Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more direct and use correct tense and word order. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and small grammar errors (e.g., "I'd like" → "I liked", "with my neighborhood" → "with my neighbors").

Exemplo: Yes, I liked going to parks as a child. For example, my neighbors and I often rode our bikes there and sometimes had picnics, so we spent many happy afternoons playing games and chatting.

Sugestão: Use correct verb forms and reduce repetition. Give one clear reason, then add a specific example with a linking word (e.g., "because", "for instance"). Avoid saying the same idea twice ("I like" and "I really enjoy it").

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because I like lying on the grass and feeling the breeze. For instance, I often have picnics with a close friend, which helps me relax after a busy week.

Sugestão: Organize your answer: give a clear opinion, then a specific reason and a short result. Remove fillers ("umm", "like") and correct grammar ("trees help the environment", "everyone will feel happier").

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks because trees improve air quality and provide shade. As a result, people would have healthier places to relax and the city would feel greener and more pleasant.

Sugestão: Be specific about which park and why you want to visit it in the future. Use a clear topic sentence, explain reasons with linking words, and avoid hesitations and unclear pronouns. Keep it concise (max 5 sentences).

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to return to a small riverside park near my college because it helped me think clearly during a difficult time. I used to lie on the grass there to relax, and in the future I hope to visit again to remember that period and unwind.

× Yes, I'd like to go to the park.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks.

The student is describing a past habitual preference as a child; the original uses present tense contraction 'I'd' (I would/I had) and a definite article 'the park' which implies a specific park. Use simple past 'liked' and plural 'parks' to match question about parks in general when child: this makes meaning clear and fits past context.

× When I was a child with my neighborhood, we usually ride our bikes and have some fun there and sometimes we have a picnic there, so we had a good time.

✓ When I was a child in my neighborhood, we usually rode our bikes and had fun there, and sometimes we had a picnic, so we had a good time.

Multiple issues: preposition 'with' is incorrect (use 'in' for living in a neighborhood). Tense consistency: describing past habitual actions requires past simple 'rode' and 'had' rather than present 'ride'/'have'. Redundant phrases removed for clarity. Use commas for sentence flow.

× Yes, I like to go to the park because I like to lying down on the grass and and enjoy the wind.

✓ Yes, I like to go to the park because I like to lie down on the grass and enjoy the breeze.

'Like to lying' mixes infinitive and -ing forms; correct is either 'like to lie' or 'like lying'. Also double 'and' is an error. 'Enjoy the wind' is understandable but 'enjoy the breeze' is more natural. Maintain present simple for current preference.

× Sometimes I have a picnic with my friend in the park so I feel really comfortable and I really enjoy it.

✓ Sometimes I have a picnic with my friends in the park, so I feel really comfortable and enjoy it.

If referring to more than one friend, use plural 'friends' or keep singular consistently. 'I really enjoy it' is acceptable but redundant with previous 'really'; streamline to 'enjoy it'. Add comma before 'so'.

× Yeah, I would like to see more parks because umm, there are so many trees in the parks and trees can help us environments become better.

✓ Yeah, I would like to see more parks because there are so many trees in parks, and trees can help our environment become better.

Use 'in parks' (general) not 'in the parks' unless specific. 'Help us environments become better' is ungrammatical: use 'help our environment become better' or 'help the environment'. Remove filler 'umm'.

× So umm, I think it's a good idea to have more parks and like everyone will be feel.

✓ So I think it's a good idea to have more parks and everyone will feel better.

'Everyone will be feel' mixes 'be' with verb; correct is 'will feel'. 'Feel better' completes the idea. Remove filler 'umm' and 'like'.

× I think there are, uh, the park, I really like it, but that is not the special one.

✓ I think there are several parks; there is one park I really like, but it is not particularly special.

Original is fragmented and unclear. 'I think there are' needs an object (parks). Combine clauses: 'there is one park I really like, but it is not particularly special.' Use 'particularly' instead of 'special one' for naturalness.

× But umm, at that time I was really confused with my life and I, I always go to that park for lying on the grass.

✓ But at that time I was really confused about my life, and I always went to that park to lie on the grass.

Use 'confused about' not 'confused with'. For past habitual action use past simple 'went' not 'go'. Use infinitive 'to lie' rather than 'for lying'. Remove filler 'umm' and repeated 'I'.

× So I think they, it, uh, that part.

✓ So I think that place helped me a lot.

Original is incoherent with mixed pronouns 'they, it' and 'that part'. Clarify meaning: likely referring to the park/place offering comfort, so 'that place helped me a lot' expresses the intended idea. Remove filler 'uh'.