Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, fix verb forms (e.g., 'when I was a child'), and avoid repeating the same idea. Add one specific supporting detail using a linking word.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to the park as a child. My mother often took me to a small park near our house, where I made many happy memories playing on the swings and feeding the ducks by the pond.

Sugestão: Reduce hesitations and redundancy. Give a clear topic sentence, then one or two concrete reasons using linking words. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and repetitive phrases.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy visiting parks because they are full of greenery and fresh air. For example, I often walk there to relax and sometimes play on the swings or join a small game with friends.

Sugestão: Organize your answer: state your opinion, then give two clear reasons with linking words and correct grammar (e.g., 'there are not many parks'). Use specific examples instead of vague phrases.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my town because there are not many public green spaces at the moment. More parks would encourage people to exercise and provide peaceful places to relax, improving the community's well-being.

Sugestão: Be concise and avoid repetition. Start with a direct answer, then name the specific place and give a brief reason. Correct sentence fragments and repetition.

Exemplo: I don't have many specific plans, but I would like to visit the zoo park in Chandigarh. I have heard it has a large variety of animals and beautiful gardens, so it would be an interesting and relaxing trip.

× Well, yes, when I was child my mother used to take me to the park which is nearby to my house and I enjoyed a lot of memories there and I used to play with the swings there.

✓ Well, yes, when I was a child my mother used to take me to the park which is near my house, and I have many fond memories there; I used to play on the swings there.

Missing article 'a' before 'child' is a singular/plural/number issue. 'Nearby to my house' is incorrect preposition use; 'near my house' is correct. 'I enjoyed a lot of memories' is unnatural: use 'I have many fond memories' to express recollection. Use 'play on the swings' not 'play with the swings' for correct verb+object collocation.

× Well, yes, I like to visit the parks as parks have many features like greenery and it has swings which uh, on which I can play some uh, games and can swing them for relaxing my mind.

✓ Well, yes, I like visiting parks because they have many features like greenery and swings where I can play games and swing to relax my mind.

Use of 'to visit' vs 'visiting' is a style choice; here 'visiting parks' is more natural. 'Parks have many features like greenery and it has swings' shows number disagreement and repetition; use plural 'they' and 'swings' without extra 'it'. 'which uh, on which I can play some uh, games and can swing them' is ungrammatical: use 'where I can play games and swing' and do not 'swing them' (wrong object). Also present simple is appropriate for habits.

× Obviously yes, as I live in a village so in the main city of my village there are not too much parks, but in my future I want to see many of the parks there as it helps people to walk there and it has a greenery which keeps the mind of the people fresh.

✓ Obviously yes. I live in a village, so in the main town near my village there are not many parks, but in the future I would like to see more parks there because they help people walk and the greenery keeps people's minds fresh.

'Too much parks' is incorrect: 'much' is used with uncountable nouns; for countable plural use 'many'. 'Main city of my village' is unclear; 'main town near my village' is better. 'In my future' should be 'in the future'. 'It helps people to walk there and it has a greenery' has pronoun and article errors: use plural 'they' for parks and 'greenery' is uncountable so no 'a'. Also adjust tense/modal 'would like' for polite future desire.

× So, there is not any particular choice that I can I can visit in my future. But I think there is one park which is a zoo in Chandigarh. So I think whenever I go to the Chandigarh. So I definitely wish to visit it.

✓ So, there is not any particular place that I plan to visit in the future. But I think there is a park that is also a zoo in Chandigarh, and I would definitely like to visit it when I go to Chandigarh.

'There is not any particular choice that I can I can visit' is awkward and contains repetition; use 'place' or 'specific park' and remove duplicate 'I can'. 'In my future' should be 'in the future'. 'There is one park which is a zoo in Chandigarh' is acceptable but improve clarity: 'a park that is also a zoo in Chandigarh'. 'Whenever I go to the Chandigarh' incorrect article 'the' before proper noun; use 'to Chandigarh'. Use 'would like' or 'would definitely like' to express future intention politely.