Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be concise and use correct tense and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “No, I didn’t enjoy going to parks as a child.”), then give one or two specific supporting details using correct past tense and linking words. Avoid filler sounds (uh) and sentence fragments. Use a variety of vocabulary (e.g., prefer, enjoy, hang out, play sports).

Exemplo: No, I didn’t enjoy going to parks as a child. I preferred staying indoors during school breaks because I liked talking with classmates and reading. As a result, I rarely joined my friends to play sports outside.

Sugestão: Answer directly and give specific current activities with correct grammar and linking words. Use present simple for habits and explain reasons briefly. Replace vague phrases with clear ones (e.g., “I prefer sewing and studying because…”). Keep to 2–4 sentences maximum.

Exemplo: No, I don’t. I prefer staying inside to sew or study because these hobbies help me relax and improve my skills. For example, I often learn new techniques online that make my life more interesting.

Sugestão: Clarify meaning and correct vocabulary and grammar. Begin with a clear opinion (Yes), then explain why using accurate words (e.g., ‘playing outside is beneficial for children’s health’). Use linking words (because, therefore) and avoid incorrect words (praying? bile?). Provide a concise reason and a short concluding sentence.

Exemplo: Yes, I would, but mainly for children. Playing outside is beneficial for their physical and social development, so more parks would give them safe places to exercise and meet friends.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer then offer a clear and specific example if you change your mind. Use correct conditional forms (If I were to visit one in the future, I would choose…) and more precise vocabulary (compare parks in Japan and other countries). Limit to two or three sentences and avoid informal slang (wanna).

Exemplo: No, not really, because I generally prefer staying indoors. However, if I did visit parks abroad, I would like to compare Japanese parks with parks in other countries to observe differences in design and activities.

× I do not like playing outside when I was in the middle school, uh, when it's come to break time, I didn't go outside and play sport with my friends.

✓ I did not like playing outside when I was in middle school; when it came to break time, I did not go outside to play sports with my friends.

The sentence mixes present tense ('do not like') with past time reference ('when I was in middle school'). Use past tense 'did not like' to match the past time. 'It's come to break time' is incorrect; use past 'it came to break time'. Use 'play sports' instead of 'play sport' and add 'to' before 'play' for correct verb pattern.

× I prefer stay inside and talk to.

✓ I preferred staying inside and talking to friends.

After 'prefer' in past context, use past 'preferred' or keep 'prefer' with present reference. The verb following 'prefer' should be in '-ing' form when the structure is 'prefer doing something'. Also 'talk to' is incomplete; add the object 'friends'.

× No I don't I prefer stay inside and do like some sewing or studying.

✓ No, I don't. I prefer staying inside and doing things like sewing or studying.

Use 'prefer' with the gerund ('staying', 'doing'). The phrase 'do like some sewing' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'doing things like sewing'. Include punctuation to separate clauses.

× I like studying new things like which is help my life make richer.

✓ I like studying new things that help make my life richer.

The relative clause 'which is help my life make richer' is ungrammatical. Use 'that help' (or 'which help') plus base verb 'make' to convey the meaning. Remove unnecessary 'is' and reorder words for clarity.

× So I do not like outside and play like sport with my friends.

✓ So I do not like going outside to play sports with my friends.

Use 'going outside' and the infinitive 'to play' to express purpose. Use plural 'sports' and maintain present tense 'do not like' to match the stated preference.

× Yes but it's not for me, it's for children in my community because praying outside is very bile for health so they should go outside.

✓ Yes, but it's not for me; it's for children in my community because playing outside is very beneficial for their health, so they should go outside.

'Praying' is incorrect in context; the intended word is 'playing'. 'Bile' is incorrect; use 'beneficial' or 'good'. Also 'for health' should be 'for their health' to use the correct pronoun.

× So more park is needed right now.

✓ So more parks are needed right now.

Countable noun 'park' requires plural 'parks' when referring to an increased number, and the verb must agree: 'parks are' not 'park is'.

× No, because I don't like going outside.

✓ No, because I don't like going outside.

This sentence is grammatically correct for present preference; no correction needed.

× But if I raise one I would say like different countries park.

✓ But if I had the chance, I would like to visit parks in different countries.

'If I raise one' is unclear and ungrammatical; likely intended 'if I had the chance' or 'if I had one'. 'I would say like different countries park' is awkward; rephrase to 'I would like to visit parks in different countries' for correct conditional structure and meaning.

× I wanna see the different between Japanese park with park and foreign countries park.

✓ I want to see the differences between Japanese parks and parks in foreign countries.

Use 'differences between A and B'. 'Wanna' should be 'want to' in formal speech. Use plural 'parks' and 'parks in foreign countries' for parallel structure and clarity.