Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 문장 구조와 시제, 관사 사용에 주의하세요. 대답은 주제를 바로 제시한 뒤 구체적 세부사항(누구와, 무엇을, 왜 특별했는지)을 연결어로 자연스럽게 덧붙이되 문장 수는 3~4문장으로 유지하세요. 또한 ‘eat’ 대신 ‘eating’ 같은 동명사 형태와 ‘a meaningful memory’처럼 관사 사용을 고치세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks with my family as a child. We often had picnics on the grass, eating snacks and drinking juice together. Because of those relaxed afternoons and family time, the visits remain a meaningful childhood memory for me.

Sugestão: 정보를 명확하고 간결하게 표현하세요. 시제와 인칭(‘your parks’ → ‘the parks’)을 바로잡고, 숫자 표현은 더 자연스럽게 말하세요. 핵심문장(현재도 좋아한다)을 먼저 말한 뒤 이유와 추가 정보(아기의 나이, 공원에 데려가는 이유)를 연결어로 덧붙이세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to the parks. Last December I had a baby, and she will be eight months old in two weeks, so I like taking her there for fresh air and a walk.

Sugestão: 문법과 어휘 선택을 다듬으세요(‘parks is’→‘parks are’, ‘I acquired satisfied’는 부적절). 문장을 명확히 완료하고 이유를 구체적으로 설명하세요. 연결어를 사용해 주관적 의견과 그 이유를 분리하세요.

Exemplo: To be honest, not really. I’m satisfied with the parks we already have because they are well organized and have a long, popular trail for walking and cycling.

Sugestão: 아이디어는 좋지만 문장을 더 명료하게 구성하세요. ‘stamp program’에 대해 설명하고 왜 가고 싶은지(경험, 기분, 아기와의 활동)를 구체적으로 말하세요. 문장은 2~3개로 압축하여 연결어로 논리를 정리하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit some national parks in the United States. I heard there is a passport-style program where you collect stamps at each site, and completing it would give me a sense of achievement while enjoying outdoor trips with my baby.

× Yes, I liked going to parks with my family and especially I loved doing some picnics on the grass and eat some snacks and drinks.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks with my family and especially I loved having picnics on the grass and eating snacks and drinking beverages.

The verbs after 'loved' should use the -ing form (gerund) when describing activities: 'loved having' and 'eating'. Additionally, parallel structure requires similar forms: 'eating snacks and drinking beverages' rather than mixing base forms. Use 'having picnics' not 'doing some picnics'. Suggestion: Use gerunds after verbs like 'enjoy' or 'love' and keep parallel structure.

× So it is so special and meaningful memory still I have.

✓ So it is a very special and meaningful memory that I still have.

This sentence lacks proper article and word order. 'Memory' needs an article 'a', and the clause 'that I still have' should follow to be grammatically natural. 'So it is so special' is repetitive; 'a very special' is clearer. Suggestion: Use 'a' before singular countable nouns and place relative clauses after the noun.

× Yes, I do still love going to your parks because last December I had a baby and she is, she will turn in eight months in two weeks, so I love taking her to park.

✓ Yes, I still love going to parks because last December I had a baby and she will be eight months old in two weeks, so I love taking her to the park.

'Your parks' is inappropriate when speaking about parks in general; use 'parks'. The phrase 'she is, she will turn in eight months in two weeks' is incorrect tense and structure. Use 'she will be eight months old in two weeks'. Also 'take her to park' needs the definite article 'the park'. Suggestion: Use natural pronoun references and correct future-time expressions for ages ('will be X months old').

× To be honest, no, I think our neighborhood parks is so good and well organized.

✓ To be honest, no, I think our neighborhood parks are very good and well organized.

'Parks' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. Also 'so good' is colloquial; 'very good' is more natural. 'Well organized' is correct. Suggestion: Ensure subject and verb agree in number: plural subjects take plural verbs.

× So I acquired satisfied with that and our parks have long trail which is so famous, so I really.

✓ So I am satisfied with that, and our parks have long trails which are quite famous, so I really like them.

'Acquired satisfied' is incorrect; use 'am satisfied'. 'Parks have long trail' needs plural 'trails' and plural verb 'are' for 'which are famous'. The sentence was incomplete ('so I really' needs an object). Complete the thought: 'so I really like them.' Suggestion: Use correct linking verbs ('am satisfied') and complete sentences with subjects and verbs; match plural nouns and verbs.

× Yes, I heard from my friends that there are a lot of national parks in the United States, so they have some program that we have to collect some stamp in each site so I can have a sense of fulfillment with my baby.

✓ Yes, I heard from my friends that there are a lot of national parks in the United States, and they have a program where we have to collect a stamp at each site, so I can have a sense of fulfillment with my baby.

Use 'a program where' to introduce the clause. 'Collect some stamp' is incorrect; use 'collect a stamp' or 'collect stamps'. 'In each site' should be 'at each site'. Also use conjunction 'and' for smoother connection. Maintain gerund/infinitive consistency where needed. Suggestion: Use 'a' for singular countable nouns, use 'at' for locations like 'site', and choose singular/plural consistently when describing collection activities.