Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more grammatical, concise and direct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms (use past tense consistently) and awkward phrases like "at that age limit."

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I used to visit the local playground almost every weekend because my friends and I would play football and sometimes tennis there, which made those visits exciting and memorable.

Sugestão: Use correct tense and reduce repetition. Begin with a clear present-tense statement about current habits, then add a specific reason and an example with linking words (e.g., "because", "for example"). Keep it to two or three sentences maximum.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me unwind after a hectic day. For example, I often sit on a bench to read novels and breathe fresh air, which helps me relax and feel refreshed.

Sugestão: Be concise and use clearer reasoning with better vocabulary. State your opinion, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., "because", "so"). Avoid unclear or repeated phrases and incorrect constructions like "having more parks to having more parks".

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in the city because urban development is reducing green spaces. More parks would improve air quality and provide residents with places to exercise and relax.

Sugestão: Open directly with the park name and give two precise reasons why you want to visit using linking words (e.g., "because", "for example"). Avoid filler phrases like "So this is an interesting question." and reduce redundancy ("amenities and facilities" is repetitive).

Exemplo: I would like to visit Dream City Park in Hoshiarpur because it is well maintained and offers many facilities, such as walking trails and play areas. For example, I’m especially keen to try the landscaped gardens and picnic spots there.

× Of course I would like to go to.

✓ Of course I liked going to parks.

Original sentence uses 'would like to go to' which is awkward and incomplete here; the question asked about past preference. Use past tense 'liked' and include the object 'parks' for clarity. Suggest using simple past for habitual past actions.

× I like to go parks when I was a child because as a child everyone likes to go to the playgrounds because they are very enthusiastic at that age limit and play outdoor games like football, basketball, tennis and so on.

✓ I liked going to parks when I was a child because children are very enthusiastic at that age and play outdoor games like football, basketball and tennis.

Multiple issues: tense should be past ('liked' not 'like'); missing preposition 'to' before 'parks'; 'as a child' repeated and redundant; 'age limit' is incorrect word choice — use 'age' or 'that age'; 'play outdoor games' is fine but streamline. Keep consistent past tense for past habits.

× I still used to go to parks because after a hectic day, I love to go to parks to relax my mind and refresh my body.

✓ I still go to parks because after a hectic day I like to go there to relax my mind and refresh my body.

'Used to' indicates a past habit; for a current habit use simple present 'I still go'. Maintain present tense in the rest of the sentence ('like' not 'love' is acceptable but 'I love to go to parks' is also fine). Avoid repeating 'parks' by using 'there'.

× And sometimes I prefer to read my favorite novels and books by sitting in the park, which is my favorite spot to relax after a busy schedule.

✓ Sometimes I prefer to read my favorite novels and books while sitting in the park, which is my favorite place to relax after a busy day.

Use 'while' rather than 'by' when describing doing one action during another. 'Spot' is acceptable but 'place' is more natural; 'busy schedule' should be 'busy day' for clarity. Maintain present tense.

× Definitely I would like to see parks in the city.

✓ Definitely I would like to see more parks in the city.

Sentence is incomplete — specify 'more parks' to answer the question about wanting additional parks. Word order: 'Definitely, I would like' or 'I would definitely like' is more natural.

× I would like to see more parks in the city because day by day everything is developing and city needs more greenery rather than the demolishing of buildings.

✓ I would like to see more parks in the city because as the city develops it needs more greenery rather than the demolition of buildings.

Use 'as the city develops' instead of 'day by day everything is developing'; 'city' needs 'the' when specific; 'demolishing' should be noun 'demolition'. Keep present simple/general statement.

× So it's better to be more parks to having more parks in the cities rather than having a new.

✓ So it is better to have more parks in cities rather than build new buildings.

Original is ungrammatical: 'better to be more parks to having' is incorrect. Use infinitive 'to have' and correct noun phrase 'in cities'. 'Rather than having a new' is incomplete — specify 'build new buildings' or 'construct new buildings'.

× So this is an interesting question.

✓ That is an interesting question.

Small stylistic issue: 'So this is an interesting question' is acceptable but 'That is an interesting question' is more natural in response. No major grammar error but adjusting improves fluency.

× I would like to go to the Dream City Park which is located in Hoshiarpur because the government organized this park very well and the amenities and facilities are quite well available in this park.

✓ I would like to visit Dream City Park in Hoshiarpur because the government has organized it very well and the amenities and facilities are readily available there.

Use 'visit' rather than 'go to' for a planned future visit; include present perfect 'has organized' to indicate the park's current state as a result of past action; avoid repeating 'this park' and use 'it' or 'there'; 'quite well available' is awkward — use 'readily available'.

× So this is my dream place to visit in the future.

✓ So this is my dream place to visit in the future.

Sentence is grammatically correct. It matches the future intention context. No correction needed.