Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 문장 구조와 어휘 선택에서 자연스럽지 않은 부분이 많습니다. 먼저 주제 문장으로 바로 답변(예: No, I didn't)한 뒤, 이유를 간결하게 한두 문장으로 덧붙이세요. 불필요한 반복(‘book reading or book’)을 피하고, 동사 시제와 전치사 사용(‘in my childhood’ → ‘when I was a child’)을 교정하세요. 또한 연결어(for example, because)를 사용해 논리를 명확히 하세요.

Exemplo: No, I didn't really enjoy going to parks when I was a child. Instead, I preferred indoor activities because I liked reading books and learning to cook. For example, I often spent weekends reading stories or trying simple recipes at home.

Sugestão: 의미는 전달되지만 문법과 표현이 부정확합니다. 'become to going' 같은 표현을 고치고, 건강 관련 표현은 'improve my health'처럼 자연스러운 표현으로 수정하세요. 문장을 두 개로 나누어 주제문+이유 구조를 유지하고, 연결어('because', 'so')를 사용해 흐름을 매끄럽게 하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I do enjoy going to parks now. I started going more often because it helps improve my health and I like breathing fresh air in a pleasant outdoor environment.

Sugestão: 문장이 어색하고 의미 전달이 불명확합니다. 'work outside helps my hands' 같은 표현은 바꾸어야 합니다. 간단히 'I like working outside' 또는 'I enjoy outdoor activities'로 고치고, 이유를 한두 문장으로 구체적으로 설명하세요. 불필요한 단어('Pleasant')는 문장 안에서 자연스럽게 연결하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. I often enjoy working or relaxing outside because it gives me a break from indoor life and lets me breathe fresh air in a pleasant setting.

Sugestão: 답변이 반복되고 어색한 충동어(‘umm’)가 포함되어 있습니다. 먼저 간단한 주제문을 말한 뒤 구체적인 계획이나 이유(누구와 무엇을 할지)를 한두 문장으로 덧붙이세요. 'if there are exist' 같은 표현은 'if there are any nearby parks'로 바꾸세요. 또한 예시는 간결하고 명확하게 제시하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit more parks in the future. I hope to go with my friends or family to play games or have picnics, especially if there are nice parks nearby.

× To be honest, I wasn't a big fan of going to a park in my childhood.

✓ To be honest, I wasn't a big fan of going to parks in my childhood.

'A park' suggests a single park; the speaker talks generally about parks as a child, so plural 'parks' is appropriate. Use plural to match general childhood habit. Suggestion: use 'parks' when referring to going to parks generally as a child.

× I like indoors activities like book reading or book or cooking than other outdoors activities.

✓ I liked indoor activities like reading books or cooking more than outdoor activities.

Mix of tense and word form errors: 'like' should be past 'liked' to match 'wasn't' earlier; 'indoors activities' should be 'indoor activities' (adjective form); 'book reading or book' is redundant and should be 'reading books'; 'than other outdoors activities' should be 'more than outdoor activities'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent, use adjective form 'indoor', and use comparative structure '...more than...'.

× Yes, I become to going to parks now to be specific.

✓ Yes, I have started going to parks now, to be specific.

'Become to going' is incorrect. Use present perfect 'have started' to indicate a change up to now. 'To be specific' is fine. Use 'going to parks' without 'to' after 'become'. Suggestion: Use 'have started' or 'now I go to parks' for present habits that began recently.

× These days I feel more improve my healthy skills and I like to breathe a great atmospheres in the outdoors and the parks or anything.

✓ These days I feel my health improving, and I like to breathe fresh air outdoors in parks and similar places.

Awkward phrasing and wrong word forms: 'feel more improve my healthy skills' should be 'feel my health improving' or 'am improving my health'; 'breathe a great atmospheres' should be 'breathe fresh air' and 'atmospheres' incorrect plural. 'the outdoors and the parks or anything' is vague; use 'outdoors in parks and similar places'. Suggestion: Use 'feel + object + -ing' for continuous change (feel my health improving) and collocate 'breathe fresh air'.

× Yes, I often like to see more parks in my city.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city.

'Often like to see' is unnatural here. The question asks preference/wish about more parks; use 'would like to see' or 'I often wish there were more parks'. Suggestion: Use 'would like' when expressing desire for something to happen.

× This is because I find that work outside helps my hands and I enjoy getting some fresh air at the next atmosphere.

✓ This is because I find that working outside helps me, and I enjoy getting some fresh air in a pleasant atmosphere.

'work outside helps my hands' is incorrect; use gerund 'working' and object pronoun 'helps me'. 'the next atmosphere' is meaningless; 'a pleasant atmosphere' or 'fresh air' works. Suggestion: use 'working outside helps me' and simple collocations like 'fresh air' and 'pleasant atmosphere'.

× Pleasant.

✓ It is pleasant.

Single word fragment 'Pleasant.' is not a complete sentence. Add subject and verb: 'It is pleasant.' or attach it to previous sentence. Suggestion: Avoid sentence fragments; ensure subject and verb are present.

× Yes I want to go in the future umm like can play with Fr friends or family for example if there are exist I can play with my friends and family.

✓ Yes, I want to go in the future to play with my friends or family; for example, if parks exist nearby, I can play with them.

Multiple errors: missing punctuation, awkward modal use 'can play' placement, 'Fr friends' typo, 'if there are exist' incorrect—use 'if there are any' or 'if parks exist nearby'. Ensure future intention 'want to go in the future' is followed by purpose 'to play with...'. Suggestion: Clean sentence structure: state intention ('I want to go') + purpose ('to play with friends or family') and conditional ('if parks exist nearby' or 'if there are any parks').