Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Speak more clearly, correct basic grammar and use a concise structure: start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear words (e.g. “pass”, “gym”, “It's there”).

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. The parks were very green and full of plants and flowers, and they had gentle hills that my friends and I loved to climb. Because there was no traffic, the parks felt peaceful and safe.

Sugestão: Make the answer more natural and concise: give a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific reasons with linking words. Fix word order and prepositions (e.g. “after a long day of work I like to go to a park”), and avoid filler sounds like “uh”.

Exemplo: Yes, I still like going to parks. After a long day of work, I often go to a nearby park because I enjoy seeing plants, birds and butterflies, and I like to walk or run there to relax.

Sugestão: Answer directly and organize thoughts: start with a clear opinion, then give two specific reasons using linking words (e.g. “because” / “for example”). Reduce hesitations and correct vocabulary (use “parks” not “posts/parts”) and grammar (subject-verb agreement).

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide green spaces for people to relax and keep active. For example, parks encourage walking, running and outdoor exercise, which improves health.

Sugestão: Be specific and coherent: name one or two parks or describe features you want to experience. Use correct nouns and adjectives (e.g. “parks”, “paths”, “plants”, “quiet” vs “noisy”), and connect ideas with linking words like “because” and “so”. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit Gardens by the Bay in Singapore because it has large paths and diverse plants. I think the greenery and fresh air there would help me relax, although some areas can be busy.

× Yes I did. I liked going to pass when I was gym because it's green, it had many plants, flowers and it still has hills to climb.

✓ Yes, I did. I liked going to the park when I was at school because it was green, it had many plants and flowers, and it still had hills to climb.

The student mixed present and past tenses and used incorrect nouns. 'pass' should be 'park'; 'gym' should be 'school' given context or use 'at the gym' if intended; tense consistency requires past tense 'was' and 'had' for past habits. Also add articles: 'the park' and 'at school'. Suggestions: choose correct nouns and keep verbs in past tense for past events, and include necessary articles.

× It's there.

✓ It was there.

The sentence refers to a past location, so the past tense 'was' is required rather than 'is'. Also 'there' is acceptable but better to integrate with previous sentence. Suggestion: match tense and use linking words to avoid short unclear sentences.

× There was no traffic in there so it was peaceful and safe to walk in.

✓ There was no traffic there, so it was peaceful and safe to walk.

Using both 'in there' and ending with 'to walk in' is redundant and awkward. Use 'there' without 'in', and omit the final preposition. Keep past tense 'was'. Suggestion: remove redundant prepositions and simplify sentence structure.

× Yes I do uh after long day of work I want to go to park to university and I want to see plants, flowers, birds and butterflies and do more activity in the park like walking, running or do exercise.

✓ Yes, I do. After a long day of work, I want to go to the park near the university to see plants, flowers, birds and butterflies, and to do activities like walking, running or exercising.

The original mixes tenses and lacks articles and prepositions; 'after long day' needs 'a', 'go to park to university' is unclear - use 'go to the park near the university'. Parallel structure: use 'to do activities' and consistent verb forms 'walking, running or exercising'. Suggestions: add articles, clarify location with prepositions, and maintain parallel verb forms.

× Yes, I would like to see more posts in the future because, uh, the parts have uh, the parts, uh, was this one and relaxing is how people is how people to umm, stay active like running, walking or do exercise.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in the future because parks are relaxing and help people stay active through running, walking or exercising.

Multiple problems: 'posts' should be 'parks'; repetition and filler words make sentence unclear; verb agreement 'parks are' not 'was'; 'how people is how people to' is ungrammatical. Use plural noun 'parks' with plural verb 'are' and parallel gerunds 'running, walking or exercising'. Suggestions: remove fillers, choose correct noun, ensure subject-verb agreement and clear structure.

× There are some parts in Singapore I want to see in the future because in the Singapore the path too large and have many plans, but also it's so noise and I have fresh air so I can relax in that pause.

✓ There are some parks in Singapore I want to visit in the future because the paths there are wide and have many plants, but it is also noisy; however, there is fresh air so I can relax in those parks.

Many noun and preposition errors: 'parts' should be 'parks'; 'in the Singapore' -> 'in Singapore'; 'path too large' -> 'paths are wide'; 'have many plans' -> 'many plants'; 'so noise' -> 'so noisy'; 'I have fresh air' awkward -> 'there is fresh air'; 'pause' -> 'parks'. Also ensure plural agreement: 'paths are' and 'those parks'. Suggestions: correct noun choices, use proper prepositions, ensure adjectives use correct forms (noisy), and maintain plural agreement.