Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid tense and number errors (e.g., "my parents were usually busy"), and reduce redundancy ("best memory" vs "one of my best memories").

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often visited a nearby park with my parents, although they were usually busy and we could only go occasionally. I remember feeding the ducks and playing on the swings, which are some of my fondest childhood memories.

Sugestão: Make your response natural and grammatically correct. Use a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details. Avoid fillers (uh, yeah) and awkward phrases like "chilling up" and "spending tranquil sight." Use linking words for coherence (e.g., "also", "for example").

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, both alone and with friends. For example, I like to sit on a bench and relax while watching the trees and people walking, because it helps me unwind after a busy day.

Sugestão: Make your viewpoint clear and correct grammatical errors. Use a direct topic sentence, then one supporting reason with specific detail. Avoid confusing phrasing ("founding more parks"). Use linking words like "because" or "however."

Exemplo: I don't think more parks are necessary in my city because it already has several well-kept parks and natural areas. For instance, families can visit the riverside park or the large community garden, so new parks are not urgently needed.

Sugestão: Clarify and correct grammar. Give a clear topic sentence about which park you'd like and one reason with a specific detail. Replace awkward phrases ("cooling system") with natural expressions like "shade, water features, or misting stations."

Exemplo: Yes. In the future I would like to visit parks that are well-shaded or have water features, because summers are getting hotter. For example, a park with many trees, shaded picnic areas, and misting fans would be comfortable for families during heat waves.

× My parents are usually busy with their work so it's not so much time to go there.

✓ My parents were usually busy with their work so there was not much time to go there.

The question asked about childhood (past), so verbs should be in the past tense. 'Are usually busy' should be 'were usually busy' and 'it's not so much time' is unnatural and tense-inconsistent; use 'there was not much time'. Use 'there' as a dummy subject for availability of time.

× But it is one of the best memory of my life and I still cherish that memory.

✓ But it is one of the best memories of my life and I still cherish that memory.

When using 'one of the', the noun should be plural: 'one of the best memories'. Using singular 'memory' is incorrect.

× Yes, I love to go to parks, of course, alone and also with my friends and girlfriends.

✓ Yes, I love going to parks, of course alone and also with my friends and girlfriends.

Use 'love going' (gerund) for general preferences. 'Love to go' is not wrong but 'love going' is more natural. This correction focuses on verb+ -ing form and smoother phrasing while keeping present tense.

× Uh, when I visit there, I usually just chilling up, uh, with spending tranquil sight and yeah, just chilling up.

✓ When I visit there, I usually just chill, enjoying the tranquil scenery.

Incorrect use of '-ing' and awkward 'chilling up' and 'spending tranquil sight'. Use base verb 'chill' for habitual action or 'just chill' and 'enjoying' plus a proper noun phrase 'the tranquil scenery'. This fixes verb form and word choice.

× In my opinion I don't think so because my city is not too much developed area so which have enough perks and decent nature, therefore children can enjoy parks without founding more parks.

✓ In my opinion, I don't think so because my city is not a very developed area, but it has enough parks and decent natural spaces, so children can enjoy parks without needing more of them.

This sentence has multiple structure problems: missing articles ('a very developed area'), wrong vocabulary ('perks' should be 'parks'), incorrect relative clause ('so which have'), and wrong verb 'founding' for 'finding' or 'creating'. The correction reorders clauses, adds necessary articles, fixes word choice, and makes the meaning clear.

× Yes, I have in current years the temperature getting higher and higher and children and families can cannot gets bring in the park easier.

✓ Yes, in recent years the temperature has been getting higher and higher, and children and families cannot go to the park as easily.

Tense and auxiliary errors: use present perfect continuous 'has been getting' for a continuing change. 'Can cannot gets bring in the park' is ungrammatical; correct to 'cannot go to the park as easily'. This fixes modal usage and verb forms.

× So I wanted I want to go to the park with a lot of cooling system in the summer.

✓ So I want to go to parks with good cooling systems in the summer.

Inconsistent tense 'wanted I want' should be present 'I want' to match the future preference. 'A lot of cooling system' is uncountable/wrong; use 'good cooling systems' or 'many cooling features'. This corrects tense and noun usage.