Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản và trật tự từ, trả lời trực tiếp và rõ ràng hơn, dùng một câu chủ đề ngắn rồi bổ sung chi tiết liên kết hợp lý. Tránh lặp từ và sửa thì động từ (quá khứ). Có thể thêm ví dụ cụ thể (ví dụ: chơi trò chơi, chạy nhảy) để câu có nội dung hơn.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child. My parents often took me there on weekends so I could run around, play on the swings and feed the ducks. However, because they were very busy with work, we didn’t go very often, maybe only once or twice a month.

Sugestão: Trả lời trực tiếp và nhất quán về thì (hiện tại). Tránh mâu thuẫn trong câu và dùng liên từ để nối ý. Giải thích lý do rõ ràng hơn và nêu tần suất hoặc hoạt động cụ thể khi đi công viên.

Exemplo: Not really. As an adult I rarely visit parks for relaxation. If I do go, it is usually to take photos or meet friends, rather than to play as I did when I was younger.

Sugestão: Cải thiện ngữ pháp (thêm mạo từ, chia động từ), trả lời rõ câu hỏi về mong muốn (yes/no/maybe) rồi giải thích. Dùng linking words như 'because' hoặc 'so' để kết nối lý do, và nêu ví dụ cụ thể về loại công viên cần thêm (ví dụ: công viên xanh, khu thể thao).

Exemplo: I think our city already has many parks because it is a central area, so I don't strongly feel we need a lot more. However, I would welcome more small neighborhood parks with playgrounds and seating areas because they make weekends more enjoyable for families.

Sugestão: Trả lời trực tiếp và rút gọn câu chủ đề, dùng câu bổ trợ với chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: tên công viên, hoạt động mong muốn). Chú ý trật tự từ và chia thì. Sử dụng liên từ để làm mạch lạc (e.g., 'because', 'so').

Exemplo: I don't often go to parks, but in the future I would like to visit a water park. I enjoy activities like water slides and wave pools, and I would like to go there with friends because it would be fun and relaxing.

× When I was a child I want to go out go to outside like going to parks and supermarket but for busy schedule of work in my parents so I'm not go to outside a lot of.

✓ When I was a child I wanted to go outside, like going to parks and the supermarket, but because my parents were busy with work I didn't go outside a lot.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses incorrectly. Use past tense 'wanted' and 'didn't go' to match 'When I was a child'. Also correct prepositions ('go outside') and add definite article 'the' before 'supermarket'. Improve word order for clarity.

× No, now I'm a mature person so I didn't like going to park as a pass. I am. When I'm go to a park, I'm just like to take a photos of me.

✓ No, now that I'm an adult I don't like going to parks as I did in the past. When I go to a park, I just like to take photos of myself.

Mixing present and past is incorrect: use present 'don't like' to describe current preference and past 'did' for past action. Use 'adult' instead of 'mature person' for naturalness. Use plural 'parks' or 'a park' consistently. Use correct verb form 'go' (not 'I'm go'), 'take photos' (plural) and reflexive pronoun 'myself'. Replace 'as a pass' with 'as in the past'.

× My city is a central of my country, so it's have a lot of parks and in week in weekends more parents bring their child go to parks.

✓ My city is the center of my country, so it has a lot of parks, and on weekends many parents bring their children to the parks.

Use 'the center' (definite article) and correct verb 'has' for 'it'. Use preposition 'on weekends' not 'in week in weekends'. Use plural 'children' and 'bring them to the parks'. Fix word order and quantifier 'many'.

× I'm not a person like to go parks, but to choose a park I want to go in the future is I think is the water park where I can play with my friend and have a lot of facilities to play.

✓ I'm not a person who likes to go to parks, but the park I would like to visit in the future is a water park where I can play with my friends and use many facilities.

Use relative clause 'who likes' and correct verb 'likes' for third person singular agreement with 'person'. Use 'go to parks' with preposition 'to'. Use conditional phrasing 'would like to visit' for future preference. Use plural 'friends' and 'many facilities'. Improve word order and remove redundant words.