Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: حاول جعل الإجابة أكثر طبيعية وبنية أوضح؛ ابدأ بجملة مباشرة تُجيب على السؤال بصيغة زمن الماضي، ثم أضف تفاصيل محددة مترابطة باستخدام روابط مثل “because”, “so” أو “and”. تجنّب الأخطاء النحوية (مثلاً: like to playing → liked playing) والردود المكررة والعبارات غير الواضحة مثل «more comfortable and active». قدم أمثلة ملموسة عن الأنشطة التي كنت تفعلها في الحديقة.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because I often played there with my sisters and brothers. For example, we used to play hide-and-seek and fly kites, which kept us active and happy. Because the park had swings and open spaces, it was a favorite place for family weekends.

Sugestão: اجعل الإجابة مختصرة وواضحة وادمج الربط المنطقي. ابدأ بجملة مباشرة توضح الوضع الحالي ثم اذكر الأسباب المحددة بشكل صحيح نحويًا. استبدل العبارات الغامضة («eyelids exam») بتوضيح واضح أو اسم الاختبار، وتجنّب التكرار والاهتزازات الصوتية مثل “uh”.

Exemplo: Not really — I don’t go to parks much now because I am very busy studying for important exams and helping with many tasks at home. As a result, I haven’t had time for regular visits to parks recently.

Sugestão: أجب بطريقة منظمة: جملة رأي واضحة ثم أمثلة محددة عن المشاكل والحاجات. صِغ الجمل بصيغة صحيحة (مثلاً: “My city doesn’t have many parks” و “this park needs improvements”). حدد بالضبط ما الذي ينقص: مرافق، أنشطة، نظافة أو معدات لعب، واستخدم روابط لشرح التأثير على السكان.

Exemplo: To be honest, my city doesn’t have many parks — only one. That park lacks facilities and activities, such as playground equipment, seating areas, and walking paths, so it definitely needs improvements to serve the community better.

Sugestão: ابدأ بإجابة مباشرة ثم قدّم تفاصيل محددة عن سبب رغبتك والأنشطة التي تتوقع القيام بها. استبدل التعبيرات المحشوة والغامضة («get to visit», «do it a lot of things that I need to do») بجمل واضحة ومحددة. استخدم روابط لتوضيح التوقعات والخطط المستقبلية.

Exemplo: Yes, I would love to visit the water parks in Dubai because I enjoy swimming and trying new rides. For example, I’d like to try the wave pools and water slides, and spend a full day relaxing and exploring the attractions there.

× Yes, I like going to parks as a child because I like to playing with my sisters and with my brothers.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks as a child because I liked playing with my sisters and brothers.

The sentence mixes present tense 'like' with the past reference 'as a child'. Use past tense 'liked'. Also 'to playing' is incorrect: after 'liked' use the gerund 'playing', not 'to playing'. Additionally, 'with my sisters and with my brothers' is wordy; use 'sisters and brothers'. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense for childhood habits and use gerund after verbs like 'like' when referring to activities.

× So a parks give me more comfortable and active, active and it is has more activities to do it.

✓ So parks made me feel more comfortable and active, and they had more activities to do.

'a parks' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'parks'; choose singular or plural. The tense should match past ('made','had') because referring to childhood. 'More comfortable and active' needs 'feel' to link adjectives. 'It is has' is ungrammatical; use 'they had' to agree with plural 'parks'. Remove redundant 'it' at the end. Suggestion: Match singular/plural, keep consistent tense, and use correct verb to link adjectives (feel).

× Actually, I know it's different like the bus because now I have a lot of things that I should to doing, like like studying for eyelids exam and, uh, do it a lot of jobs in my home.

✓ Actually, I know it's different now because I have a lot of things that I should be doing, like studying for exams and doing many chores at home.

Mixes present awareness 'know' with unclear comparison 'like the bus'; simplified to 'different now'. 'Should to doing' is wrong: use 'should be doing' or 'should do'. 'Studying for eyelids exam' seems incorrect; likely 'exams'. 'Do it a lot of jobs' should be 'doing many chores' or 'many jobs'. Ensure correct verb forms: 'studying' and 'doing' (gerunds) after 'like'. Suggestion: Use 'should be doing' for ongoing obligations and use gerunds for activities.

× So I didn't have much time to, uh, go to the parks.

✓ So I didn't have much time to go to the parks.

Main issue is redundancy of filler words; grammatically the sentence is fine for past reference. Keep simple past 'didn't have' + infinitive 'to go'. Suggestion: Remove unnecessary fillers for clarity.

× To be honest, my city I didn't have a more parks guest.

✓ To be honest, my city didn't have many parks.

The original has incorrect word order 'my city I didn't have' and incorrect quantifier 'a more parks guest'. Use correct subject-verb order 'my city didn't have' and correct quantifier 'many parks' for plural countable nouns. Suggestion: Use proper subject-verb order and appropriate quantifiers: 'many' for plural nouns.

× We have a one park and the this park didn't have a much activities like ceilings and daiso it it it need to improvement.

✓ We have one park and this park didn't have many activities like swings and slides; it needed improvement.

Use 'one park' without article 'a'. 'The this park' is incorrect; use 'this park'. 'Didn't have a much activities' mixes singular 'a' with plural 'activities' and should be 'many activities'. 'Ceilings and daiso' seem incorrect—likely 'swings and slides'. 'It it it need to improvement' should be 'it needed improvement' (past tense) and 'needed' agrees with past reference. Suggestion: Use correct articles ('one' without 'a'), proper quantifiers ('many'), correct vocabulary, and consistent past tense.

× Yes, I want to get to the water park in the Dubai because I like swimming and I like to enjoy with the new things.

✓ Yes, I want to go to the water park in Dubai because I like swimming and I like enjoying new things.

Use 'want to go to' rather than 'get to'. Omit 'the' before 'Dubai'. 'Like to enjoy with the new things' is ungrammatical: use 'like enjoying new things' or 'like to enjoy new experiences'. Use gerund 'enjoying' after 'like' or 'like to enjoy' followed by direct object. Suggestion: Use 'go to' for visiting places, omit unnecessary articles before proper nouns, and use gerund for activities.

× So I hope in the future get to visit this park and do it a lot of things that I need to do.

✓ So I hope in the future to visit this park and do many things I want to do there.

Missing 'to' after 'hope' + infinitive: 'hope to visit'. 'Get to visit' is acceptable but wordy; use 'to visit'. 'Do it a lot of things' is ungrammatical; use 'do many things'. 'That I need to do' is awkward—use 'I want to do there' to express intention. Suggestion: Use 'hope to + verb', correct infinitive forms, and appropriate quantifiers ('many').