Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Clarify and correct factual errors (Paris vs parks), reduce redundancy, use a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Keep within 3-4 sentences and use linking words (however, because). Fix grammar (countable nouns, verb forms) and use more precise vocabulary (public spaces, playgrounds).

Exemplo: Yes, I liked going to parks as a child, but there were few public spaces in my hometown so I rarely visited them. However, after I moved abroad I had more access to parks and began to enjoy spending time outdoors.

Sugestão: Start with a direct answer, then give one specific reason and a brief frequency detail. Correct minor errors (aboard → abroad; everyday → every day) and use linking words (because, so). Avoid long run-on sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because I moved to Taiwan where there are many public spaces. I live near a park, so I go there every day to exercise and relax.

Sugestão: Answer directly, then give one or two specific reasons using linking phrases (for example, because, for instance). Remove filler words and correct repetition and grammar. Mention concrete benefits (social interaction, recreation, green space).

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide green space for exercise and socialising. For example, parks allow families to have picnics and neighbours to meet while walking their dogs.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer, then provide a concise, specific reason and avoid informal slang (wanna). Correct vocabulary (park, America → the United States) and reduce unrelated comments (American Dream) unless explained. Use 2–3 sentences with linking words (because, when).

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit Central Park in New York because I have seen it in films and it looks beautiful. I hope to go there one day to walk the paths and see the lakes in person.

× I liked going to Paris as a child, but in my country there are not so much like public spaces around, so I rarely went to park as a child.

✓ I liked going to parks as a child, but in my country there were not many public spaces, so I rarely went to a park when I was a child.

Problems: incorrect place name 'Paris' instead of 'parks' appears to be a typo, plural/singular and quantifier errors ('not so much' should be 'not many' for countable noun 'public spaces'), tense consistency (past 'were' and 'went'), and article use ('a park'). Suggestion: use 'parks' for the general activity, use 'there were not many' for countable plural, include 'a' before 'park', and keep past tense 'when I was a child' for clarity.

× Of course I do since I mentioned that I have moved aboard and there are so many public spaces here in Taiwan and I lived near the park so I go to parks everyday.

✓ Of course I do, since I mentioned that I moved abroad. There are many public spaces here in Taiwan and I live near a park, so I go to parks every day.

Problems: incorrect tense and aspect ('have moved' can be simplified to past 'moved' when referring to a past event already mentioned), spelling 'aboard' should be 'abroad', article use 'the park' to 'a park' for nonspecific, adverb spacing 'everyday' (adjective) should be 'every day'. Suggestion: use 'moved abroad', maintain present tense 'I live' if currently true, and write 'every day' as two words when meaning each day.

× Of course I do. I like to see more parks in my city. Like I like enjoy seeing people walking around enjoying their their life and maybe can go on a picnic and I think that's so enjoyable.

✓ Of course I do. I would like to see more parks in my city. I enjoy seeing people walking around, enjoying their lives, and maybe having a picnic; I think that's very enjoyable.

Problems: modal and phrasing ('I like to see' -> 'I would like to see' expresses desire), redundant words 'like enjoy', pronoun/plural 'their their life' -> 'their lives', modal omission 'maybe can go' -> 'maybe have a picnic' or 'maybe go on a picnic'. Suggestion: use 'would like' for polite desire, remove redundancies, use plural 'lives' for people, and use natural phrasing like 'have a picnic'.

× Of course there is. For me, the part I like to visit one day is Central Park in America. I like to visit the United States. I like the idea of American Dream. I wanna go there when I see movies. I hope I can.

✓ Of course there is. For me, the park I would like to visit one day is Central Park in the United States. I like the idea of the American Dream. I want to go there because of films I have seen. I hope I can go.

Problems: 'there is' is vague but acceptable; inconsistent word choice 'part' should be 'park', article use 'America' -> 'the United States' and 'the American Dream', informal 'wanna' -> 'want to', awkward clause 'when I see movies' -> use 'because of films I have seen' or 'after seeing movies' and incomplete 'I hope I can' -> 'I hope I can go'. Suggestion: use 'the United States', include definite article for 'the American Dream', avoid informal 'wanna', and complete the final verb 'go'.