Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, reduce hesitations, correct basic grammar (use past tense consistently) and add one specific supporting detail. Use a linking word to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Yes. I loved going to the park with my father in the afternoons when I was a child. We usually visited the small park near our home, and I spent hours playing football and climbing trees with my friends. Because of those visits I have many happy memories from childhood.

Sugestão: Answer directly and clearly: choose a simple, grammatically correct structure (Yes/No + reason). Reduce repetition and filler words. Provide one concise reason and, if possible, a brief consequence or example.

Exemplo: Not really. I rarely visit parks now because I have a very busy schedule as a university lecturer and PhD candidate, so I usually spend my free time preparing lectures or doing research.

Sugestão: Be direct and specific: state your opinion clearly (yes/no or yes to some extent), then give specific reasons and use linking words. Correct sentence structure and name the city clearly. Avoid excessive fillers.

Exemplo: Not really, because I live in Rasht in the north of my country, which already has many large, beautiful parks. Therefore, increasing parks is less urgent here than improving facilities in the existing parks, such as benches and walking paths.

Sugestão: Give a clear, natural response and avoid absolute statements that sound odd. If you mean you have no plans, say so and provide a brief reason. Use fewer fillers and a linking word to connect reason and result.

Exemplo: I don't have any specific parks I plan to visit. Since I live in a city with many beautiful parks and I have a busy workload, I don't usually prioritize travelling to parks elsewhere right now.

× When I was a child and me and my father umm uh, in the afternoon, umm, umm, went to my went to and near parking umm, my home.

✓ When I was a child my father and I used to go in the afternoons to the park near my home.

The original uses 'me and my father' which is incorrect subject order and pronoun case; the correct subject is 'my father and I'. Also word order and redundancy were fixed: 'went to my went to and near parking' was unclear and changed to 'used to go in the afternoons to the park near my home' to express habitual past action. Suggestion: put yourself after the other person in subjects and use 'I' not 'me' when the pronoun is the subject.

× And I really love this time and because uh, I umm, played with my umm, friends in the park.

✓ And I really loved that time because I played with my friends in the park.

Tense inconsistency: the sentence mixes present 'love' with past context. Because the question refers to childhood, the past tense 'loved' fits. Also remove redundant 'and because' sequence and extra fillers. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use past tense for past experiences.

× To be honest then, no, I am because because I have a busy schedule in my life and I'm a teacher in university and researcher because I am.

✓ To be honest, no. I don't now because I have a busy schedule; I am a university teacher and a researcher.

The original is confused and uses 'I am' incorrectly to answer 'Do you still like going to parks now?'. The correct negative reply is 'I don't now' or better 'I don't anymore' but 'I don't now' was used to follow speaker's structure; improved to 'I don't now' would be acceptable. Also 'in university' should be 'a university teacher' and 'a researcher'. Suggestion: use 'I don't anymore' or 'I don't now' to negate current habit and avoid repeating 'because I am'.

× I am a teacher in university and researcher because I am. I am a PhD candidate in university.

✓ I am a university teacher and a researcher. I am a PhD candidate at a university.

Article and preposition use: 'in university' is unnatural; use 'a university teacher' and 'at a university' or 'a PhD candidate at the university' if specific. Also add the article 'a' before 'researcher'. Suggestion: use 'a' before professions and 'at' for being enrolled at an institution.

× Oh, that's a nice question because I'm living the north of my country.

✓ Oh, that's a nice question because I live in the north of my country.

Incorrect article and verb form: 'living the north' is wrong. Use 'live in the north' to describe residence. 'The north' as a region takes 'the' but must be accompanied by 'in'. Suggestion: use 'live in' for where you reside and 'the north' to name a region.

× That's a very, uh, green, umm city.

✓ It's a very green city.

Word order and filler words: remove fillers and combine adjectives naturally: 'a very green city'. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary pauses and use 'very' before the adjective directly.

× Uh, the name of the city is Rash and the Rasht is mostly, uh, have a most, uh, have a big parks and beautiful parks.

✓ The name of the city is Rasht, and Rasht mostly has many large and beautiful parks.

Pronoun/article and verb form issues: 'the Rasht' is wrong if city name is Rasht; use the name alone unless 'the' is part of name. 'Is mostly have' is ungrammatical; correct verb is 'has'. 'a big parks' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'many large and beautiful parks' or 'a big, beautiful park' if singular. Suggestion: use 'has' with singular subject and match articles and plurality correctly.

× Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?

✓ Are there any parks you would like to go to in the future?

This is the examiner's question; no student correction needed. If answering, use 'would like' to express future desire politely. Suggestion: respond with 'I would like to visit...' to indicate future intention.

× No, I don't think so because I am living north of my country and I, uh, live in a city that's very, uh, beautiful garden and uh, I don't like, uh, visit any park in the, in all over the, all over the world.

✓ No, I don't think so because I live in the north of my country in a city with many beautiful gardens, and I don't usually visit parks.

Tense and phrasing: 'I am living north of my country' should be 'I live in the north of my country'. 'a city that's very beautiful garden' is ungrammatical; use 'a city with many beautiful gardens'. 'I don't like visit any park in the ... all over the world' is unclear; likely meaning is 'I don't usually visit parks' or 'I don't want to visit parks around the world'. Suggestion: simplify and make meaning clear: state current residence with 'live in' and express habit with 'usually' or 'don't'.