Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler sounds (uh, um), correct tense and plurality errors, and give one or two specific supporting details linked logically. Keep it under five sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. My family and I often played on the swings and joined in games like hide-and-seek, so I have many happy memories. Those visits taught me to enjoy outdoor activities and spending time with friends.

Sugestão: Correct sentence structure and word choice, remove repetition, and use linking words to connect ideas. Use correct subject-verb agreement and be specific about activities. Limit to three sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because the air is fresh and it is a good place to exercise. I often go jogging there and play games with my children, which helps us bond. As a result, the park is where we make many happy memories together.

Sugestão: Give a clear opinion with reasons using correct phrasing and fewer hesitations. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' properly and be specific about benefits. Keep under five sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they bring people together and provide green space to relax. For example, parks offer safe places for families to exercise and children to play. I was excited when a new amusement park opened recently and I plan to take my kids there.

Sugestão: Organize your answer: name the place clearly and describe it concisely. Avoid fillers and repetition, correct factual phrasing (‘Greenwich Park’ is a park), or clarify if it is a plant fair. Provide one clear reason and a linking word.

Exemplo: One place I'd like to visit is Greenwich Park. Alternatively, there is a nearby green fair where growers sell plants; I would like to take my children there to buy some plants and teach them about gardening.

× There were, uh, we enjoyed a lot when we were child.

✓ There were, uh, we enjoyed a lot when we were children.

The noun 'child' should be plural 'children' because the subject refers to more than one person (we). Use plural to match the plural subject. Suggestion: Use 'we were children' or 'when I was a child' depending on singular/plural perspective.

× I love going to the parks.

✓ I love going to parks.

Using 'the' before 'parks' implies specific parks already known; general habitual liking for parks uses no article. Remove 'the' for general meaning. Suggestion: Say 'I love going to parks' or specify 'the park' if referring to a particular park.

× There were swings and crisscross and lots of games we played there with my family and my friends.

✓ There were swings, a crisscross, and lots of games that we played there with my family and friends.

The original sentence lacks parallel structure and a clear connector. Add articles and relative pronoun 'that' to link 'lots of games' with the clause. Also remove redundant 'my' before 'friends'. Suggestion: Use consistent list structure: 'swings, a crisscross, and lots of games that we played there with my family and friends.'

× I have great memory there.

✓ I have great memories of it.

'Memory' should be plural 'memories' when talking about multiple recollections. Also use 'of it' or 'of that place' to indicate the location referenced. Present perfect 'have' is acceptable for current possession of memories. Suggestion: Say 'I have great memories of it' or 'I have great memories from there.'

× Yes, I still love to go to the parks because it going there to the bars, the air seems fresh.

✓ Yes, I still love to go to parks because when I go there, the air seems fresh.

The phrase 'it going there to the bars' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'when I go there'. Also remove 'the' before 'parks' for general meaning. Use a clause 'when I go there' to describe the condition. Suggestion: Use clear temporal clause: 'because when I go there, the air seems fresh.'

× I can go for jogging and playing with my kids in the parks.

✓ I can go jogging and play with my kids in the park.

After 'go' use the -ing form for activities: 'go jogging'. To list activities, keep parallel verbs: 'go jogging and play'. Also use 'the park' or 'parks' consistently; singular 'the park' is natural when speaking of a family outing. Suggestion: 'I can go jogging and play with my kids in the park.' or 'I can go jogging and play with my kids in parks.'

× My kids loves parks and uh we can create great memories also in the parks.

✓ My kids love parks and we can create great memories in the parks too.

Subject 'My kids' is plural, so verb should be 'love' not 'loves'. Also 'also' is better placed as 'too' at end; remove redundant 'uh'. Suggestion: Use plural verb agreement: 'My kids love parks.'

× Absolutely. I will love to because parks are the places where it connects people, where you can breathe fresh and you can see a lot of, uh, good gesture.

✓ Absolutely. I would love more because parks are places that connect people, where you can breathe fresh air and see many kind gestures.

'I will love to' is inappropriate for preference; use 'I would love' or 'I'd love' for desire. 'It connects people' should be 'parks connect people' or 'places that connect people.' 'Breathe fresh' needs the noun 'air.' 'Good gesture' should be plural and 'kind gestures' is more natural. Suggestion: Use conditional/modal 'would' for preferences and correct noun phrases: 'I would love more because parks are places that connect people, where you can breathe fresh air and see many kind gestures.'

× Recently it opened an amusement park.

✓ Recently an amusement park opened.

The impersonal 'it opened' is incorrect for events; use 'an amusement park opened' or 'a new amusement park opened recently.' Rearranging clarifies the subject. Suggestion: 'Recently a new amusement park opened.' or 'An amusement park opened recently.'

× There are many parks open recently in our area.

✓ Many parks have opened recently in our area.

The adverb 'recently' requires present perfect 'have opened' to indicate recent change affecting the present. 'There are many parks open recently' is ungrammatical. Suggestion: Use present perfect: 'Many parks have opened recently in our area.'

× 1 is uh, Greenwich Park.

✓ One is Greenwich Park.

Using the numeral '1' and filler 'uh' is informal and unclear. Spell out or say 'One is Greenwich Park.' and remove fillers. Suggestion: Say 'One is Greenwich Park.' or 'For example, Greenwich Park.'

× Actually it's not a park.

✓ Actually, it's not a park.

Comma after 'Actually' improves clarity; grammatically the sentence is acceptable but punctuation improves flow. Suggestion: Use comma after discourse markers: 'Actually, it's not a park.'

× Uh, it would be considered as umm, uh, as uh, as, as a fair, as a green fair, uh, where plants will be sold.

✓ It would be considered a green fair where plants are sold.

Remove excessive fillers and repeated 'as'. Use 'considered a green fair' (no 'as'). Use present simple 'are sold' for general facts rather than 'will be sold.' Suggestion: Say 'It would be considered a green fair where plants are sold.'

× I would love to go there with my kids, uh, also to buy some plants.

✓ I would love to go there with my kids and also buy some plants.

The original is mostly correct but improve parallelism: 'go there with my kids and also buy some plants.' Remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: Keep verbs parallel: 'go ... and buy ...'