Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more grammatical, avoid fillers and redundancy, and use a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific details. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, "and", "also", "sometimes"). Keep the answer within 2–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often played games with my friends there, and sometimes I would take long walks with my grandfather, which I enjoyed because he told me stories about his youth.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence plus concise supporting details. Remove hesitation and repetition. Explain briefly why parks matter to you now (purpose, frequency, who with) and use linking words like "because" and "so" to structure the answer.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they give me a chance to relax. I usually visit with my grandfather after a busy week, and these outings are the only regular time we spend together, so they are very important to me.

Sugestão: Start with a direct answer (Yes/No) and give specific reasons. Avoid vague phrases and complete your thoughts. Mention concrete problems and suggest improvements to show depth (e.g., lack of maintenance, few green spaces).

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there is only one main park, Gandhi Park, and it is poorly maintained. If the city built more parks and improved maintenance, people would have healthier places to exercise and relax.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence naming the park and one or two specific reasons you want to visit it. Remove hesitations and avoid repeating words. You can mention how you learned about it and what you expect to see there (features, atmosphere).

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit the Garden of Fragrance in Chandigarh. I first saw photos of it on Instagram and it looks beautiful; I hope to experience the aromatic flower beds and peaceful walking paths in person.

× Yes, I love to run to the park.

✓ Yes, I loved running to the park.

The question asks about childhood habits (past). The student used present tense 'love' which mismatches time frame. Use past simple or past habitual: 'loved' or 'used to love'. Also use the gerund 'running' after a verb of liking for natural phrasing.

× When I was a child, like uh, in a park, me and my friends over playing together and sometimes I went to the uh, went to the walk with my grandfather.

✓ When I was a child, my friends and I used to play together in the park, and sometimes I went for a walk with my grandfather.

Multiple issues: incorrect word order 'me and my friends' (use 'my friends and I'), missing verb form for habitual action (use 'used to play'), misplaced phrases and filler words removed, and 'went to the walk' is wrong; correct collocation is 'went for a walk'. These changes fix subject pronoun, habitual past, word order, and preposition use.

× Yes. Well, I still love to go to the parks because, uh, well, usually I go to the park with my grandfather to do a work and obviously I have a quite a hectic schedule and it's a only time. I love to, uh, it's only time, uh, I spend my time with my grandfather, so yes.

✓ Yes. I still love going to the park because I usually go with my grandfather to do some work, and I have a quite hectic schedule, so it's the only time I spend with him.

Maintain present habitual tense but correct verb forms and article use: use 'going' after 'love' or 'love to go' consistently; 'the parks' changed to 'the park' for specificity; 'to do a work' is uncountable here—use 'some work'; remove redundant fillers and correct 'it's a only time' to 'it's the only time'. Pronoun 'him' clarifies reference.

× Well, I would love to see a more parks in my city because there is only one park in my city and that's called a Gandhi Park and it's not a very in a good situation like the grass are going so rapidly and no one's going to take care of the park Apart from that, sometimes the.

✓ Well, I would love to see more parks in my city because there is only one park called Gandhi Park, and it is not in good condition: the grass is growing rapidly and no one is taking care of the park.

Several article and number errors: 'a more parks' is wrong—use 'more parks' without 'a'. 'That's called a Gandhi Park' should be 'called Gandhi Park' or 'called the Gandhi Park' depending on name. 'Not a very in a good situation' corrected to 'not in good condition'. Subject-verb agreement: 'the grass are' -> 'the grass is' because 'grass' is uncountable/singular. 'No one's going to take care' adjusted to 'no one is taking care' for present reality.

× Yes, well, there, there is a one park in a Chandigarh, uh, it's a called garden of fragrance and uh, I usually, uh, see this park in uh, uh, in Instagram trails or, or over the social media and in this park, uh uh, like, uh, the uh, garden of fragrance, uh, is called because.

✓ Yes, there is a park in Chandigarh called the Garden of Fragrance, and I usually see this park on Instagram or other social media.

Fix 'there, there is a one park' to 'there is a park' and remove unnecessary 'a' before 'Chandigarh'. Use the proper name capitalization and include the definite article 'the' if it is part of the park's name. Correct preposition 'in Instagram' to 'on Instagram' and 'over the social media' to 'other social media'. Removed incomplete trailing clause. These changes address 'there be' construction, articles, prepositions, and sentence completeness.