Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make the answer grammatically consistent (use past tense), be concise, avoid repetition, and add one specific detail to make it vivid. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and use linking words for fluency.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to the park as a child because I could meet my friends there. We often played on the slides and took turns on a big wooden swing, which made the afternoons really fun. Because of those memories, parks still feel like a special place to me.

Sugestão: Use correct tense and subject-verb agreement, explain briefly why you no longer go, and avoid unclear fragments like 'Just unwind.' Provide one or two concise reasons with a linking word (e.g., 'because', 'although').

Exemplo: I don't go to parks as often now because I have more responsibilities and need to spend time studying and working. Although I enjoy being outdoors, I usually prefer shorter walks or meeting friends at cafés when I want to unwind.

Sugestão: Be clearer and more natural: give a short main idea then one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid awkward phrases ('way to the factor') and reduce repetition ('really, really').

Exemplo: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they provide safe places for children to play and families to relax. For example, well-maintained parks encourage community events and make neighbourhoods more pleasant and healthy.

Sugestão: Clarify your position (conflicting statements) and use consistent tense. State whether you plan to visit parks and give one clear example of a park you'd like to visit with a reason. Keep it concise and logical using linking words (e.g., 'however', 'for example').

Exemplo: I don't have specific parks planned, because I'm generally an indoor person and don't go out much. However, I would like to visit Gardens by the Bay in Singapore because of its impressive green spaces and rainforest-like sections that feel peaceful and scenic.

× Yes, actually I enjoy going to the park as a child.

✓ Yes, actually I enjoyed going to the park as a child.

The question asks about childhood (past). The student used present simple 'enjoy' which conflicts with the time frame. Use past tense 'enjoyed' to match 'as a child'. Suggestion: Use past tense when referring to habits or experiences in the past (e.g., 'I enjoyed going to the park as a child').

× This is because I could meet my friends there and enjoy the time with them while sliding down the slide and enjoy the swing with both of my friends.

✓ This is because I could meet my friends there and enjoy time with them while sliding down the slide and swinging with my friends.

Parallel structure and verb forms: the sentence mixes 'sliding' and 'enjoy the swing' which is awkward. Use consistent -ing forms for simultaneous actions ('sliding' and 'swinging') and remove redundant words. Also 'the time' can be simplified to 'time'. Suggestion: Keep verb forms parallel and concise (e.g., '...while sliding and swinging with my friends').

× Personally I don't because growing makes me realise that I needs more for more time to focus on something else rather than being on the park.

✓ Personally I don't, because growing up has made me realise that I need more time to focus on other things rather than being in the park.

Multiple issues: 'growing' as a verb needs 'up' and a perfect form 'has made' to link past change to present. 'Needs' is incorrect subject-verb agreement for 'I'; use 'need'. 'more for more time' is ungrammatical; use 'more time'. Use preposition 'in the park' not 'on the park'. Suggestion: Use correct verb forms and prepositions and ensure subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'growing up has made me realise that I need more time...').

× Just unwind.

✓ I just want to unwind.

Fragment: 'Just unwind' lacks subject and auxiliary, making it informal and incomplete in this context. Adding 'I want to' makes it a complete sentence that conveys intent. Suggestion: Use a subject and modal or auxiliary for short responses (e.g., 'I just want to unwind').

× Personally, yes, I would love to see more parks in my own city.

✓ Personally, yes, I would love to see more parks in my city.

'Own' is unnecessary and awkward in this context; 'my city' is sufficient. This is a stylistic improvement rather than a strict grammar error. The modal 'would love' is correct for preference. Suggestion: Avoid redundant words like 'own' unless emphasis is needed.

× This is the way to the factor of more children will come by and enjoy the moment and I really, really love seeing the view of a family or the part at the park where everyone is just enjoying themselves.

✓ Parks encourage more children to visit and enjoy themselves, and I really love seeing families at the park where everyone is enjoying themselves.

Multiple issues: awkward phrase 'This is the way to the factor of more children will come by' is ungrammatical. 'View of a family or the part at the park' is confusing. Rephrase to convey the meaning: parks attract children and families. Maintain parallel structure and clarity. Suggestion: Use clear subject-verb constructions and simple clauses (e.g., 'Parks encourage children to visit...').

× Personally, no, I don't have any perks.

✓ Personally, no, I don't have any preferences.

Word choice error: 'perks' means benefits; likely the student meant 'preferences' or 'parks'. If meaning 'parks', say 'parks'; if 'preferences', use that word. Use present simple 'don't have' correctly for current state. Suggestion: Choose the correct noun to match meaning ('preferences' or 'parks').

× I want to go in the future there because I'm not very outgoing person and I'm just an indoor person.

✓ I might go in the future because I'm not a very outgoing person and I prefer staying indoors.

Word order and articles: 'go in the future there' is awkward; 'there' should follow verb or be omitted. Missing article 'a' before 'very outgoing person'. 'I'm just an indoor person' is colloquial; 'prefer staying indoors' is clearer. Use modal 'might' for future possibility. Suggestion: Use correct article usage and natural word order (e.g., 'I might go in the future because I'm not a very outgoing person').

× But to be fair, I really love this one park in Singapore where there was a lot of rainforest and green city.

✓ But to be fair, I really love a park in Singapore that has a lot of rainforest and green areas.

Tense and noun issues: mixing 'love' (present) with 'there was' (past) is inconsistent. If still loving the park, use present tense 'has'. 'Green city' is incorrect noun phrase; use 'green areas' or 'greenery'. Also 'this one park' is informal; 'a park' or 'one park' is better. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent and use correct noun phrases (e.g., 'a park in Singapore that has a lot of rainforest and greenery').

× So that's my answer.

✓ So that's my answer.

This sentence is acceptable as is; it is a complete utterance closing the response. No grammar correction needed.