Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more grammatical and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid filler words and correct tense and word order. Use a linking phrase if you add a detail.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. The parks were around my house, so I could visit them easily after school, and I often played games with friends there.

Sugestão: Simplify and correct grammar: give a direct answer then one clear reason with correct verb forms and a linking word. Use precise vocabulary (exercise, relieve stress, stay healthy).

Exemplo: Definitely. I still enjoy going to parks with my partner because walking and exercising there help us relieve stress and stay healthy.

Sugestão: Make your point directly and avoid unclear or irrelevant details. Use a linking word to give a reason and a clear example. Check subject-verb agreement and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: Yes, I would. I think more parks would help people relax because they provide green space; for example, my family often visits nearby parks to walk our small dog and unwind.

Sugestão: Be concise and correct awkward phrasing. Start with a clear statement of which park and then give a brief reason, using linking words and correct tense. Avoid redundant phrases.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit Tasmania's national parks because I now live in Southwest Australia where there are few nearby parks, so I want to explore the scenery and do some hiking.

× Umm yes, when I was travel I really into going to the park as the parks surrounding my house so where I can easily to go there.

✓ Umm yes, when I was traveling I was really into going to the park because the parks surrounded my house, so I could easily go there.

Error type 8: The student used base form 'travel' instead of the gerund/participle 'traveling' and misused verb forms 'really into' without 'was' and 'to go' after 'easily'. Use past continuous/participial forms to match 'when I was...'. Also change 'surrounding' to past simple 'surrounded' to describe a past state and remove the extra 'to' before 'go'. Suggestion: use 'when I was traveling' or 'when I traveled' and ensure verbs after modal-like structures are correct (e.g., 'could easily go').

× Definitely yes, I still love going to to park parks with my partner as we can reduce the stress and doing some work out and to improve our body health.

✓ Definitely yes, I still love going to parks with my partner because we can reduce stress, work out, and improve our health.

Error type 6: Problems with verb forms and redundancy: duplicate 'to' and 'park parks', incorrect use of 'doing some work out' and 'to improve' in a list with other verbs. Use base verbs in parallel form: 'reduce', 'work out', 'improve'. Also use 'because' not 'as' for clarity and uncountable 'stress' and 'health'. Suggestion: keep verbs parallel and remove duplicates.

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city or in the countries because I believe parks can helps people relax and for example my my families like to go to parks for Pekingese and unwind.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city or in the country because I believe parks can help people relax; for example, my family likes to go to parks to picnic and unwind.

Error type 27: 'parks can helps' is incorrect subject-verb agreement; after modal-like 'can' use base verb 'help'. 'My my families' is repetition; 'families' should be singular 'family' or 'families' depending on meaning. 'Like to go to parks for Pekingese' is likely wrong word choice; maybe meant 'picnics'. Also 'in the countries' should be 'in the country'. Suggestion: use 'can help', singular 'family' and correct noun choice 'picnic' and maintain subject-verb agreement 'family likes'.

× Yes, I would like to visit Tasmania National parks because I'm recently living in Southwest Australia, there are no more.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit Tasmania's national parks because I am currently living in Southwest Australia and there are not many here.

Error type 6: 'I'm recently living' is incorrect English; use 'I am recently living' is awkward—use 'I am currently living' or 'I recently moved to'. 'There are no more' is vague; replace with 'there are not many here'. Also use possessive 'Tasmania's national parks' or 'Tasmania National Park' depending on intent. Suggestion: use 'currently' for present situation and clarify quantity with 'not many'.

× There are not many parks around my house, so that's why I would like to go to Tasmania to to explore.

✓ There are not many parks around my house, so I'd like to go to Tasmania to explore.

Error type 8: Duplicate 'to' before 'explore' and unnecessary 'that's why' after 'so' (redundant). Use contraction 'I'd' for natural speech if desired and single 'to explore'. Suggestion: ensure only one 'to' before an infinitive and avoid redundancy.