Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Уменьшите количество пауз и слов-паразитов (uh, umm). Давайте чёткое вступление (тема + причина) и одну-две конкретные детали. Используйте связки (for example, because) и простые времена грамматически правильно (I liked, not I like when говорите о прошлом). Ограничьте ответ до 3–4 предложений.

Exemplo: Yes, I liked going to parks as a child because they had playgrounds and open fields. For example, my friends and I used to play football near the big oak tree, and we often had picnics on weekends. These memories make parks feel very special to me.

Sugestão: Избегайте повтора фраз (for example, for instance). Формулируйте тему ясно: краткое утверждение + 1–2 конкретные детали. Улучшите грамматику (I still like, the possibility to sit, enjoy the weather). Используйте связки (also, moreover) для плавности.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I like to sit on a bench and relax, and I also often ride my bike there because the paths are quiet and safe. Moreover, the fresh air helps me unwind after a busy day.

Sugestão: Сформулируйте мысль грамматически правильно и избегайте разговорных сокращений (wanna). Начните с прямого ответа, затем объясните причину кратко и конкретно. Используйте связки (because, so, therefore) и число предложений не более четырёх.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because our population is growing. More parks would provide green spaces for families and reduce congestion in crowded areas. Therefore, investing in parks now will improve residents' quality of life in the future.

Sugestão: Сделайте ответ более связным и поправьте времена (it opened two weeks ago). Дайте причину, почему хотите посетить этот парк, и добавьте конкретные подробности. Избегайте ненужных повторов (very, very).

Exemplo: Yes, I want to visit a new Japanese-style park that opened two weeks ago. I am interested because it has traditional gardens and tea houses, and I have heard the landscaping is very beautiful. I plan to go there next weekend to take photos and relax.

× Uh, when I was a child, I, I like it, uh, be in parks and going to parks and now I like to be in parks and going to parks for, for instance, uh, in parks, we can find a lot of, umm, places when we can stay and enjoy the moment, umm.

✓ Uh, when I was a child, I liked being in parks and going to parks, and now I like being in parks and going to parks because, for instance, in parks we can find many places to sit and enjoy the moment.

The student uses present tense 'like' while referring to a past time ('when I was a child'), so past tense 'liked' is required. Also 'be in parks' is incorrect; use the gerund 'being in parks' after verbs of liking. Replace awkward phrasing 'places when we can stay' with 'places to sit' or 'places to relax'. Suggestion: ensure past experiences use past tense and use gerunds after verbs like 'like'.

× Yes, I'm still like going to parks, uh, for example, for instance, umm, I like in parks that we have possibility, uh, to, to sit in there and enjoy the weather in there and we can ride a bike and enjoy the moment.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks. For example, I like that in parks we have the opportunity to sit and enjoy the weather, and we can ride a bike and enjoy the moment.

'I'm still like' is incorrect combination; use 'I still like' for current preferences. 'I like in parks that we have possibility' is ungrammatical: use 'I like that in parks we have the opportunity' or 'the possibility'. Avoid redundant 'in there' and repeated filler words. Suggestion: use 'I still like' for present preferences and 'the opportunity' or 'the possibility' for correct noun usage.

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in my country. Umm, that's that's the main reason why I'm wanna see too many, many parks in our city because in the future I think we uh have a big population. That's reason why we need to many parks.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. That's the main reason why I want to see many more parks in our city, because in the future I think we will have a large population. That is why we need many parks.

'I'm wanna' is incorrect colloquial contraction; use 'I want to'. 'Too many' implies excessive quantity; here student means 'many more' or 'more'. 'We uh have' should be future 'we will have' to match 'in the future'. 'That's reason why we need to many parks' needs article and correct quantifier: 'That is why we need many parks.' Suggestion: avoid slang like 'wanna', use 'want to', choose correct quantifiers ('many', 'many more') and use future 'will' for future predictions.

× Uh, yes, I have one park, uh, when I'm wanted to be to visit this park, it will be a Japan park.

✓ Uh, yes, I have one park I want to visit in the future; it will be a Japanese park.

'When I'm wanted to be to visit' is ungrammatical: use 'I want to visit' or 'I want to visit in the future'. 'I'm wanted' incorrectly uses past participle 'wanted' with 'am'. Also 'a Japan park' should be adjective form 'a Japanese park'. Suggestion: use simple present 'I want' to express desire and use adjective forms for country names ('Japanese').

× It's a new park in our country. They open it two weeks ago and I need to go there.

✓ It's a new park in our country. They opened it two weeks ago and I need to go there.

The student uses present tense 'open' to describe a past action 'two weeks ago'; the correct past tense is 'opened'. 'I need to go there' can remain present tense to express intention. Suggestion: use past tense for actions completed in the past with time markers like 'two weeks ago'.

× It's a very, very beautiful park.

✓ It's a very beautiful park.

Repeating 'very' twice is informal and unnecessary in formal speech; one 'very' is sufficient. Suggestion: avoid repetition of intensifiers; use 'very' once or choose a stronger adjective like 'gorgeous' or 'stunning' if you want more emphasis.