Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be clear and direct: start with a definite topic sentence saying whether you liked parks, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid contradictions ("don't like" vs childhood) and filler words (umm). Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, "because," "so"). Keep it under 5 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they were fun and safe. For example, I often joined other children on the swings and played tag, which made me very happy. Because of that, I have many fond memories of weekends spent outdoors.

Sugestão: Good content and clear reason. Improve by tightening language, avoiding repetition, and adding a short specific example of what you do in the park (e.g., walking, sitting by a pond). Use a linking phrase like "for instance" to connect reason and example.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, especially when I feel stressed because they help me relax. For instance, I usually walk slowly along a tree-lined path and sit by a pond to meditate, which helps me clear my mind.

Sugestão: Answer the question directly (whether you want more parks) then give specific reasons. Remove hesitations (umm) and clarify how more parks relate to exploring the city and culture. Use linking words like "because" or "so" and give one concrete example.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they offer outdoor spaces to explore the local culture. For example, a new park could host weekend markets or cultural performances where I could meet people and learn about local traditions.

Sugestão: Good clear plan. Improve by naming a specific park and explaining why you want to visit it. Use one linking word to connect travel plans and the reason. Keep it concise and natural.

Exemplo: Yes, I plan to visit Central Park in New York City when I return to the United States at the end of August because I want to see its famous landmarks and enjoy long walks under the trees.

× Yes, I don't like going to the point where I was a kid because umm whenever as I see a children playing lit apart and I want also to join with them and it I also find it enjoyable at the same time.

✓ Yes, I liked going to the park when I was a kid because whenever I saw children playing nearby I also wanted to join them, and I found it enjoyable.

The student used incorrect pronouns and mixed tenses. 'I don't like going to the point where I was a kid' is wrong for past preference; use 'I liked going to the park when I was a kid' (past tense). 'a children' is incorrect; use the plural 'children' without an article. 'playing lit apart' is unclear; likely 'playing nearby'. Maintain consistent past tense ('saw', 'wanted', 'found'). Suggestion: use simple past to describe childhood experiences and correct noun/pronoun usage. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Yes, I still like going to the parks, especially during my rough days.

✓ Yes, I still like going to the park, especially on rough days.

Using 'the parks' implies specific parks; general preference uses 'the park' or 'parks' without 'the'. 'During my rough days' is awkward; use 'on rough days' or 'when I feel stressed'. Suggestion: choose 'the park' for a usual place or 'parks' for plural generalization, and use correct preposition for times. Grammar problem type ID:22

× I want to go to the place that I can meditate and deeply connect with myself and forget these stressful events that happen in my life.

✓ I want to go to a place where I can meditate, deeply connect with myself, and forget the stressful events in my life.

Use 'a place' not 'the place' for a nonspecific location. Use 'where' rather than 'that' for locations. 'These stressful events that happen in my life' is wordy; 'the stressful events in my life' is clearer. Suggestion: use 'a' for nonspecific nouns and 'where' for places, and simplify noun phrases. Grammar problem type ID:11

× Yes, I definitely want to umm travel and explore different parts umm in my city.

✓ Yes, I definitely want to travel and explore different parts of my city.

The preposition 'in' is unnecessary after 'parts' when specifying 'of my city'; use 'parts of my city'. Also remove filler 'umm'. Suggestion: say 'parts of my city' for correct collocation. Grammar problem type ID:22

× Umm I love umm discovering other cultures and as well as the the outside activity of the city.

✓ I love discovering other cultures as well as the outdoor activities of the city.

The phrase 'and as well as' is redundant; use either 'and' or 'as well as'. 'the the' is a typo; 'outside activity' should be 'outdoor activities' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: remove redundancy and correct collocations ('outdoor activities'). Grammar problem type ID:26

× Yes, certainly, because by the end of August I will go back to America and continue to live there.

✓ Yes, certainly, because by the end of August I will go back to America and continue living there.

'Continue to live' is grammatical but 'continue living' is more natural and idiomatic here. Both express future continuation, but consistent progressive form improves fluency. Suggestion: use 'continue living' for smoother spoken English. Grammar problem type ID:7

× And I'm also looking forward to explore different places like Park, especially in New York City.

✓ I'm also looking forward to exploring different places and parks, especially in New York City.

After 'looking forward to' you must use a gerund ('exploring'), not the base verb. 'like Park' is incorrect; use 'places and parks' or name a specific park. Also remove leading 'And' at sentence start. Suggestion: use 'looking forward to exploring' and pluralize 'parks' or name a specific park. Grammar problem type ID:22

× I'm also looking forward to explore different places like Park, especially in New York City.

✓ I'm also looking forward to exploring different places and parks, especially in New York City.

'Looking forward to' requires a gerund ('exploring'), not the infinitive 'to explore'. Suggestion: use 'looking forward to' + verb-ing construction to be grammatically correct. Grammar problem type ID:8