times.'

'Original sentence has multiple errors: "parts" is a misspelling of "parks" and a plural/singular confusion; "I am play" incorrectly uses present continuous with base verb and is ungrammatical; "many time" should be plural "many times". The corrected version uses past tense "liked" to match the question asking about childhood, uses "used to" to indicate habitual past action, and places "many times" correctly. Suggestion: use "used to" or simple past for past habits, ensure plural nouns where appropriate, and use correct adverb plural form "many times".'

× 'Yes, I still like going to parks now.'

✓ 'Yes, I still like going to parks.'

'The original is grammatically acceptable but redundant: "still" and "now" together are unnecessary. Removing "now" keeps the present tense clear and natural. Suggestion: avoid redundant time expressions; use either "still" or "now".'

× 'No, our government cannot. Would like to see more parks in my city.'

✓ 'No. I don't think our government can. I would like to see more parks in my city.'

'Original sentences have incorrect modal verb usage and sentence fragments. "our government cannot" lacks an object and context; "cannot" should be followed by a base verb or rephrased. "Would like to see..." is missing the subject "I". The correction adds a subject and clarifies meaning: "I don't think our government can" and completes the request with "I would like..." Suggestion: always include subjects with modal verbs and avoid sentence fragments; when expressing desire, include "I would" or "I want".'

× 'Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?\nStudent: Good job!'

✓ 'Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?\nStudent: No specific parks, but I would like to visit new parks if the city builds more.'

'The transcript shows an irrelevant "Good job!" reply which does not answer the question; this is a sentence structure/content error in the student's response. The corrected reply answers the question directly and uses future conditional phrasing appropriate for plans or desires. Suggestion: answer the examiner's question directly, use "would like to" for polite future desires, and provide brief details.'