Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make the answer more natural and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Correct tense and subject-verb agreement, avoid redundancy and keep to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. My parents often took me there on weekends, and we would walk around the pond while I fed the ducks.

Sugestão: Reduce hesitations and improve grammar and word choice. Use one clear sentence stating your habit, then add a specific reason with proper verb forms and linking words. Avoid repeating 'usually'.

Exemplo: Absolutely. I go to the park on my days off to exercise, and it helps me relax because the fresh air and green space calm me down.

Sugestão: Speak clearly and organize the idea: give a direct answer, then specify where and why parks are needed. Remove fillers and correct vocabulary (park vs part). Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example'.

Exemplo: Yes, I would. I think we need more parks in the city centre, for example near schools and hospitals, because they provide relaxing spaces for students and visitors.

Sugestão: Give a concise answer with correct word order and clearer details. State the park name, its location, and one reason why you want to visit. Correct grammar (‘is located’, ‘entertainment park’, 'for all ages').

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit Everland Park in South Korea because it is a large amusement park with rides and attractions suitable for all ages.

× Yes I did. When I was a kid I used to go to the park for a walk and my mom or my dad usually take me to the park to relax in every weekend.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was a kid, I used to go to the park for a walk and my mom or my dad usually took me to the park to relax every weekend.

The sentence mixes past tense with present tense. 'Used to' and 'When I was a kid' signal past time, so the verb 'take' should be in the past form 'took'. Also 'in every weekend' is incorrect preposition usage; 'every weekend' is correct. Add commas for clarity.

× Absolutely yes. I usually go to the park, umm, when I have free time, uh alone and I usually go there for direct exercise and it's make me feel unwind.

✓ Absolutely, yes. I usually go to the park when I have free time, alone, and I usually go there for exercise, and it makes me feel relaxed.

Several tense and word-form issues: 'it's make' is incorrect because 'it' with present simple requires 'makes' (third person singular). 'Direct exercise' is unnatural; use 'exercise'. 'Feel unwind' is incorrect adjective; use 'feel relaxed'. Remove filler words and fix punctuation. These are present-tense subject-verb agreement and adjective use corrections.

× Umm yes I do umm I would like more see more parts umm, in the center of city, umm apparently umm next umm the uh, next the uh, school or hospital.

✓ Yes, I would. I would like to see more parks in the city center, especially near schools or hospitals.

The original has word order and vocabulary errors: 'more see more parts' should be 'see more parks' and 'parts' is wrong word. 'In the center of city' needs article and natural order: 'in the city center'. Remove fillers and redundant words. This correction fixes sentence structure, word choice, and article use.

× I would like to go to UMM Everland Park which located in South Korea UMM as I know it's is a entertain park for every UMM age.

✓ I would like to go to Everland Park, which is located in South Korea. As far as I know, it is an amusement park for people of all ages.

Multiple problems: the relative clause needs the verb 'is located' (present tense). 'It's is' is redundant; use 'it is'. 'A entertain park' is incorrect adjective form; use 'an amusement park'. 'Every age' is unnatural; use 'people of all ages'. Fix punctuation and remove filler 'UMM'. This addresses present participle/verb form and article/adjective errors.