Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make the answer grammatically correct, more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid vague phrases like “get different” and repeated words. For example, say when and what you did at parks and why you liked them.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, my parents often took me there on weekends, where I played on the swings and climbed trees. I also enjoyed the fairground rides and summer events, which made each visit exciting.

Sugestão: Be direct and reduce hesitation. Use a clear topic sentence stating your current situation, then give a brief reason and a contrast with the past using linking words (e.g. however, although). Avoid filler words like “uh” and informal words like “stuffs.”

Exemplo: I still enjoy going to parks; however, I rarely have time because of my heavy workload. In the past I visited parks every weekend, but now I only go occasionally when I have free time.

Sugestão: Clarify your idea and use correct phrases. Explain what kind of parks you mean (small neighbourhood parks, pocket parks) and give specific benefits for different groups, using linking words like “for example” or “so.” Avoid repetition and fix grammar (children’s, elders → older people).

Exemplo: Yes, I would. Small neighbourhood parks would be especially useful because families and older people could relax there. For example, playgrounds would entertain children, while benches and walking paths would suit older visitors.

Sugestão: Give a confident, structured answer: state your preference, then give reasons and a plan. Replace vague phrases (“give up, give some time to myself”) with specific actions (relax, read, exercise). Use linking words like “if” or “because.”

Exemplo: I would like to visit more parks in the future, especially on weekends when I can relax. If my schedule allows, I'll go for walks, read on a bench, or do light exercises to unwind from work.

× As a child, I almost enjoy going to parks with my parents and with my family because at the park I used to get different.

✓ As a child, I almost always enjoyed going to parks with my parents and family because at the park I used to experience different activities.

The student uses present tense 'enjoy' while referring to childhood, so past tense 'enjoyed' is required (Grammar Problem Type ID 6). Additionally, 'almost' is likely intended as 'almost always' to indicate frequency. 'Get different' is ungrammatical; use 'experience different activities' to convey meaning. Suggestion: match verb tense to the time frame (past for childhood), use clear adverbial phrases for frequency, and replace vague verbs with specific nouns or verbs.

× I used to play different types of games and there used to be lots of entertainment going on.

✓ I used to play different types of games, and there was often a lot of entertainment going on.

The phrase 'used to' is fine, but 'there used to be lots of entertainment going on' is wordy; better to use 'there was often a lot of entertainment' with past tense consistency (Grammar Problem Type ID 5). 'Lots' can be formalized to 'a lot of.' Suggestion: keep past tense consistent and simplify the expression for clarity.

× Well still I would say I still love to go to parks but due to my uh, busy schedule for work and other stuffs, uh, I'm not able to go to parks anymore.

✓ Well, I would still say I love going to parks, but due to my busy work schedule and other commitments, I'm not able to go to parks anymore.

Use of present simple 'love' is correct for current preference, but word order and redundancy 'still...I would say I still' should be streamlined. 'Love to go to parks' is acceptable but 'love going to parks' is more natural. 'Other stuffs' is incorrect; use 'other commitments' or 'other things.' Maintain present tense for current habits (Grammar Problem Type ID 6). Suggestion: remove fillers, avoid redundancy, and use correct noun forms.

× But I used to enjoy it before.

✓ But I used to enjoy it before.

This sentence is grammatically correct in tense and form for describing a past habit, so no change is necessary. Explanation: 'used to' correctly indicates a past habitual action (Grammar Problem Type ID 5).

× Uh, if there is a small box that would be great because children's and uh, especially different, different children's, even elders can come together and have fun, have entertainment.

✓ Uh, if there is a small park, that would be great because children and especially different age groups, even elders, can come together and have fun and enjoy activities.

The original uses 'small box' mistakenly; likely 'small park' is intended. 'Children's' with an apostrophe is incorrect; use 'children' as plural noun. Repetition 'different, different children's' is incorrect and unclear. 'Elders' is acceptable but 'elderly people' or 'older adults' is more natural. Also add 'activities' after 'enjoy' for clarity. These are article and noun usage errors (Grammar Problem Type ID 17 and 13). Suggestion: choose correct nouns, avoid incorrect possessive apostrophes, and use clear age-group expressions.

× Well, I might go to different parks in future but I'm not sure.

✓ Well, I might go to different parks in the future, but I'm not sure.

Missing article 'the' before 'future' is required in this context (Grammar Problem Type ID 3 and 17). Also comma needed before 'but' for clarity. Use of modal 'might' is appropriate for possibility (Grammar Problem Type ID 4). Suggestion: include 'the' with 'future' and add punctuation for readability.

× It depends on my schedule and work commitments.

✓ It depends on my schedule and work commitments.

This sentence is correct as written; present simple 'depends' appropriately expresses current conditional dependency (Grammar Problem Type ID 6).

× But I would love to go in weekends to relax and give up, give some time to myself.

✓ But I would love to go on weekends to relax and give myself some time.

Use 'on weekends' not 'in weekends' (preposition error, ID 11). 'Give up, give some time to myself' is awkward; use 'give myself some time' with reflexive pronoun correctly placed (Grammar Problem Type ID 15 and 8). Also prefer 'go on weekends' with correct preposition. Suggestion: use correct prepositions for time expressions and place reflexive pronouns after the verb as standard.