Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: もっと自然で正確な表現を使い、文を整理して簡潔に答える練習をしてください。具体的には時制の一致（過去の習慣なら過去形）、冠詞の使い方（a/an/the）、不要な列挙を避けること、そして文を2文以内に収めることを意識しましょう。例えば「I loved going to parks because I could play many sports like soccer and basketball.」のように、主文の後に一つか二つの具体例を付けてつなぎ語（like／such as）で自然に示します。発音や流暢さは比較的良いですが、文法と語順の改善が必要です。

Exemplo: I loved going to parks as a child because I could play many sports, like soccer and basketball, with my friends.

Sugestão: 否定と理由を明確にし、口語表現を控えてよりフォーマルな言い回しを使う練習をしてください。また「spend time doing something」の形を正しく使い、不要な語（a passcode 等の意味不明な表現）を取り除きます。答えは一つの主文と一つの理由文（合計2文）に収めると良いです。流暢さが気になる場合は簡潔に述べる練習をしましょう。

Exemplo: No, I don't go to parks often now because I don't have enough free time and I usually spend my spare time using my smartphone.

Sugestão: 意見表明の後に理由や効果を論理的につなげてください。不要な断片文を避け、文法（冠詞、主語と動詞の一致、形容詞の使い方）を正しく使う練習をしてください。例えば「I would like more parks because they provide places for children to play, which makes the city feel friendlier.」のように、関係詞や接続詞で理由と結果をつなげると自然です。

Exemplo: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they give children places to play, and seeing children smile makes the whole neighborhood feel happier.

Sugestão: 具体的な情報を入れて、冗長な繰り返し（there are / such as such as 等）を避けてください。場所を挙げた後、理由を1〜2文で簡潔に説明するようにしましょう。施設やアクティビティを具体的に述べると良いです（例：wide open spaces, walking paths, food stalls）。文法的には形容詞句や名詞句の位置に注意してください。

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit Yoyogi Park in Tokyo because it is very large and has wide open spaces, walking paths, and food stalls where people can relax.

× Yes, I love going to park because I could do anything such as soccer and football and basketball and so on.

✓ Yes, I loved going to parks because I could do many activities such as soccer, basketball, and so on.

The student mixes present and past tenses; the question asks about childhood, so past tense is required. 'Going to park' needs plural or article: use 'going to parks' or 'going to the park.' 'Do anything such as soccer and football and basketball and so on' is unnatural: use 'do many activities such as soccer and basketball.' Suggestion: use past tense 'loved', plural 'parks', and list activities with commas for clarity.

× No, I don't 'cause I don't have enough time to go to parks and I spend too much time to use smartphone or a passcode.

✓ No, I don't, because I don't have enough time to go to parks and I spend too much time using my smartphone.

The student uses 'don't' for present which is fine, but 'cause' is informal; use 'because'. 'Spend too much time to use smartphone' is incorrect: after 'spend time' use verb+ing (gerund) and include a possessive for 'smartphone' -> 'using my smartphone.' 'Passcode' is irrelevant and unclear; remove it. Suggestion: replace 'to use' with 'using' and add 'my'.

× Yes, I'd like to see more parks in my city and I want to see the a lot of children playing. The playing in the parks. Children smile makes people more enjoyable and happy.

✓ Yes, I'd like to see more parks in my city and I want to see a lot of children playing in them. Children smiling makes people feel happier.

'See the a lot of children playing' has article errors and word order issues; use 'see a lot of children playing.' 'The playing in the parks' is a sentence fragment; combine with previous clause or remove. 'Children smile makes people more enjoyable and happy' has subject-verb agreement and word choice errors: use gerund 'Children smiling' as subject and singular verb 'makes' or better 'makes people feel happier.' Suggestion: use concise sentences, correct articles, gerunds and verb agreement.

× Yes, I want to go Yoyogi Park in Tokyo because there are the park is so big and there are lots of ****. There are a lot of facilities and amusement such as such as.

✓ Yes, I want to go to Yoyogi Park in Tokyo because the park is very big and there are many attractions. There are a lot of facilities and amusements.

'Go Yoyogi Park' needs preposition 'go to.' 'There are the park is so big' is ungrammatical and redundant; use 'the park is very big.' 'Lots of ****' is unclear; replace with 'many attractions.' 'Facilities and amusement such as such as' repeats and lacks examples; simplify to 'facilities and amusements' or add examples. Suggestion: include correct preposition, remove redundancy, and provide clear nouns or examples.