Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make your answer a single coherent statement that directly addresses the question, then add one or two brief supporting details. Avoid sentence fragments and check tense consistency. For example, say you liked going and why (location, activities).

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to the park as a child because my apartment was very close, so it was convenient. I often played on the swings and fed the ducks, which made those visits memorable.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear topic sentence in the present tense, then explain specific benefits. Avoid unrelated or incorrect phrases (e.g. “make me cough”). Use linking words such as 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relax. For example, after starting at a new school I felt stressed, so walking among trees and breathing fresh air calmed me down.

Sugestão: Answer directly and use clear, natural reasons. Avoid overly technical or disjointed explanations. Use linking words ('because', 'so', 'which') and complete sentences. Give one concrete benefit (e.g. cleaner air, cooler temperatures, recreation).

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide cleaner air and shade. More trees would lower temperatures in summer and offer pleasant places for people to exercise and relax.

Sugestão: Name the park or describe it clearly, then explain why you want to visit using specific details. Keep sentences complete and logical, and connect ideas with words like 'because' or 'for example'.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit a park inspired by the novel Dream of the Red Chamber because I enjoy the book and am curious to see its landscapes in real life. I think the traditional gardens and pavilions would be beautiful and peaceful to explore.

× Yes, my apartment was near the park when I was a child, so it's convenient for me. To go into the park.

✓ Yes, my apartment was near the park when I was a child, so it was convenient for me to go to the park.

The original has a fragment 'To go into the park.' and mixes past context with present tense 'it's convenient'. This is a 'there be' type because of incorrect existence/placement and verb forms; more accurately it is sentence structure and tense consistency. Correct by making a single coherent past-tense sentence: change 'it's' to 'it was' and combine the fragment into 'to go to the park'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and avoid sentence fragments.

× Yes, I was under heavy stress after I attend to the new school, so going to the park can help me relieve my pressure and make me cough.

✓ Yes, I was under heavy stress after I attended the new school, so going to the park helped me relieve my stress and stop me from coughing.

The sentence mixes present and past: 'was' (past) with 'attend' (present). This is a present tense issue; use past 'attended' to match 'was'. Also 'relieve my pressure' is unnatural — use 'relieve my stress'. 'Make me cough' contradicts intended meaning; likely meant 'stop me from coughing' or 'help me breathe' so corrected to 'stop me from coughing'. Suggestion: match verb tenses and choose collocations like 'relieve stress' and clear verbs for outcomes.

× Yes, more parks means more plants.

✓ Yes, more parks mean more plants.

Subject 'more parks' is plural, so the verb must be plural 'mean' not 'means'. This is a subject-verb agreement error. Suggestion: identify plural subjects and use plural verb forms.

× The leaves. Green leaves on the plant can carry out photosynthesis.

✓ Green leaves on plants can carry out photosynthesis.

The original starts with a fragment 'The leaves.' which is unnecessary. Also 'on the plant' is singular while generalizing; better 'on plants'. This is a sentence structure error—remove the fragment and make a single coherent sentence. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments and be consistent with singular/plural when generalizing.

× Cancel a More oxygen will be emitted and urban urban heat island will.

✓ Consequently, more oxygen will be emitted and the urban heat island effect will be reduced.

The original is ungrammatical and contains wrong words ('Cancel a More') and repetition 'urban urban' and missing object for 'will'. This is an incorrect use of quantifiers and sentence structure. I corrected to 'Consequently' to connect ideas, 'more oxygen will be emitted' is acceptable, and completed the thought with 'the urban heat island effect will be reduced.' Suggestion: use appropriate linking words, avoid repetitions, and complete clauses with clear subjects and verbs.

× I want to go to in the future because it is. Field base on the basis of the novel The Dream of Red Mansion. I like that book.

✓ I want to go there in the future because it is a field based on the novel The Dream of the Red Chamber; I like that book.

This contains fragments ('because it is.'), wrong preposition 'to in', and awkward phrase 'Field base on the basis of the novel'. It's a sentence structure error and also involves incorrect use of nouns/articles. I corrected 'to there', combined fragments, used 'based on' and the standard English title 'The Dream of the Red Chamber'. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments, place prepositions correctly ('go there'), and use 'based on' for adaptations or locations inspired by a work.