Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise, correct grammar (tenses, articles, plural/singular), avoid repetition, and use linking words to connect ideas. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (when/where/how often, what you do there) using linking words like 'because', 'for example' or 'so'.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relax and feel refreshed. For example, I often take morning walks in the local park where the air is fresh and there are many trees, which makes me feel calm and energetic.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer, avoid vague phrases like 'hit more different feeling', and use clearer reasons with linking words. Use one topic sentence (Yes/No plus reason), then one specific supporting example about benefits or activities you want to do in new parks.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they offer quiet places to relax and exercise. For instance, new parks with walking trails and ponds would encourage me to walk more and reduce stress.

Sugestão: Start with a clear statement, correct grammar and word order, and add one specific detail about features you prefer (e.g., forests, flower gardens, facilities). Use linking words like 'but' or 'however' plus 'for example' to make it coherent and concise.

Exemplo: I don't have a particular park in mind, but I would like one near my home with large green areas and flower gardens. For example, a nearby park with wooded paths and blooming beds would let me enjoy pleasant scents and peaceful walks.

× Yes, I still like going to park because it made me feel fresh and comfortable with our our place around me.

✓ Yes, I still like going to go to parks because they make me feel refreshed and comfortable in the places around me.

Errors: incorrect noun form 'park' (singular) after 'going to' and mismatch of tense 'made' (past) with 'still like' (present); duplicate word 'our our'; awkward phrasing 'place around me'. Suggestions: use plural 'parks' after 'going to' or include an article 'the park' if singular; keep present tense 'make' to match 'still like'; use 'refreshed' instead of 'fresh' for a feeling; remove duplicate word and rephrase 'in the places around me' for clarity.

× I can enjoy every moment, every good atmosphere, like it's very green and fresh air.

✓ I can enjoy every moment and the pleasant atmosphere, like the greenery and fresh air.

Errors: 'every good atmosphere' is unidiomatic; 'it's very green and fresh air' mixes subject and noun phrases and misuses 'it's'. Suggestions: use 'the pleasant atmosphere' or 'the greenery and fresh air'; keep parallel structure using 'and' rather than comma plus 'like' clause.

× It make me feel very fresh.

✓ It makes me feel very refreshed.

Errors: subject-verb agreement and wrong adjective form. 'It' requires 'makes' (third person singular). 'Fresh' describing a feeling is better as 'refreshed.' Suggestion: use 'makes' and 'refreshed' to express the resulting feeling.

× Exactly, I really want to explore more parks to hit more different feeling because I like to travel to discover every place that make me feel comfortable and make me feel fresh.

✓ Exactly, I really want to explore more parks to experience different feelings because I like to travel and discover every place that makes me feel comfortable and refreshed.

Errors: 'to hit more different feeling' is incorrect collocation; use 'experience different feelings.' 'Make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular 'every place.' Parallelism improved: 'travel and discover.' Use 'refreshed' for the feeling. Suggestions: use natural verbs like 'experience' and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× I would love to go to everywhere that make my mind fresh.

✓ I would love to go everywhere that makes my mind feel refreshed.

Errors: incorrect use of preposition 'to' before 'everywhere' (unnecessary) and subject-verb agreement 'make' should be 'makes.' Also 'make my mind fresh' is unnatural; use 'makes my mind feel refreshed.' Suggestions: remove 'to' before 'everywhere,' fix verb agreement, and use natural collocation 'feel refreshed.'

× There's no specific one but I would love to go to park where near my house and also have a lot of beautiful green forest and a lot of flower that I can enjoy the smell of the flower and enjoy the most way around there.

✓ There isn't a specific park, but I would love to go to a park near my house that has lots of beautiful green trees and many flowers so I can enjoy their scent and the surrounding area.

Errors: 'There's no specific one' is acceptable but context needs 'park' specified; 'go to park' lacks article 'a park'; 'where near my house' should be 'near my house' or 'that is near my house'; 'a lot of beautiful green forest' should be 'lots of beautiful trees' or 'green forest' with correct number; 'a lot of flower' should be 'many flowers'; 'smell of the flower' better 'scent of the flowers'; 'enjoy the most way around there' is unclear and ungrammatical. Suggestions: add the article 'a,' use 'that has' to describe features, use plural nouns with quantifiers 'lots of'/'many,' and replace awkward phrase with 'the surrounding area.'