Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct and clear: start with a simple topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid unrelated or unclear words (e.g. "sewing" seems out of place) and correct basic grammar (tense and article use). Use linking words like "because" to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child because I lived in an apartment and had no garden. I often played games and ran around with my friends there, which made it a fun place to spend afternoons.

Sugestão: Keep the answer natural and grammatical: use correct verb forms and clear vocabulary. Give one clear reason and a brief specific detail. Avoid unclear phrases like "my sinks Li be laid clear" — choose precise expressions such as "I feel refreshed" or "it clears my mind."

Exemplo: Yes, I still like going to parks and often take walks there. Walking in the fresh air helps me feel refreshed and clears my mind after a busy day.

Sugestão: Answer directly and support with a clear reason and specific detail. Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement) and use precise vocabulary: instead of "lead them more educational," say "provide better opportunities for learning and play." Use a linking word like "because."

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because many children live here. More parks would give them safe places to play and learn social skills through outdoor activities.

Sugestão: Give a concise direct answer, then one or two specific reasons. Fix run-on sentences by using linking words or splitting into two sentences. Be specific about activities and use natural phrasing (e.g. "water sports park").

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit a water sports park in the future because I enjoy swimming and other water activities. I think exercising there would be fun and very refreshing, so I hope to go soon.

× Yes, I prefer to like the sewing with my friend.

✓ Yes, I used to like sewing with my friend.

The original mixes 'prefer' and 'like' incorrectly and uses the article 'the' with 'sewing' unnecessarily. 'Prefer to like' is ungrammatical. Use 'used to like' to describe a past habitual preference. Also drop 'the' before the gerund 'sewing' when speaking generally. Suggestion: say 'I used to like sewing with my friend.'

× I lived at the apartment, so instead of playing in the garden, I went to the park.

✓ I lived in an apartment, so instead of playing in a garden, I went to the park.

Use 'in' rather than 'at' for living inside a building. 'An apartment' is indefinite because it is not previously specified. 'The garden' implies a specific garden; use 'a garden' to express a general alternative. The rest of the sentence is fine.

× Yes, I like going to parks and take a walk.

✓ Yes, I like going to parks and taking walks.

Parallel structure requires matching verb forms after 'like': 'going' and 'taking' (both gerunds). Also plural 'walks' is more natural when speaking generally. Change 'take a walk' to 'taking walks'.

× Taking a walk makes me clean feeling and my sinks Li be laid clear.

✓ Taking a walk makes me feel refreshed and clears my mind.

'Makes me clean feeling' is incorrect word order and word choice; use 'makes me feel refreshed' or 'clean' as an adjective with 'feel'. The second clause appears unintelligible ('my sinks Li be laid clear'); likely intended 'my mind becomes clear' or 'clears my mind'. Use clear, natural expressions: 'clears my mind.'

× Yes, a lot of children lives in my city, so I think making more parks can lead them more educational.

✓ Yes, a lot of children live in my city, so I think making more parks can make them more educated.

'Children' is plural and requires the plural verb 'live' not 'lives'. The phrase 'lead them more educational' is ungrammatical; use 'make them more educated' or 'provide more educational opportunities for them.' Suggestion: 'can provide more educational opportunities for them.'

× I want to go to a water athletic park in the future, we can do more exercise and feel refreshed to play there, so I want to visit at once.

✓ I want to go to a water sports park in the future; we could get more exercise and feel refreshed playing there, so I want to visit it soon.

'Water athletic park' is not natural; use 'water sports park'. The sentence is a run-on; replace the comma with a semicolon or split into two sentences. Use modal consistency: 'we could get more exercise' or 'we can get more exercise'. 'Feel refreshed to play there' is awkward—use 'feel refreshed playing there'. 'Visit at once' is formal/urgent; 'visit it soon' is more natural. Also add the object pronoun 'it' after 'visit.'