Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and avoid tense/word choice errors. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and avoid redundancy.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often played games like tag and climbed trees there, which helped me make many friends. Because the parks were spacious and safe, they became my favorite place to spend afternoons.

Sugestão: Be concise and fix grammar problems (tense, articles, connectors). Use one topic sentence then one specific reason/example. Avoid filler words like 'like' and long run-on sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, although I am quite busy with work. Whenever I have free time, I go there to relax and spend quality time with my family, which helps me unwind.

Sugestão: Make the idea clear and grammatical: state opinion, then give concise reasons with specific details and linking words. Avoid vague phrasing and repetition.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in the city because the population has grown rapidly. As a result, the existing parks are crowded, so new parks would provide more green space and improve residents’ quality of life.

Sugestão: Answer directly and clearly: name the park or describe it briefly, then give specific reasons. Correct vocabulary and grammar (singular/plural, articles) and avoid unclear words like 'Jula' and 'pre'.

Exemplo: Yes, there is a good park near my house that I want to visit more often. It is special because it has a variety of playground equipment and well-maintained walking paths, which are perfect for exercising and taking my children.

× Definitely, I like to go to the park.

✓ Definitely, I liked going to parks.

The question asked about childhood habits (Did you like...), so the past tense should be used. Change 'I like to go' (present) to 'I liked going' (past habitual). Also plural 'parks' matches general childhood experience.

× I enjoy playing outside in the open area and another thing is I made many friends over there and that's a very good place.

✓ I enjoyed playing outside in the open areas, and I made many friends there; it was a very nice place.

The sentence refers to the past, so verbs should be past tense ('enjoyed', 'made', 'was'). The original used awkward conjunctions and repetition. Use 'and' plus a comma or semicolon to connect ideas clearly and 'there' instead of 'over there' for conciseness.

× Yes, I like to go to the park often now, however I have a very limited time so like since I was very busy with my work so but still whenever I get the time I love to go to the park and enjoy time with my family over there.

✓ Yes, I like to go to the park often now, but I have very limited time because I have been very busy with work; still, whenever I get the time, I love to go and spend time with my family there.

Maintain present tense for current habits ('like', 'love'). Replace repeating fillers ('so like', 'so but') with 'but' and 'because' to show cause. Use present perfect 'have been very busy' to indicate ongoing past-to-present situation. Use 'spend time' instead of 'enjoy time' for natural phrasing.

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in the city because with the time the population is grown up in the city, so earlier we have a limited park which are now become very crowded. So there is so we should need.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in the city because the population has grown over time, and previously we had a limited number of parks which have now become very crowded; therefore, we need more parks.

Use present perfect 'has grown' for change over time. Match plural nouns and verbs: 'a limited number of parks' instead of 'a limited park' and 'which have now become' (plural agreement). Remove redundant words and clarify the conclusion with 'therefore, we need more parks.'

× Yes, I love to go to the parks and I have in our city we have a very good park close to my house.

✓ Yes, I love going to parks, and in our city we have a very good park close to my house.

Use 'love going' for habitual preference. Remove duplicated 'I have' and restructure the clause for clarity: 'and in our city we have...' keeps the present tense and correct word order.

× That parks is special because of they have a wide range of Jula and walking pre.

✓ That park is special because it has a wide range of play areas and walking paths.

Correct singular/plural and subject-verb agreement: 'That park is' (singular) not 'That parks is'. Use the pronoun 'it' to refer to 'park'. Replace unclear terms 'Jula' and 'walking pre' with 'play areas' and 'walking paths' for clarity and correct nouns. Use 'has' for possession.