Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is clear and personal, but there are some grammar and word-choice issues and one sentence is slightly long. Be careful with verb forms ("becoming" → "become") and countable nouns ("conversation skill" → "conversation skills"). Use one linking phrase to connect ideas and keep responses within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to the park with my grandmother. She took me to the nearby park every day and often introduced me to her friends, which helped me practise my conversation skills. I remember those afternoons vividly because they made me more confident speaking with adults.

Sugestão: Your response contains good ideas but has several grammar, punctuation and word-choice errors and some redundancy (two "moreover"). Improve sentence structure: use simple present tense correctly, avoid redundant phrases, and use linking words appropriately. Make details specific (e.g., what activities you do in the park).

Exemplo: Yes, I still go to parks regularly. As a dietitian I try to stay fit, so I walk or jog in the park every evening to unwind after my clinic shifts. This routine refreshes me physically and helps me relax mentally.

Sugestão: The answer communicates the main point but is unclear in places and contains grammatical errors and incomplete sentence at the end. Avoid repeating words ("bustling city" and "city"). Provide concrete examples and finish your thought. Use linking words like "because" or "therefore" to explain reasons.

Exemplo: Yes, I would. My city has become very overcrowded and traffic congestion is a daily problem, and several community parks have been demolished for new buildings. Therefore, I would like to see more green spaces so residents have places to relax, exercise and breathe cleaner air.

Sugestão: Your answer shows interest and includes details, but hesitations ("um", "uh"), awkward phrases ("crawling Facebook stories"), and grammar issues reduce fluency. Be specific about the park's name or features and avoid filler words. Use two to three clear sentences with linking words like "because" or "for example."

Exemplo: Yes, I want to visit a nature park in Gujarat that I saw on Facebook; it looked captivating. It is famous for hosting endangered species and a rare hybrid cat, which I would like to see because I am interested in wildlife conservation.

× they helped me becoming more confident speaking with adults.

✓ they helped me become more confident speaking with adults.

Use the base form after verbs like 'help' when followed by another verb; 'help someone become' is correct, not 'help someone becoming'. Suggestion: Use 'helped me become' or 'helped me to become'. Replace 'becoming' with 'become'.

× Being a dietitian, I am very much interested to keep myself fit and healthy.

✓ Being a dietitian, I am very interested in keeping myself fit and healthy.

After 'interested', use the preposition 'in' plus a gerund when describing an activity. Also 'very much interested to keep' is unidiomatic. Use 'interested in keeping'. Suggestion: Use 'interested in' + gerund: 'interested in keeping'.

× I practice what I preach.

✓ I practice what I preach.

No grammatical correction needed; sentence is correct. (Included only if needed: keep as is.)

× I go to park daily in the evening hours because that time I want to unwind myself from stress after acting clinic schedules.

✓ I go to the park daily in the evening because at that time I want to unwind from stress after busy clinic schedules.

Use the definite article 'the park' when referring to a specific park, and 'daily in the evening hours' is wordy; 'daily in the evening' is better. 'At that time' clarifies timing, and 'unwind myself from stress' is awkward; use 'unwind from stress'. 'Acting clinic schedules' is unclear; likely 'busy clinic schedules'. Suggestion: Use 'go to the park', 'in the evening', 'unwind from stress', and replace unclear phrase with 'busy clinic schedules'.

× Moreover, it keep me refreshing and mentally rejuvenate me.

✓ Moreover, it keeps me refreshed and mentally rejuvenated.

Subject-verb agreement: 'it' requires 'keeps' (third person singular). 'Keep me refreshing' is incorrect: use 'keeps me refreshed'. Also avoid repeating 'me' twice; use 'mentally rejuvenated' as an adjective phrase. Suggestion: Use 'it keeps me refreshed and mentally rejuvenated'.

× My city is a bustling city and moreover, it has become overcrowded these days.

✓ My city is bustling and has become overcrowded these days.

Redundant words: 'My city is a bustling city' repeats 'city'. Streamline to 'My city is bustling'. Also 'moreover' is optional; here combine clauses for clarity. Suggestion: Remove redundancy and tighten sentence.

× Traffic congestion is a daily basis for problem and for people who used to go to the environment park that has demolished and converted into skyscrapers.

✓ Traffic congestion is a daily problem, and the park that people used to visit has been demolished and converted into skyscrapers.

Original sentence has word order and article issues. Use 'a daily problem' not 'daily basis for problem'. 'People who used to go to the environment park' is awkward; 'the park that people used to visit' is clearer. Use passive 'has been demolished and converted' to show change. Suggestion: Use 'a daily problem', 'the park that people used to visit', and passive 'has been demolished'.

× So I really want to see more green space in my city so that.

✓ So I really want to see more green space in my city.

Sentence ends with an incomplete clause 'so that' with no result. Remove the trailing 'so that' or complete the clause ('so that people can relax'). Suggestion: Either finish the thought ('so that people can relax') or remove 'so that'.

× I'm highly interested to explore the nature park which is in the Gujarat, um, state and I saw this park while I was crawling Facebook stories and uh, it was captivating.

✓ I'm very interested in exploring a nature park in Gujarat state; I saw it while scrolling through Facebook stories, and it was captivating.

Use 'interested in' + gerund ('interested in exploring'). 'The Gujarat, um, state' should be 'Gujarat state' or 'the state of Gujarat' without 'the' before Gujarat. 'Crawling Facebook stories' is incorrect; use 'scrolling through Facebook stories'. Suggestion: Use 'interested in exploring', 'in Gujarat' or 'the state of Gujarat', and 'scrolling through Facebook stories'.

× The most striking feature about this park that it has endangered species and also some hybrid cat which is the center of attraction.

✓ The most striking feature of this park is that it has endangered species and a hybrid cat that is the centre of attraction.

Use 'feature of this park is that' for correct structure. 'Some hybrid cat' is vague; use 'a hybrid cat'. 'Which is the center of attraction' should be 'that is the centre of attraction' or 'which is the centre of attraction' but with correct clause structure. Also use consistent spelling 'centre' or 'center' depending on variety. Suggestion: Use 'The most striking feature of this park is that...', 'a hybrid cat', and correct relative clause 'that is the centre of attraction'.