Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar; start with a clear topic sentence, then add one brief supporting detail. Correct verb forms and articles, and avoid redundancy.

Exemplo: Not really. I don't have many memories of going to parks as a child because my parents were very busy and there was no one to take me. As a result, I spent more time at home reading or playing indoors.

Sugestão: Use correct noun forms, remove hesitations, and keep sentences short and coherent. Begin with a direct statement, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. They are my go-to place for stress relief because the fresh air and green space help me relax and clear my mind.

Sugestão: Avoid long or unfinished sentences and be specific. Start with a direct opinion, then explain reasons using linking words. Correct phrasing and finish your thought.

Exemplo: Absolutely. I would like more parks in my city because they improve people's health and provide free recreational space. For example, many parks here charge entrance fees, so I would promote free, well-maintained parks for all residents.

Sugestão: Avoid repetition and be specific about names and reasons. Give one clear preferred park and one specific reason for visiting, using linking words to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Yes. I'd love to visit Central Park in New York because of its famous walking paths and outdoor activities. I also plan to return to One Kim Lake in Vietnam since I enjoyed the peaceful atmosphere and the friendly crowds there.

× Sadly I didn't have any memories going to park because my parents were very busy and I didn't have any anyone to go with.

✓ Sadly I don't have any memories of going to parks because my parents were very busy and I didn't have anyone to go with.

The sentence misuses 'didn't have any memories going to park' and includes the redundant phrase 'any anyone'. Change to present simple 'don't have' to express a general lack of memories and use the preposition 'of' after 'memories'. 'Park' should be plural or 'the park' depending on meaning; 'parks' fits general statement. Remove the extra 'any' before 'anyone'. Also use 'anyone' without an article or determiner.

× That's a good question. Honestly Parks has been my go to place or my outlet, especially when I am having so much stress.

✓ That's a good question. Honestly parks have been my go-to places or my outlet, especially when I am under a lot of stress.

The noun 'parks' is plural so the verb should be 'have' (third-person plural). Also 'go to' as an adjective phrase should be hyphenated 'go-to'. 'Having so much stress' is awkward; use 'under a lot of stress' for natural English. Optionally keep singular 'park has been my go-to place' if referring to one park.

× It's it's giving me a mental detox, especially in this kind of era that we are living in.

✓ It's giving me a mental detox, especially in this era that we are living in.

Double 'It's' is a spoken disfluency and should be reduced to one 'It's'. 'This kind of era' is wordy; 'this era' is more natural. The present continuous 'we are living in' is acceptable, but removing redundancy makes the sentence clearer.

× Absolutely yes. If I become a politician, that would be my number of project as soon as I am elected to open more parks that are free to people.

✓ Absolutely yes. If I became a politician, that would be my number one project as soon as I was elected: to open more parks that are free to the public.

Use 'became' and 'was' to match the hypothetical past-tense conditional (second conditional) structure. 'Number of project' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'number one project'. 'Free to people' is awkward; use 'free to the public'. Adding a colon clarifies the intention to open parks.

× It is just sad because in the Philippines, the country where I live, in majority of the parks that are here you have to pay for an entrance fee but if it.

✓ It is just sad because in the Philippines, where I live, the majority of parks here require an entrance fee.

The original contains a fragment 'but if it' and awkward word order. Simplify to a clear subject-verb-object structure: 'the majority of parks here require an entrance fee.' Remove redundant phrases 'the country where I live' since 'in the Philippines, where I live' is sufficient.

× Absolutely. I have been eyeing that park in New York.

✓ Absolutely. I have been eyeing a park in New York.

If the speaker does not know the exact name, use the indefinite article 'a park' rather than 'that park', which implies a specific known park. Present perfect progressive 'have been eyeing' is acceptable for ongoing interest.

× I just don't know what the exact name of the park is.

✓ I just don't know the exact name of the park.

The phrase 'what the exact name of the park is' is grammatical but wordy; simplifying to 'the exact name of the park' is clearer. No tense change is needed.

× But aside from that, I'd love to go back to One Kim Lake because I went, I went in Vietnam last month and it was a very nice park and I'd love to go there again because I'd love to see a lot of people.

✓ But aside from that, I'd love to go back to One Kim Lake because I went to Vietnam last month and it was a very nice park, and I'd love to go there again to see many people.

Remove the duplicated 'I went, I went' (spoken repetition). Use 'went to Vietnam' for correct verb-preposition combination. Repeating 'I'd love' is redundant; combine ideas with 'and' and use 'to see many people' or 'to see lots of people' for natural phrasing.