Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve grammar, sentence structure and conciseness. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Fix verb forms (e.g., 'made me' → 'made me') and reduce repetition (avoid 'very, very').

Exemplo: Yes — I loved going to parks as a child because they made me happy. For example, my friends and I often brought food and picnicked there every weekend, which helped us relax and play together.

Sugestão: Be natural and concise. Give a clear topic sentence then one reason with a linking word. Correct age phrasing ('I am 22') and combine ideas smoothly (e.g., 'I prefer going to the cinema and restaurants'). Avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'just'.

Exemplo: Not really. Now that I am 22, I prefer going to the cinema or eating at restaurants because these activities are more social and convenient for my friends and me.

Sugestão: Answer the question directly and expand with a specific reason. Use correct future phrasing ('I will take my children') and add one supporting detail with a linking word. Avoid grammar mistakes ('children's' → 'children').

Exemplo: Yes, I would like more parks in the city because I plan to take my children there in the future; moreover, having more green spaces would make the city healthier and more family-friendly.

Sugestão: Respond directly and give a reason or alternative. Be natural and use linking words. If you prefer games, explain why and, if possible, mention a specific park you might visit someday to show flexibility.

Exemplo: Not really — I don't usually visit parks now because I prefer playing 3D games at home. However, I might visit a large city park in the future for a picnic or outdoor festival if friends invite me.

× Yes, very much because it make me happy and joyful and I see my friends a lot of time and uh, we, we take a food with us and start eating there every day and every weekend. It's very, very nice.

✓ Yes, very much because it makes me happy and joyful, and I saw my friends a lot of the time, and we took food with us and started eating there on weekends. It was very, very nice.

Multiple errors: 'it make' is subject-verb agreement error (third person singular requires 'makes') -> Grammar problem type ID 2. 'I see my friends a lot of time' is wrong tense and collocation; as a child the speaker should use past tense 'I saw' and 'a lot of the time' is the correct phrase -> Grammar problem type ID 5. 'we, we take a food with us and start eating there every day and every weekend' should be simple past 'we took food with us and started eating there on weekends' (past tense and article use). Combine corrections to match past-time context. Suggestion: use past simple consistently when describing habitual actions in childhood and fix subject-verb agreement and collocations.

× No, not too much because uh, I grew up. I am in 22 years old, so I don't like this. Just I like to go in the cinema and eating food in the restaurant just like that and hanging out with my friends.

✓ No, not very much because I have grown up. I am 22 years old, so I don't like it. I prefer going to the cinema, eating in restaurants, and hanging out with my friends.

Several tense and usage errors: 'I grew up' is acceptable but 'I have grown up' better explains current state (present perfect) -> Grammar problem type ID 6. 'I am in 22 years old' is incorrect use of preposition and structure; correct form is 'I am 22 years old' -> Grammar problem type ID 11. 'I don't like this' should be 'I don't like it' (pronoun use) -> Grammar problem type ID 12. 'Just I like to go in the cinema and eating food in the restaurant' mixes forms; use parallel gerund phrases 'I prefer going to the cinema, eating in restaurants' -> Grammar problem type ID 8. Suggestion: use correct age expression, correct pronoun, and keep verb forms parallel.

× Yes, I will take my children's in the future.

✓ Yes, I will take my children to parks in the future.

Errors: 'my children's' uses incorrect possessive/apostrophe and plural; should be 'my children' -> Grammar problem type ID 1. 'take my children in the future' is missing the preposition 'to' and the object 'parks' for clarity -> Grammar problem type ID 11. Also ensure future tense 'I will take' is fine. Suggestion: remove apostrophe, add 'to parks' to clarify meaning.

× Uh, no actually I don't like now go to parks, just I love 3D games.

✓ Uh, no. Actually I don't like going to parks now; I just love 3D games.

Errors: 'I don't like now go to parks' is incorrect word order and verb form; after 'like' use gerund 'going' and place 'now' appropriately -> Grammar problem type ID 8 and ID 20 (adverb placement). 'just I love' should be 'I just love' (word order) -> Grammar problem type ID 26. Suggestion: use 'I don't like going to parks now' and place adverbs in natural positions.