Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Give a direct topic sentence then expand with one or two concrete details and a linking word. Avoid tense inconsistency and unnecessary repetition. Use past tense consistently when talking about childhood and add a short reason or example.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they were a place to play and explore. For example, I often spent afternoons climbing trees and playing tag with neighbors, which made me feel free and happy.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence, use present tense for current likes, and add a specific supporting detail using a linking word (e.g., "because" or "so"). This will make your answer more informative and natural.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they remind me of my childhood and help me relax. For instance, I like walking along tree-lined paths and sitting by the pond to read.

Sugestão: Be concise and correct with grammar (subject-verb agreement) and avoid repetition. Provide a clear reason and a specific example to support your opinion, using a linking word like "because" or "for example."

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because green spaces improve residents' quality of life. For example, new parks with playgrounds and walking paths would give families safe places to exercise and relax.

Sugestão: Begin with a direct answer and use correct nouns (park, not part). Give a specific reason and a brief detail about the park's history or what you hope to do there, using a linking phrase such as "because" or "so that."

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit Lonetta Park in Manila because it has an interesting historical background. I want to see the old monuments and learn more about the events that took place there, and perhaps take photos of the historic features.

× Yes I did. It made me happy whenever I go to the park.

✓ Yes, I did. It made me happy whenever I went to the park.

The sentence mixes past tense ('did', 'made') with present tense ('go'). Maintain past tense for habitual childhood actions by using 'went'. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense when referring to repeated actions in childhood (whenever I went).

× Yes I do, it reminds me of my childhood memories.

✓ Yes, I do. It reminds me of my childhood memories.

Comma splice: two independent clauses are joined with a comma. Also punctuation: replace comma with period. Tense is correct (present). Suggestion: Separate independent clauses with a period or use a conjunction (and) with proper comma.

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in our city, especially in the Philippines because most of ours most of our parks has a historical.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in our city, especially in the Philippines, because most of our parks have historical significance.

Multiple issues: repetition ('most of ours most of our') and subject-verb agreement ('parks has' should be 'parks have'). 'a historical' is incomplete; use noun phrase 'historical significance'. Also add comma before because for clarity. Suggestion: Remove repetition, match plural subject with plural verb, and complete the noun phrase.

× The only part that I want to go to in the future is Lonetta Park which is located in Manila, Philippines because of the history of that part.

✓ The only park I want to go to in the future is Lonetta Park, which is located in Manila, Philippines, because of its history.

Errors: 'part' used instead of 'park'; awkward phrasing and punctuation. Use 'park' consistently and replace 'that part' with the possessive pronoun 'its'. Also add commas to set off the nonrestrictive relative clause 'which is located...'. Suggestion: Use correct noun, possessive pronoun, and proper punctuation for clarity.