Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve grammar (tense and agreement), clarity and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, correct tense consistency, and give one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid unclear phrases like “They're under the cinema” and “Screenery.”

Exemplo: No, I didn't enjoy going to parks when I was a child. Instead, I preferred playing with my friends near the cinema because there were more activities and we could watch short films. Therefore, parks seemed boring to me at that time.

Sugestão: Good idea and relevant details, but refine language and avoid fillers. Use more precise vocabulary (quiet, peaceful) and tighten sentence structure. Add a linking phrase to connect reason and effect, and limit to at most 4–5 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, particularly when I'm stressed. The parks have many flowers and trees, and the atmosphere is very peaceful; as a result, I feel relaxed when I sit and eat there.

Sugestão: Clarify meaning and correct vocabulary. Start with a direct topic sentence, explain specific benefits of more parks (health, recreation, community) and remove unclear phrases like “broaden on the garment.” Use linking words (because, for example, furthermore) and provide one concrete example.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they offer green space for exercise and relaxation. For example, new parks could provide playgrounds for children and walking paths for older people, which would improve residents' mental and physical health.

Sugestão: Fix grammar and use precise descriptors. Use comparative or superlative correctly (e.g., one of the biggest), and give a specific reason or activity you want to do there. Keep answer concise and coherent with linking words like because or so.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit Central Park in New York because it is one of the biggest and most famous urban parks. I want to walk along the lakes, visit the gardens, and see the famous landmarks such as Bow Bridge.

× Actually, I don't like going to parks when I was a child because I just like to play with my friends.

✓ Actually, I didn't like going to parks when I was a child because I just liked to play with my friends.

The timeframe is in the past ('when I was a child'), so present tense verbs 'don't like' and 'like' are incorrect. Use past simple ('didn't like', 'liked') to match the past context. Suggestion: use past tense consistently for events or states that happened in childhood.

× They're under the cinema.

✓ We used to meet under the cinema.

The original sentence 'They're under the cinema' is unclear and lacks context and correct subject. Likely intent is to say 'We used to meet under the cinema' or 'My friends were waiting under the cinema.' This fixes subject reference and verb tense and makes the sentence meaningful. Suggestion: state who 'they' refers to and use past tense for childhood habits.

× Screenery was not interested for me.

✓ The scenery did not interest me.

The word 'screenery' is a misspelling of 'scenery', and the structure 'was not interested for me' is incorrect because 'interest' is a verb here. Use 'did not interest me' to express lack of interest. Suggestion: use correct spelling and active verb structure: 'did not interest me.'

× I still like going to parks now, especially when I feel stressed.

✓ I still like going to parks now, especially when I feel stressed.

No grammatical change needed. This sentence correctly uses present tense to describe a current habit and states a condition ('when I feel stressed'). Included here only to confirm tense is appropriate.

× Uh, in the park there are many flowers and trees and the atmosphere is very silent, so when you eat you can feel relaxed and calm.

✓ In the park there are many flowers and trees and the atmosphere is very quiet, so when you sit you can feel relaxed and calm.

'Silent' is usually used for people or moments; 'quiet' better describes atmosphere. 'When you eat' is odd in a park context; likely 'when you sit' or 'when you are there' fits. Also move 'very' to modify 'quiet' correctly. Suggestion: choose appropriate adjective ('quiet') and a natural activity ('sit' or 'are there').

× Actually I would like to see more parks in my city because you can immerse yourself at different atmosphere so which will let you have much different feelings.

✓ Actually, I would like to see more parks in my city because you can immerse yourself in different atmospheres, which allows you to have very different feelings.

Use 'immerse yourself in' (correct preposition), plural 'atmospheres' for variety, and 'which allows you' to connect the clause. 'Much different' is non-idiomatic; use 'very different.' Suggestion: fix preposition, noun number, and clause linking for clarity.

× But this will also broaden on the garment.

✓ But this will also broaden your horizons.

The original phrase is nonsensical ('broaden on the garment'). Likely intended meaning is 'broaden your horizons' or 'broaden your perspective.' Replace with idiomatic expression. Suggestion: use common collocations like 'broaden your horizons' to express expanding experience.

× Yes, I want to go to the Central Park in New York in the future because it is one of the most big and amazing park.

✓ Yes, I want to go to Central Park in New York in the future because it is one of the biggest and most amazing parks.

Errors: article 'the Central Park' is unnecessary for proper name 'Central Park'; superlative/comparison form incorrect: use 'one of the biggest and most amazing parks' (plural 'parks' after 'one of the'). Suggestion: drop 'the' with proper names like 'Central Park' and use correct comparative/superlative forms.

× So I want to take a look at it and to see take the different things.

✓ So I want to take a look at it and see the different things there.

The phrase 'to see take the different things' is ungrammatical and redundant. Use 'see the different things there' or 'see the sights' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: remove redundant 'to' and 'take' and use a clear verb-object structure.