Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence about liking parks as a child, then add one or two specific supporting details. Correct grammar (tenses and articles) and avoid unnecessary fillers. Use linking words (for example, “and” or “because”) to connect ideas and keep the answer within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they were a safe place to play and explore. For example, I often went there in the evenings after school to run around with friends and climb trees. Those visits made me feel free and happy.

Sugestão: Answer directly and organize ideas: begin with a clear statement that you still like parks, then give one or two specific reasons (e.g., relaxation, exercise) with simple linking words like “because” or “so.” Avoid repeating phrases and correct tense errors. Keep to 2–4 sentences and give a clear recent example if helpful.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because walking there helps me relax and clear my mind. For instance, I often go on Sundays and return feeling refreshed and more productive for the coming week.

Sugestão: Provide a concise opinion with clear reasons: state whether you would like more parks, then give one or two specific reasons (e.g., reduce pollution, provide green space). Use precise vocabulary (deforestation, green space) and remove hesitations. Use linking words like “because” or “so” to connect your points.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they help reduce pollution and provide much-needed green space for people to exercise and relax. For example, new parks would give families a safe place to spend time outdoors.

Sugestão: Be specific and concise: name the park and give one or two precise reasons why you want to visit (unique activities, size, attractions). Remove repetition and fillers. Use a linking phrase like “because” or “for example” to explain why it appeals to you.

Exemplo: Yes, I want to visit the large park in Secunderabad because it is well known and offers unique activities for children, such as playgrounds and boat rides. I plan to go there next month to see the attractions and enjoy a family outing.

× Yes actually I love going to parks.

✓ Yes, actually I loved going to parks.

The examiner asked about childhood (past), so the verb tense should be past. Use 'loved' for past habit. Suggestion: use past simple for past preferences.

× I enjoy whenever there is I find easier time or during the evening hours after finishing my work I usually go for a walk in the park and I feel so refreshed and relaxed by walking barefoot and the cream grass.

✓ I enjoyed going to the park in the evenings after finishing my work; I usually went for a walk and felt refreshed and relaxed walking barefoot on the green grass.

The context is childhood (past), so verbs should be past tense (enjoyed, went, felt). Also 'whenever there is I find easier time' is ungrammatical and unclear; rewrite to show habitual past actions. 'Cream grass' is incorrect and likely intended 'green grass.' Use 'on the green grass' for proper preposition and adjective.

× Yes, of course, still today I love going to parks and I enjoy and I feel when I come back from the park I feel very relaxed and refreshed and also more productive for my next day work schedule.

✓ Yes, of course. Even now I love going to parks; when I come back I feel very relaxed and refreshed and more productive for the next day's work.

This sentence describes current habits, so present simple is appropriate ('love,' 'feel'). The original had redundant and awkward phrasing ('still today', 'I enjoy and I feel'). Simplify and correct possessive 'next day's work' and remove repetition. Use punctuation to separate ideas.

× Apart from that and the childhood I usually used to go up to the past one Sunday.

✓ Apart from that, in my childhood I used to go to the park every Sunday.

The original has mixed and unclear temporal expressions. Use 'in my childhood' for past period and 'used to' for habitual past actions. 'Go up to the past one Sunday' is incorrect; replace with 'every Sunday' for clarity.

× Definitely I, in the future, I want to see more and more parks, uh, in the society, uh, because uh, and nowadays people are, uh, cutting the trees and there's a deforestation which is causing more pollution and people are unable, they're not able to find space for.

✓ Definitely, in the future I would like to see more parks in the community because people are cutting trees and deforestation is causing more pollution and reducing public green space.

Use a polite future expression 'would like to' or 'want to' for preferences. Remove filler sounds 'uh'. 'There's a deforestation' is incorrect; use 'deforestation' without article. 'People are unable, they're not able to find space for' is incomplete; specify 'find public green space' or similar. Use present continuous for ongoing actions ('are cutting').

× Yes, recently I got to know that there is a huge park in the Secunderabad, uh, which is very popular among, uh, which is very popular in my city.

✓ Yes, recently I learned that there is a huge park in Secunderabad that is very popular in my city.

'Got to know' is informal; 'learned' is better. Remove repeated phrase 'which is very popular among, which is very popular'. Also drop the article before place name 'Secunderabad' if used as proper noun. Keep 'there is' for existence (correct) but clean redundancy and filler words.

× And in the future, I will definitely visit the park because it has some unique activities, uh, for kids.

✓ In the future I will definitely visit the park because it has some unique activities for children.

This is fine tense-wise; only remove filler 'uh' and prefer 'children' or 'kids' consistently. Ensure subject-verb agreement 'it has' is correct. No major grammar error besides filler words.