Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve grammar, clarity and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, use correct verb forms and pronouns, and avoid unnecessary fragments. Add one or two specific details (when, who, an activity) using linking words for flow.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. My parents took me there almost every Sunday, and we often had picnics and played games on the grass. Those visits were a highlight of my week because I could run around freely and spend time with my family.

Sugestão: Make a concise, direct response then support it with a specific reason. Correct tense and avoid repetition (e.g. 'I've been busy' and 'I don't have time' say the same). Use linking words like 'because' or 'although' to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Not really. As an adult I rarely go to parks because I work long hours and have little free time. Although I enjoy parks, I usually spend my limited leisure time catching up with family or doing household chores.

Sugestão: Answer directly, then give two clear, specific reasons. Use appropriate linking words like 'because' and 'for example'. Fix vocabulary errors ('wherein' and 'parts' -> 'where' and 'parks') and remove filler words ('umm').

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they give teenagers a safe place to meet friends and help improve the local environment. For example, new parks could include playgrounds and trees that reduce air pollution and encourage outdoor exercise.

Sugestão: Respond clearly and name a specific park or city, then explain why you want to visit with concrete details. Use correct grammar for singular/plural and avoid vague phrases like 'different'. Link reasons with 'because' or 'so'.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit Hyde Park in London in the future because I want to experience a large, busy park with varied activities. For example, I would like to join a public event there, see the Serpentine lake, and observe how people relax in such a big urban park.

× We do have a part in our hometown.

✓ We did have a park in our hometown.

The sentence has a noun error ('part' should be 'park') and tense/word choice issues; this maps to sentence structure errors because the sentence as written is not coherent. Change 'do have' to 'did have' to match past context in the response and 'part' to 'park' which is the correct noun. Suggestion: use the correct noun and simple past when describing childhood routines.

× My mother and father was able to.

✓ My mother and father were able to.

The subject 'My mother and father' is plural, so the verb must be plural ('were'). This is a subject-verb agreement error. Use 'were' to agree with the compound subject.

× Roam me in the park and we were able to have our picnic there together every Sunday and it is was.

✓ They would take me to the park, and we would have picnics there together every Sunday.

The original mixes incorrect verb forms ('Roam me'), awkward passive/active use, and the extra words 'it is was'. This is a sentence structure error. Use 'take me' for the intended meaning and 'would' or simple past 'we had' to describe habitual past actions. Remove the meaningless 'it is was'.

× Being an adult and being independent, it is very unlikely that I would go to the parks now since I have I've been busy in my work and also I don't have any time to visit to the park.

✓ As an adult and independent person, I am unlikely to go to parks now because I have been busy with work and I don't have time to visit the park.

The sentence contains tense and word-choice issues: mixing 'it is very unlikely that I would' is awkward and 'I have I've been' is redundant. This maps to present tense issues because the speaker refers to current habits. Use 'I am unlikely' and present perfect 'I have been busy' plus correct preposition 'busy with work'. Remove extra 'to' after 'visit'.

× Parks are very popular with teenagers wherein they were able to get along with their friends and I do like want to see more parts in our city since it is very helpful to improve our umm environment and it is built for.

✓ Parks are very popular with teenagers because they can get together with their friends, and I would like to see more parks in our city since they help improve the environment.

Multiple problems: 'wherein' is incorrectly used (should be 'because' or 'where'), 'were able to get along' is awkward for general statement, 'parts' should be 'parks', and 'it is built for' is incomplete. This falls under incorrect use of prepositions/conjunctions and related wording. Replace 'wherein' with 'because', use present simple for general truths ('can get together'), and correct 'parts' to 'parks'.

× Yes, I do have parks want to go in the future.

✓ Yes, there are parks I want to visit in the future.

The original is ungrammatical: 'I do have parks want to go' mixes structures and lacks a clear verb. This is a sentence structure error. Use 'there are parks I want to visit' or 'I want to visit some parks' to convey the meaning.

× 1 of this part is the park in London we're in.

✓ One of these parks is the park in London we're in.

The sentence uses wrong words ('part' instead of 'park') and incorrect demonstrative/adjective agreement ('1 of this part'). This is an incorrect use of prepositions/determiners and word choice. Use 'one of these parks' to refer to a member of a group and 'we're in' or better 'I visited in London' depending on intended meaning.

× I do want to experience how it is to be in a park with full of people or to also experience different.

✓ I want to experience what it is like to be in a park full of people, and to experience different parks or atmospheres.

The original contains awkward phrasing: 'with full of people' is incorrect and 'to also experience different' is incomplete. This is a sentence structure error. Use 'what it is like' and 'a park full of people', and complete the second idea ('different parks' or 'different atmospheres').