Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and articles (e.g. “a park”, “theme parks are”). Avoid redundancy and keep to 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I spent hours on the slides and played games with neighbourhood friends, and my parents often took us for weekend picnics. Also, theme parks were exciting because I could meet many other children and remember those visits clearly.

Sugestão: Clarify and complete the sentence, correct vocabulary (breathe, not bread) and sentence boundaries. Use a topic sentence then one specific example of how you use parks now, connected with a linking word like “because” or “for example.” Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they are a great place to breathe fresh air and relax. For example, I often go for a short walk there with my friends to chat and unwind after work.

Sugestão: Express your opinion clearly and use correct grammar and word choice (e.g. “focus more on improvements” or “focus on improving”). Provide a reason and at most one specific example using a linking word like “because” or “for instance.”

Exemplo: I don't think we need more parks in my city because we already have several good green spaces. Instead, I believe the city should focus on improving public transport and building more schools to meet other urgent needs.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence naming the park, then add specific reasons why you want to visit. Fix small grammar issues (remove extra “is”, use “near my house”, “meet friends”). Use linking words like “because” or “also.”

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit Nature Park, which is near my house. I have heard it has a very beautiful garden and several walking paths, so it would be a pleasant place to relax and meet friends.

× I love going to park.

✓ I love going to the park.

The sentence omits the definite article 'the' before a singular, countable noun when referring to a specific place type in general. Use 'the park' to mean parks in general or a specific park; without an article it is ungrammatical. Suggestion: include 'the' before 'park' when talking about going to parks (I love going to the park).

× As a child I remember spending hours on the slides and staying with friends and my parents would take me for picnic during the weekend.

✓ As a child I remember spending hours on the slides and staying with friends, and my parents would take me on picnics during the weekends.

Several issues: 'take me for picnic' is incorrect preposition and article use — use 'take me on picnics' (preposition 'on' plus plural 'picnics' for repeated events). 'During the weekend' when referring to habitual weekend events should be plural 'weekends' or 'on weekends.' Also add a comma before 'and' joining clauses. Suggestion: use 'on picnics' and 'weekends' for habitual past activities.

× I also theme park are a great place to meet other kids so I have a lot of memory.

✓ I also think theme parks are a great place to meet other kids, so I have a lot of memories.

Multiple errors: 'theme park are' mixes singular and plural — use 'theme parks are' (plural noun with plural verb). Missing verb 'think' was likely intended. 'a lot of memory' should be 'a lot of memories' (countable plural). Also add comma before 'so'. Suggestion: ensure subject and verb agree in number and use plural for countable noun 'memories'.

× Yes I do I think they are a great place to bread some fresh air and I also think that they are a nice place to spend quality time with your family or friends I usually.

✓ Yes, I do. I think they are a great place to breathe some fresh air, and I also think that they are a nice place to spend quality time with your family or friends.

Errors: 'bread' is a misspelling of the verb 'breathe' (present tense). Run-on sentence and missing punctuation — split into sentences and add commas. The final 'I usually' is incomplete and unnecessary; remove or complete it. Suggestion: use correct verb 'breathe', add punctuation, and remove the stray 'I usually'.

× I think the city should focus more on improve some improvement such as upgrading public transport or building more schools.

✓ I think the city should focus more on improvements such as upgrading public transport or building more schools.

Incorrect structure: 'focus on improve' is wrong — after 'focus on' use a noun or gerund. 'Some improvement' is awkward; 'improvements' (plural noun) fits better when listing examples. Suggestion: use 'focus on improvements' or 'focus more on improving'.

× Yes, that is Nature Park.

✓ Yes, that's Nature Park.

Minor style: 'that is Nature Park' is grammatically acceptable but contraction 'that's' is more natural in speech. No major grammatical error; kept as correction to match spoken style. (If an article were required for a descriptive common noun it would be 'the Nature Park', but if 'Nature Park' is a proper name, no article is needed.)

× It is located near to my house and I heard that they have a very beautiful garden there.

✓ It is located near my house, and I heard that it has a very beautiful garden.

Use 'near' without 'to' when indicating proximity: 'near my house.' Also pronoun agreement: 'Nature Park' is singular, so use 'it has' rather than 'they have.' Suggestion: use correct preposition 'near' and match pronoun number to the singular noun.

× So I think it is is a great place to meet your friend.

✓ So I think it is a great place to meet your friends.

Errors: duplicated 'is is' — remove the extra word. 'Your friend' is singular and sounds odd when speaking about meeting people in a public park; 'your friends' (plural) is more natural unless referring to one specific friend. Suggestion: remove duplicate word and use plural 'friends' for general meaning.