Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Сократите заполнители (uh, um), исправьте грамматику и постройте чёткое вступление с поддерживающей деталью. Например: начать с простого утверждения, затем объяснить причину и привести конкретный эпизод или воспоминание. Избегайте неясных фраз вроде "wherever is it" и используйте правильные формы (an active child).

Exemplo: Yes, I did. I was an active child, so I loved spending time outdoors. For example, I used to ask my mother every weekend to take me to the park where I could run and play on the swings.

Sugestão: Устраните повторы и заполнители, структурируйте ответ: краткое утверждение + 1–2 конкретные причины с примером. Уточните лексику: 'nature' вместо 'the natural', используйте связки (for example, especially) для связности.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I particularly like the trees and the peaceful atmosphere, which helps me relax after work. For example, I often sit on a bench and read while enjoying the view of the lake.

Sugestão: Ответ ясен, но можно сделать его более естественным и добавить конкретную причину или пример, почему нужны новые парки (здоровье, досуг, окружающая среда). Используйте связки (because, for example) и избегайте тавтологии.

Exemplo: Yes, definitely. I enjoy being surrounded by trees, and more parks would give people space for exercise and relaxation. For example, new small parks in residential areas would encourage families to spend time outdoors.

Sugestão: Исправьте артикли и названия (Central Park, New York City), избегайте разговорных сокращений (wanna) и развейте ответ, добавив причину и конкретную деятельность, которую вы хотите там сделать.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit Central Park in New York City. I want to walk along the trails, see the famous landmarks like Bethesda Terrace, and maybe have a picnic while watching street performers.

× I mean, I was uh, active, uh, child and I really wanted to go wherever is it and including parks.

✓ I mean, I was an active child and I really wanted to go everywhere, including parks.

The original sentence has omitted the article before 'active child' and uses an awkward phrase 'wherever is it'. Use the indefinite article 'an' with a singular countable noun 'active child'. Replace 'wherever is it' with 'everywhere' and reposition 'including parks' to clarify that parks are part of the places visited. Suggestion: use simple, direct phrasing and include necessary articles. Grammar problem type ID:26

× the the reason why I love going to parks is of course the first one is umm, trees.

✓ The reason why I love going to parks is, first of all, the trees.

The sentence repeats the definite article 'the' and has an awkward structure 'is of course the first one is'. Remove the duplicate 'the' and rephrase to 'first of all' to introduce the first reason. Keep 'trees' as the noun. Suggestion: avoid repetition and use clear transition phrases. Grammar problem type ID:17

× I mean, I like the natural and so that's why I love going there.

✓ I mean, I like nature, and that's why I love going there.

'The natural' is incorrect because 'natural' is an adjective; the speaker needs the noun 'nature'. Replace 'the natural' with 'nature' and join clauses with 'and'. Suggestion: choose noun forms when referring to general concepts. Grammar problem type ID:13

× And of course, umm, probably the view of parks.

✓ And, of course, I also enjoy the views in parks.

The original is a sentence fragment lacking a finite verb; 'probably the view of parks' is incomplete. Add a subject and verb to make a complete sentence: 'I also enjoy the views in parks.' Suggestion: ensure each sentence has at least a subject and a verb. Grammar problem type ID:23

× The first part that came to my mind is a Central Park in the New York City.

✓ The first place that came to my mind is Central Park in New York City.

'A Central Park' is incorrect because Central Park is a specific proper noun and takes no indefinite article; 'the New York City' is wrong because 'New York City' does not require 'the'. Replace 'part' with 'place' for the intended meaning. Suggestion: do not use articles with proper names unless part of the name. Grammar problem type ID:17

× This is where I wanna go in the future.

✓ This is where I want to go in the future.

'Wanna' is an informal contraction of 'want to' inappropriate for formal spoken responses; it also confuses verb form. Replace with 'want to' and maintain 'go' as the base verb. Suggestion: use standard forms like 'want to' in tests and formal contexts. Grammar problem type ID:8