Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be clear and direct: start with a concise topic sentence that answers the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler words (uh, umm) and incorrect phrases (e.g., "keen off"). Use correct tense and simple vocabulary you know well.

Exemplo: To be honest, I didn’t enjoy going to parks as a child. I preferred staying indoors where I could play video games with my friends or read books, because those activities felt more relaxing and fun to me.

Sugestão: Answer directly and expand with one clear reason and a specific example. Remove hesitation words and correct collocations (e.g., say "keen on" or "I enjoy"). Use linking words like "because" to connect ideas and finish the sentence fully.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy going to parks now because they help me relax and spend quality time with friends and family. For example, last weekend we had a picnic and played frisbee, which was a great break from our busy routines.

Sugestão: Give a clear opinion and support it with specific reasons and a short example. Replace vague phrases (e.g., "natural and gorgeous parts") with concrete descriptions like "green spaces with trees, playgrounds, and walking paths." Reduce hesitations and use plural agreement ("parks help").

Exemplo: Yes, I would. I think more green spaces with trees, playgrounds and walking paths would improve city life because they let people relax and exercise. For instance, a nearby park with a walking trail would be ideal for busy workers to unwind after work.

Sugestão: Give a specific park name or location, explain why you want to visit, and include a short detail from a reliable source (friend, review). Avoid fillers and grammatical errors (say "I want to visit a new park in my hometown" and "I heard it has a beautiful atmosphere").

Exemplo: Yes, I’d like to visit the new Riverside Park in my hometown. My friends told me it has beautiful gardens and a calm riverfront, so I’m looking forward to walking there and taking photos.

× Uh, to be honest, when it was younger I uh, didn't uh, keen off uh, going to parks, umm, because I appreciate more uh, to stay uh, indoors, umm, either playing with the teams or umm, getting lost in a book.

✓ Uh, to be honest, when I was younger I didn't like going to parks, because I preferred staying indoors, either playing with my toys or getting lost in a book.

The student used incorrect pronoun and verb forms. 'When it was younger' should be 'when I was younger' (incorrect use of pronouns). 'Didn't keen off' is ungrammatical; the correct verb is 'didn't like' (verb choice but here classified under pronoun/subject reference). 'I appreciate more to stay indoors' mixes tenses and verb patterns; correct: 'I preferred staying indoors' to match past preference. 'Playing with the teams' likely intended 'playing with my toys' or 'playing games' and requires correct possessive. Suggestion: use the correct subject 'I', use 'didn't like' for negative past preferences, and use gerund after verbs expressing preference (prefer + -ing).

× Uh, yes, definitely. Umm, now I, I'm really keen of, uh, going to parks with my friends or family to hang out, umm, because it's, umm, it's helps me to escape from, uh, these lifestyle and, uh, spend quality time with my friends or.

✓ Uh, yes, definitely. Now I'm really keen on going to parks with my friends or family to hang out, because it helps me to escape from this lifestyle and spend quality time with my friends.

'Keen of' is incorrect; the correct preposition after 'keen' is 'on' (incorrect use of prepositions). 'It's helps' is wrong because of extra 's' after contraction 'it's' and subject-verb redundancy; correct is 'it helps' (subject-verb agreement but here tied to prepositional correction). 'These lifestyle' should be 'this lifestyle' (incorrect demonstrative/article choice). Suggestion: use 'keen on', remove redundant words, use 'this' for singular noun, and follow with infinitive or gerund structures appropriately.

× Umm, yes, definitely. I, I'd like to see, uh, some kind of, umm, natural and gorgeous parts in my city.

✓ Umm, yes, definitely. I'd like to see some natural and beautiful parks in my city.

'Some kind of natural and gorgeous parts' contains incorrect noun choice and number. 'Parts' is vague and should be 'parks' (countable plural). 'Some kind of' is unnecessary. Also 'gorgeous' is fine but 'beautiful' is more natural here. Suggestion: use the correct plural noun 'parks' and avoid awkward 'some kind of' when referring to multiple examples.

× Uh, because umm, parks helps uh, people uh, to feel better when they uh, get tired of battle and hustle of city life.

✓ Uh, because parks help people to feel better when they get tired of the battle and hustle of city life.

'Parks helps' is incorrect subject-verb agreement: plural subject 'parks' needs plural verb 'help' (subject-verb agreement errors). Also 'get tired of battle and hustle' needs 'the' before 'battle' and smoother phrasing 'the battle and hustle of city life'. Suggestion: match verb number to subject and include appropriate articles for clarity.

× Uh, yes definitely. I really want to go a new park, uh, which is located in my, uh, hometown.

✓ Uh, yes, definitely. I really want to go to a new park which is located in my hometown.

'Go a new park' is missing the preposition 'to' and misuses the article placement; correct is 'go to a new park' (article errors and preposition omission). Also remove unnecessary commas around 'hometown'. Suggestion: use 'go to' before places and the indefinite article 'a' before 'new park'.

× I hear umm, about umm, it's umm, beautiful atmosphere from my friends.

✓ I heard from my friends that it has a beautiful atmosphere.

'I hear about it's beautiful atmosphere from my friends' mixes tenses and prepositions incorrectly. Use 'heard from my friends' (correct past reporting), and report clause 'that it has a beautiful atmosphere'. 'From my friends' should follow 'heard'. Suggestion: use correct reporting verb tense and place 'from my friends' immediately after 'heard'.