Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve grammar (past tense consistency), simplify and make one clear topic sentence, add a specific supporting detail, and use linking words to connect ideas. Keep it to no more than 4–5 sentences. Focus on accurate verb forms (liked, played) and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. I often met my friends there and we played cricket or football together, which was great fun. Because the park had large open fields and a safe environment, we spent whole afternoons playing and talking. I still remember those times fondly and hope to reunite with my old friends to play again.

Sugestão: Make the response concise and correct grammar (use present simple: I like, they help). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because, so). Avoid unclear phrases like "pleasure of legs."

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I go because they help me relax and reduce the stress I get from work and study. For example, walking among trees and sitting by a pond calms me and improves my mood, so I try to visit a park at least once a week.

Sugestão: Use clearer sentences and correct tense and articles. Start with direct answer, then give a specific reason and an example. Use linking words (however, because) and avoid repetition. Mention concrete issues (urban development taking space) to strengthen your point.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. In the past there were many green spaces, but because of rapid urban development and new buildings, we now have fewer parks. More parks would provide places for families and children to play and improve residents' health, so the city should protect or create more green areas.

Sugestão: Give a clear, complete answer: name the park, state why you want to go, and mention plans. Use correct grammar (I would like to visit, I will visit, my friends) and linking words (because, so) to connect reasons and plans. Keep it concise and specific.

Exemplo: Yes. I want to visit a theme park in Liaquatabad (Liberia town) in my city. I plan to go there with some friends next month because the park has recently been renovated and I am curious to see the new attractions. We hope to spend the day trying rides and taking photos together.

× When I was a child, I like to most going to the park because whenever I visited visited a society park so I met my friends and we play a cricket or football.

✓ When I was a child, I liked going to the park most because whenever I visited the park in my neighborhood I met my friends and we played cricket or football.

The sentence mixes past and present tense and has incorrect verb forms and articles. 'When I was a child' sets past time, so 'like' should be past 'liked' (Present tense issue -> use past). 'to most going' is incorrect word order; use 'liked going to the park most'. Remove duplicate 'visited' and use 'the park in my neighborhood' instead of 'a society park'. 'we play' should be past 'we played' to match past time. Suggestion: keep all verbs in past tense and simplify phrasing.

× I still remember this activities and I wish I will nowadays I able to play those activity with my old friends.

✓ I still remember these activities and I wish that nowadays I were able to play those activities with my old friends.

Errors include plural/number and verb forms. 'this activities' should be 'these activities' (plural agreement). 'I wish I will' is incorrect; after 'wish' for unreal present situations use past form 'I wish I were able' (Verb + -ing form / mood). Also 'those activity' should be 'those activities'. Suggestion: use correct plural forms and use past subjunctive 'were' for wishes about present ability.

× Yes I do I like them all going to the parks because parks help me to feel relaxed and they have also helped me to reduce my stress which I get from the my work or study and the refreshing around surrounding me and here feel me a more pleasure of legs.

✓ Yes, I do. I like going to parks because they help me feel relaxed and have helped reduce the stress I get from my work or studies; the fresh surroundings make me feel more comfortable.

Many tense and word-choice problems. 'I like them all going to the parks' is awkward — use 'I like going to parks'. 'they have also helped me to reduce my stress which I get from the my work or study' should be 'have helped reduce the stress I get from my work or studies'. 'the refreshing around surrounding me and here feel me a more pleasure of legs' is ungrammatical; replace with 'the fresh surroundings make me feel more comfortable'. Suggestion: simplify sentences, maintain present simple for habitual actions, fix articles and noun forms.

× So I like to go parks.

✓ So I like to go to parks.

Missing preposition 'to' after 'go' and article use. 'go parks' is ungrammatical; correct phrase is 'go to parks' or 'go to the park'. Suggestion: use 'go to' + place.

× Yes, absolutely I would like to see a see more parks in my city, especially Karachi and there's a place number of parks in my city.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I would like to see more parks in my city, especially in Karachi; there are a number of parks in my city.

Redundant words and incorrect structure. 'a see more parks' should be 'see more parks'. 'there's a place number of parks' is incorrect; use 'there are a number of parks'. Suggestion: remove duplicates and use 'there are' for plural existence.

× In the older time we had a too much park but due to the development and infrastructure so nowadays has he had a less park.

✓ In the past we had many parks, but due to development and infrastructure, nowadays we have fewer parks.

Multiple tense and quantifier errors. 'older time' -> 'in the past'. 'had a too much park' -> 'had many parks' ('too much' is for uncountable nouns). 'nowadays has he had a less park' is ungrammatical; use present 'we have fewer parks'. Suggestion: use 'fewer' for countable plural decline and keep tense consistent.

× But I wish we can get more parks in.

✓ But I hope we can get more parks.

'I wish we can' is incorrect; for realistic future possibility use 'I hope we can'. 'get more parks in' has extra preposition. Suggestion: use 'I hope' + modal 'can' for possible future, and place objects directly.

× Is 1 open? The park is located in Liberia town in my city.

✓ Is it open? The park is located in Liaquatabad town in my city.

'Is 1 open?' seems to be a misheard 'Is it open?' so correct pronoun needed (There be/Question formation). Also 'Liberia town' likely a place-name error; I corrected to a plausible local name 'Liaquatabad' but if original is 'Liberty' adjust accordingly. Suggestion: use correct pronoun 'it' in yes/no questions.

× The park name is a theme park.

✓ The park's name is Theme Park.

Better phrasing is 'The park's name is Theme Park' or 'The park is called Theme Park'. 'a theme park' implies type, not the specific name. Suggestion: use possessive or 'is called' to state the proper name.

× I would like to visit it and I visit in upcoming months and with my some other friend.

✓ I would like to visit it in the coming months with some friends.

'I visit in upcoming months' mixes tenses; use 'visit in the coming months' or 'visit it in the coming months'. 'with my some other friend' is incorrect word order; use 'with some friends' or 'with some other friends'. Suggestion: use 'in the coming months' and correct noun phrase order.

× We are planning to visit this park and because of I want to see what new development in this park happened.

✓ We are planning to visit this park because I want to see what new developments have happened there.

Tense and word order problems. 'because of I want' should be 'because I want'. 'what new development in this park happened' needs present perfect 'have happened' to refer to changes up to now, and 'developments' plural. Suggestion: use 'have happened' for recent past affecting present and correct word order.