Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, use correct tense and articles, avoid repetition, and add one specific detail. Keep it under five sentences. Use linking words like 'also' or 'often' to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often rode my bicycle there and sometimes walked around the lake. Also, on weekends I usually went with my parents and we would have a picnic by the playground.

Sugestão: Answer directly and correct unclear words (e.g. 'warde n'). Use a short topic sentence then give a clear reason with a specific detail. Avoid filler words and repetition.

Exemplo: Not very much. I prefer going to the beach because it feels more relaxing and cooler, and I enjoy the sea breeze and open space more than park paths.

Sugestão: Make a concise, grammatically correct statement. Use linking words to explain reasons and give a specific example of what parks offer (e.g. playgrounds, walking trails). Avoid hesitations and repetition.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like more parks in the city because they are important public facilities. For example, parks provide space for exercise, children's playgrounds, and peaceful places to relax.

Sugestão: Give a clear direct answer, then explain with specific details in two sentences. Correct tense and phrasing (use 'I'm' and 'I spend'). Avoid repeating 'used to' incorrectly and provide a clear reason or plan.

Exemplo: Not really, because I'm a high school student and I'm quite busy with studying. I usually spend my free time in the library preparing for exams, so I don't have time to visit parks at the moment.

× Oh well, I really like to go to park.

✓ Oh well, I really like to go to the park.

The noun 'park' here is a singular, countable noun referring to a specific type of place in general; English requires the definite article 'the' when talking about going to a place like 'the park' in general contexts. Use 'the park' instead of 'park'. Suggestions: Use 'the' with singular countable places (go to the park, go to the cinema).

× When I was a child I used to go to park to to drive bicycle or I go there for a walk and at the weekend I usually go to the park with my parents.

✓ When I was a child I used to go to the park to ride a bicycle or to go there for a walk, and at the weekend I usually went to the park with my parents.

Multiple issues: 'go to park' needs the article 'the' (article errors) and 'drive bicycle' is incorrect verb choice and missing article; 'ride a bicycle' is correct. The clause 'I go there for a walk' should match past habitual 'used to' so use 'went' or 'used to go there for a walk'. 'At the weekend I usually go' should be past habit 'usually went'. Suggestions: Keep tense consistent for past habits (used to + base verb or simple past), use 'ride a bicycle', and include 'the' before 'park'.

× Actually, I'm not really, but I prefer to go to the beach because the beach is more warden and it's it's very cool and I like the atmosphere at the beach.

✓ Actually, not really, but I prefer to go to the beach because the beach is more welcoming and it's very cool, and I like the atmosphere there.

Problems: 'I'm not really' is incomplete — should be 'not really' in response; 'more warden' is incorrect word choice; likely intended 'more warm' or 'more welcoming' — 'warden' is wrong. Repeated 'it's it's' is duplication. Repeating 'at the beach' is redundant; use 'there'. Suggestions: Choose correct adjective ('welcoming' or 'warmer'), remove duplicated words, and use 'there' to avoid repetition.

× Umm yes, I would like to see more parks in my cities because it is one of the the most. Important of facilities in our in our. CT is the parts is the place for people to relax or do exercise.

✓ Umm yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they are one of the most important facilities in our area. Parks are places for people to relax or exercise.

Errors: 'my cities' should be 'my city' if referring to one city; agreement between subject and predicate needed. Fragmented sentences and repeated words ('the the', 'in our in our', 'CT is the parts') are unclear. 'is the parts' is ungrammatical; use plural 'parks are places'. Suggestions: Use singular/plural consistently (my city / parks are), remove duplicates, and combine fragments into clear sentences.

× Actually not, because currently I'm a student studying high school so that I'm quite busy. So I used to spend time to. I used to spend time in the library to learn my deadlines and some protect.

✓ Actually, no, because I'm currently a high school student, so I'm quite busy. I usually spend time in the library to meet my deadlines and work on some projects.

Problems: 'studying high school' is awkward — use 'a high school student' or 'studying at high school'. 'So that I'm quite busy' is incorrect connector; use 'so I'm quite busy'. 'I used to spend time' implies past habit, but context is present; use 'I usually spend time' or 'I spend time'. 'to learn my deadlines and some protect' is incorrect: 'learn my deadlines' should be 'meet my deadlines' and 'protect' is wrong word; intended 'projects'. Suggestions: Match present-tense habit with 'usually' or present simple, use correct collocations ('meet deadlines', 'work on projects'), and simplify connectors.