Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and avoid filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Remove unclear fragments like “because all.” Use linking words if adding reasons.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often spent my free time there playing games with friends and climbing trees, which helped me stay active and make close friendships.

Sugestão: Good content and clear reason. Improve natural phrasing and remove minor grammatical errors. Use one linking phrase to connect ideas and avoid repetition (e.g., “parks” twice). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because I lead a busy life and need a peaceful place to relax. For example, I usually visit a nearby park in the evenings to walk and read, which helps me unwind after work.

Sugestão: Clarify your points, correct vocabulary (‘parks’ not ‘parts’), and avoid fillers. Start with a direct statement, then give specific reasons and an example of benefit. Use linking words like ‘because’ and ‘for example’ properly.

Exemplo: Yes, I would definitely like to see more parks in my city. Because I live in a rural area with few public spaces, new parks would give families a safe place to relax and children places to play, improving community life.

Sugestão: Provide a concise, well-structured answer: topic sentence then specific reasons. Avoid fillers and incomplete sentences. Mention what you want to do there (activities) to add detail and use linking words like ‘because’ or ‘for example’.

Exemplo: Yes. I would like to visit Stanley Park in Vancouver because I have lived in Canada three years but never gone there. It is very large and I want to walk the seawall and visit the gardens to enjoy nature and take photos.

× Umm, when I was a child I really went to the parks to spend my free time and play with my friends because all.

✓ When I was a child I often went to parks to spend my free time and play with my friends.

The original sentence has awkward structure and an unclear ending 'because all.' Replace 'really went to the parks' with 'often went to parks' for natural frequency expression and remove 'the' before parks when speaking generally. Clarify and complete the idea; avoid incomplete fragments.

× Yeah, I still like to go to the parks because right now I am a busy person and I mostly like to spend my leisure time in the lap of the nature.

✓ Yes, I still like to go to parks because I am busy and I usually like to spend my leisure time in the lap of nature.

Use 'parks' without 'the' for general reference. 'Right now' is unnecessary with 'I am a busy person' — simplify. 'The nature' is incorrect; use 'nature' without the definite article. 'Mostly' replaced by 'usually' for natural collocation.

× I usually go to the parks in the evenings.

✓ I usually go to parks in the evenings.

When speaking about parks in general, omit the definite article 'the'. The plural without article is more natural for general habits.

× Yeah, definitely. I would like to see more parts in UMM in my city because uh, my city is uh, I'm living in a rural area, uh, there is not much parks.

✓ Yes, definitely. I would like to see more parks in my city because I live in a rural area and there are not many parks.

Multiple issues: 'parts' is a wrong word form; should be 'parks'. Remove 'in UMM' unless necessary; unclear placement. Use present simple 'I live' instead of 'I'm living' for permanent situation. Use 'there are not many parks' for correct subject-verb agreement and quantifier ('many' with plural).

× Uh, there's good to see parks in my village in the future so that people can spend their time.

✓ It would be good to have parks in my village in the future so that people can spend their time there.

'There's good to see parks' is ungrammatical. Use a clear expression: 'It would be good to have parks'. Add 'there' at end to clarify where people can spend time. Use conditional phrasing for future desire.

× Yes Sir. Currently I'm living in Canada and there is a Stanley Park where I have never uh, visited in my 3 years uh, I definitely want to go in the park because it is very big and uh, I want to go there to spend my time. You want to see the.

✓ Yes, Sir. Currently I live in Canada and there is Stanley Park which I have not visited during my three years here; I definitely want to go because it is very big and I want to spend time there.

Use 'I live' for a current residence. 'There is a Stanley Park' -> 'there is Stanley Park' or 'there is a park called Stanley Park'; 'which I have not visited during my three years here' is clearer than 'I have never visited in my 3 years'. Use 'go to the park' or 'go because it is big' and end sentence properly; remove unfinished 'You want to see the.' Also spell out numbers in speech transcripts as words if desired. Pronoun and clause restructuring improves clarity.