Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be clearer and more grammatical: start with a direct topic sentence saying whether you liked parks, then give two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid hesitation sounds and repetitive fragments. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and use past tense consistently when talking about childhood.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. I often met friends there and we played games together, which helped me build social skills. Also, spending time outdoors reduced my stress from school, so the park felt like a relaxing escape.

Sugestão: Answer directly then give concise reasons using correct tense and linking words. Use present simple for current habits and avoid fragmentary phrases like 'I do curious'. Mention specific activities you do in parks to be more vivid.

Exemplo: Yes, I still like going to parks now. Since I have many exams and homework, I often go for short walks there to relax and clear my mind. I also enjoy watching birds and trees because nature helps me feel refreshed.

Sugestão: Be polite and precise in expressing disagreement. Start with a clear direct response, then explain with specific reasons and contrast using linking words (e.g., 'however', 'but'). Avoid vague phrases like 'too easy'—explain what you mean (e.g., facilities aimed only at children).

Exemplo: Not really. Although parks are useful, many in my city are designed mainly for young children with playgrounds, so they lack spaces for adults such as walking paths or quiet seating. Therefore I would prefer parks that offer a variety of facilities for all ages.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence naming the park you want to visit and then give specific reasons using linking words. Correct tense and word choice (e.g., 'national parks in the US', 'I have seen many online videos'). Mention what you hope to experience or learn to make it more concrete.

Exemplo: I would like to visit the national parks in the United States in the future. I have watched many online videos about their dramatic landscapes, and since I studied geography in secondary school, I want to see those natural features in person and learn more about ecosystems and geology.

× Umm, yes, I do curious.

✓ Umm, yes, I am curious.

The original uses 'do curious', which is incorrect word order and verb choice. Use the verb 'to be' with the adjective 'curious' to describe a state: 'I am curious.' This corrects sentence structure and subject-complement agreement.

× That is very funny part.

✓ That was a very fun part.

'Funny' means causing laughter; 'fun' describes enjoyment. Also, the context refers to past experience, so use past tense 'was.' Change 'part' to 'part of it' is optional, but 'a very fun part' is natural.

× You can you learn, make a friend?

✓ You can learn and make friends there.

The original repeats 'you' and has incorrect verb forms. Use 'you can' + base verbs and plural 'friends' to express the general ability to make friends. Reorder to a natural affirmative statement rather than a question if context implies description.

× And also when it, when I'm child, I think I have a lot of stress in uh, my public life.

✓ And also, when I was a child, I had a lot of stress in my public life.

Use the past tense 'was' for 'when I was a child' and 'had' for past possession/experience. Remove the extraneous 'it' and 'uh.' This fixes tense and pronoun/reference issues.

× So I think when you're playing the, uh, when you're going park, that can have a very easier relaxed time.

✓ So I think when you're playing or going to the park, you can have a very easy, relaxed time.

Use 'going to the park' with the article 'the', combine forms with 'or', and correct 'have a very easier relaxed time' to 'have a very easy, relaxed time.' 'Easier' is comparative and inappropriate here; 'easy' modifies 'relaxed time.' Also adjust word order for natural English.

× Yes, I do curious good part you can to have a relaxed time.

✓ Yes, I am curious; a good thing is that you can have a relaxed time.

Replace 'do curious' with 'am curious' and rephrase 'you can to have' to 'you can have.' Clarify 'good part' to 'a good thing' for natural expression. Maintain present tense for general statements.

× Actually, when I'm grow up, I need to prepare the public exam and also have a lot of homework.

✓ Actually, when I grow up, I will need to prepare for public exams and will have a lot of homework.

Use 'when I grow up' (present simple for future time) with 'will' to indicate future obligation. Use 'prepare for' a test and pluralize 'exams' if general, or keep singular with article. Add 'will' before 'have' for future tense consistency.

× But I'm thinking I'm going to part I can to have short relaxed time and also can see, uh, the nature.

✓ But I think if I go to the park I can have a short, relaxed time and also see nature.

Use 'I think' rather than 'I'm thinking' for opinion; 'go to the park' requires article 'the'; remove extraneous 'to' after 'can' and use 'see nature' (no article). Reorder for clarity and natural phrasing.

× Not actually because some part is good for child, they not to take care about the, uh, the adults.

✓ Not really, because some parts are designed for children and not for adults to use.

Use 'not really' for negation, plural 'parts', 'children' (not 'child'), and correct structure 'not for adults to use' instead of 'they not to take care about the adults.' This fixes pronoun reference and unnatural phrasing.

× So when I'm going to part, I just think, oh, this is too easy or this is not good for me.

✓ So when I go to the park, I just think, 'Oh, this is too childish' or 'This is not suitable for me.'

'Going to part' should be 'go to the park.' 'Too easy' is odd here; 'too childish' or 'not suitable for me' better express the intended meaning. Use simple present for habitual reactions.

× The nature park in US because I have seen a lot of videos in online they are talking about the US parked both natural but actually in my secondary school I'm learning geography.

✓ The nature parks in the US, because I have seen a lot of online videos about US parks being very natural, and in secondary school I study geography.

Add article 'the' before 'US', use plural 'parks' if general, and 'online videos' is the correct order. 'Parked both natural' is unclear; rephrase to 'parks being very natural.' Use present simple 'I study geography' for habitual study.

× I think I want to learn more about the nature of see the nature part.

✓ I think I want to learn more about nature and see natural areas.

Original mixes phrases 'the nature of see the nature part.' Simplify to 'learn more about nature' and 'see natural areas.' This corrects sentence structure and improves clarity.